Raspberries and Cream
reflective septolet103 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Your septolet and the image you paint with the two verses, sure makes the reader stop instantly and think how trivial our complaints and wishes are. Oh, to give up delights like raspberries and cream to feed a starving child.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Your septolet and the image you paint with the two verses, sure makes the reader stop instantly and think how trivial our complaints and wishes are. Oh, to give up delights like raspberries and cream to feed a starving child.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Indy, on Tuesdays I serve breakfast at the local daytime shelter. Someone had donated several cantaloupes in addition to our regular fare of cereal and donated bread/pastries. You would have thought the small pieces we cut them up into were nuggets of gold the way people's eyes lit up. Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Brooke,
Such a vivid image evoked from so few words. The difference between want and need. It is a shame that in such a plentiful world that so many should be in need. Thank you for sharing and God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
reply by the author on 27-May-2009
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Hi Brooke,
Such a vivid image evoked from so few words. The difference between want and need. It is a shame that in such a plentiful world that so many should be in need. Thank you for sharing and God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 27-May-2009
reply by the author on 27-May-2009
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Thank you for your perceptive comments - we live in a society where many people believe their needs are wants and those same people are blind to the true needs of others. Brooke
Comment from bard owl
Your poem shows the stark descrepancy between the "haves" and "have nots" in our world of inequality. Raspberries and cream is such a delight and steaming rice is a necessary staple of life for so many people in need. Excellent comparison, Brooke. Blessings (and blessed we are to be those who crave raspberries and cream), Linda
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Your poem shows the stark descrepancy between the "haves" and "have nots" in our world of inequality. Raspberries and cream is such a delight and steaming rice is a necessary staple of life for so many people in need. Excellent comparison, Brooke. Blessings (and blessed we are to be those who crave raspberries and cream), Linda
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Linda, thank you for your most perceptive review. Brooke
Comment from MJMuraco
This poem is a great statement on hunger in the world. We crave raspberries and cream and some people are happy with plain rice. This work clearly contrasts the comparison. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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This poem is a great statement on hunger in the world. We crave raspberries and cream and some people are happy with plain rice. This work clearly contrasts the comparison. Well done.
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Thank you, Mary Jayne - I appreciate your thoughtfulness. Brooke
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke....when I see pictures of starving children on tv it breaks my heart. In a world where food is in abundance this should never happen but sadly it does. I think I told you my church gathers food for the homeless and I deliver it to the homeless coalition every Monday. I am always struck at how grateful and humble these people are. A good septolet that is heart breaking....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Hi Brooke....when I see pictures of starving children on tv it breaks my heart. In a world where food is in abundance this should never happen but sadly it does. I think I told you my church gathers food for the homeless and I deliver it to the homeless coalition every Monday. I am always struck at how grateful and humble these people are. A good septolet that is heart breaking....blessings....chey
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Chey, thank you - today is my day to serve breakfast at the shelter - we had six cantaloupes in addition to our usual food - cut them into small pieces - you would have thought these pieces were nuggets of gold! Brooke
Comment from Mischief's Momma
Ooh I like the contrast here in both poem and your notes on what we each crave.
You make a very good point indeed! How would someone ever crave what they could never imagine.
Very thought provokingly well done :)
Sharon
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Ooh I like the contrast here in both poem and your notes on what we each crave.
You make a very good point indeed! How would someone ever crave what they could never imagine.
Very thought provokingly well done :)
Sharon
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Sharon, thank you for your most thoughtful response. Brooke
Comment from Julia.
I'm not familiar with this poetic form, but I like the simplicity of it. I also like the two images that you juxtaposed -- the raspberries and the rice. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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I'm not familiar with this poetic form, but I like the simplicity of it. I also like the two images that you juxtaposed -- the raspberries and the rice. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Julia, thank you - I love this particular form. Brooke :-)
Comment from mommynow
This is a very powerful message, one which many people don't consider. My husband complained the other day about how much he hated his lunch (it wasn't what he generally likes to eat), and the same thought crossed my mind. We are fortunate to have even 1 percent of the blessings that have been given to us...
Very well executed.
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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This is a very powerful message, one which many people don't consider. My husband complained the other day about how much he hated his lunch (it wasn't what he generally likes to eat), and the same thought crossed my mind. We are fortunate to have even 1 percent of the blessings that have been given to us...
Very well executed.
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Thank you for your most insightful response to my poem - how many times a week do almost all of us complain about trifling things?? And yes, they really are just trifles compared to what many people endure every day of their lives. Brooke
Comment from Poetic Friend
Brooke, this one surprised me. I was salivating as I read the title.
Ironically, the poem took a twist (as a well-written septolet should) and makes one realize how blessed we are to have food choices. It's not a choice for many. So sad, yet so true.
Thank you for the reminder, Brooke.
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Brooke, this one surprised me. I was salivating as I read the title.
Ironically, the poem took a twist (as a well-written septolet should) and makes one realize how blessed we are to have food choices. It's not a choice for many. So sad, yet so true.
Thank you for the reminder, Brooke.
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Thanks so much - I'm glad the effect I intended worked for you. Brooke
Comment from raimie
Wow this is really good! I was so into the sweetness of the first stanza and then boom bitterness. So sad. Well written with perfect punch that wasn't expected.
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Wow this is really good! I was so into the sweetness of the first stanza and then boom bitterness. So sad. Well written with perfect punch that wasn't expected.
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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That is why I love the septolet form - the boom of that second verse :-) Thanks, Brooke
