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Comment from ersorenson
I've been gone, but I started back reading your poem for the 6th of June because I knew you would write about D Day. You did and it is a poignant reminder of the sacrifices made for us. Thanks for honoring them.
Eric
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2009
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I've been gone, but I started back reading your poem for the 6th of June because I knew you would write about D Day. You did and it is a poignant reminder of the sacrifices made for us. Thanks for honoring them.
Eric
Comment Written 13-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2009
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Eric, how good it is to see you! Thank you so much for this most generous and thoughtful review. I hope to be seeing more of you - and your work :-) Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke How true you excellent poem and your authors notes are also excellent. You know I can remember 'D' day I was a young child and in the local butcher with my mother and everyone was talking about it, with happeness and hope in their voices. LOL Gaye
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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Hi Brooke How true you excellent poem and your authors notes are also excellent. You know I can remember 'D' day I was a young child and in the local butcher with my mother and everyone was talking about it, with happeness and hope in their voices. LOL Gaye
Comment Written 12-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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I read that Anne Frank got all excited about D Day, wondering if they would get to return to school in September after an Allied victory. That gives me chills. Thanks so much, Gaye. Brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
A great paean to those who died on the beach at Normandy. Excellent execution of the abab ccdd rhyme scheme of a rispetto. Good alliteration in the second and eighth line.
However, the meter in the first line is off and rispettos have to have strict meter. "Nobody" is accented on the first syllable. if you replace that with another word, I'll re-review.
Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2009
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A great paean to those who died on the beach at Normandy. Excellent execution of the abab ccdd rhyme scheme of a rispetto. Good alliteration in the second and eighth line.
However, the meter in the first line is off and rispettos have to have strict meter. "Nobody" is accented on the first syllable. if you replace that with another word, I'll re-review.
Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2009
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thank you, Alvin, for your thoughtful comments. Nope, won't be rewriting. Brooke
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Understood. I am only one reviewer, and you know what a perfectionist I am. Sometimes it is helpful; sometimes not. I know that.
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I find a focus on "perfect" accenting, etc one that takes the focus away from what means far more to me :-)
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Yes, we have agreed to disagree on that. I see form as enhancing content, rather than taking away from it.
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obviously, I see form as enhancing content also, or I would not write so many form poems - it is a matter of degree. :-)
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That's quite true.
Comment from Pen&Ink
This is very good, Brooke. It is a short, powerful tribute to all the armed forces who stormed those beaches, or made it possible to storm them. My dad arrived in Europe on December 1, 1944, just in time for the "Battle of the Bulge," Hitler's last gasp offensive which eventually fizzled out. Dad always expressed trememdous respect and gratitude for those who preceeded him. He was a medic in the 69th Division. He was also scared spitless!
Enough about me. You did a very good job with this poem. I wouldn't change a thing.
Ray
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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This is very good, Brooke. It is a short, powerful tribute to all the armed forces who stormed those beaches, or made it possible to storm them. My dad arrived in Europe on December 1, 1944, just in time for the "Battle of the Bulge," Hitler's last gasp offensive which eventually fizzled out. Dad always expressed trememdous respect and gratitude for those who preceeded him. He was a medic in the 69th Division. He was also scared spitless!
Enough about me. You did a very good job with this poem. I wouldn't change a thing.
Ray
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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My dad was in the Navy in the Pacific and never talked about it. Ray, our fathers went through things I'm so grateful I cannot even really imagine. Thank you, Brooke : -)
Comment from Lokman
A great uncle I never knew was in a Ranger battalion that attacked German artillery positions to the south of Omaha beach. He gave his life that day. As fewer survivors remain, it is worklike this that we need to constantly remind us of the sacrifices made.
Shea
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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A great uncle I never knew was in a Ranger battalion that attacked German artillery positions to the south of Omaha beach. He gave his life that day. As fewer survivors remain, it is worklike this that we need to constantly remind us of the sacrifices made.
Shea
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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Shea, thank you. Omaha Beach, of course, was the bloodiest of the landings by far. We are all in your uncle's debt. Brooke
Comment from Artasylum
i have to tell you adwepearl...i pray from the bottom of my soul that the generation that is coming up now knows how hard, how much sacrifice, how much loss...these beautiful souls paid for our lifestyles...yours, diana
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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i have to tell you adwepearl...i pray from the bottom of my soul that the generation that is coming up now knows how hard, how much sacrifice, how much loss...these beautiful souls paid for our lifestyles...yours, diana
Comment Written 08-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Diana, I'm sorry to let you know that many in the younger generations couldn't even tell you what decade or continent this poem is talking about. That is just the sad truth. Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is one of those moments in history that I think will be forever immortalised (is that phrase a redundancy?), and quite rightly so. Few things can so encapsulate both the abject, hopeless horror and the pride, determination and triumph that war can inspire all in one event.
Mike
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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This is one of those moments in history that I think will be forever immortalised (is that phrase a redundancy?), and quite rightly so. Few things can so encapsulate both the abject, hopeless horror and the pride, determination and triumph that war can inspire all in one event.
Mike
Comment Written 08-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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yes, it is redundant, but I don't care! LOL Thank you, Mike :-)
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
You're in a bleak place here, dude. What's up? You need a hug? I'm good at hugs. Ask my wife, she'll tell ya'. i can give ya' a hug that'll make yer bones creak.
Good poem, Brooke.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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You're in a bleak place here, dude. What's up? You need a hug? I'm good at hugs. Ask my wife, she'll tell ya'. i can give ya' a hug that'll make yer bones creak.
Good poem, Brooke.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Nescher, thank you - I'm fine - just wanted to commemorate the day, and a happy poem about it just didn't seem in order! LOL Brooke :-) And any hugs you ever want to send me are always welcome :-)
Comment from RapturedHeart
Very well done, and poignant, Brooke. Each life is precious and remembered - especially on Remembrance Day (what we have here), and the world over by those who value their freedom. But, most of all - each is intimately known by God. Your posts are always thought provoking. Take care,
Heather
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Very well done, and poignant, Brooke. Each life is precious and remembered - especially on Remembrance Day (what we have here), and the world over by those who value their freedom. But, most of all - each is intimately known by God. Your posts are always thought provoking. Take care,
Heather
Comment Written 07-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Heather, thank you. I so appreciate your thoughtfulness. Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"D Day" is a sad, yet beautifully written rispetto poem. If there was ever a hell on earth, that day was it. Well written and chilling to read.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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"D Day" is a sad, yet beautifully written rispetto poem. If there was ever a hell on earth, that day was it. Well written and chilling to read.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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Yes, I cannot imagine the horrors those men lived through, the ones who survived. Thank you, Brooke
