cinquains
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Comment from steevie
you've nicely wrapped up the old saying, "Never jump to conclusions!"
and yet, I think we're all guity of that at times.
So fixed in our own thinking ... losing sight of the facts as they really are
comes from our imperfection and human state
we'll live to be a hundred and still get caught
well done, Brooke
steve
reply by the author on 30-May-2009
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you've nicely wrapped up the old saying, "Never jump to conclusions!"
and yet, I think we're all guity of that at times.
So fixed in our own thinking ... losing sight of the facts as they really are
comes from our imperfection and human state
we'll live to be a hundred and still get caught
well done, Brooke
steve
Comment Written 29-May-2009
reply by the author on 30-May-2009
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Steve, yes, I do think we are all guilty at times - the sad thing is most people think only the "other guy" is ever guilty. Thanks, Brooke
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I think sometimes why we jump to conclusions is because when a situation arises, we see the matter as how our emotions direct us, rather than a logical response, giving rise to the way we would want a certain situation to play out. Sort of a self view, through our own eyes, irregardless of facts ...
There, that is my philosophical rendeing for today ha ha
steve
Comment from Jo_Tweedy
I like it very much and your picture goes well. I have many ways I can understand this poem. I really like it so either way I have many ways of seeing it nicely done :-)
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reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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I like it very much and your picture goes well. I have many ways I can understand this poem. I really like it so either way I have many ways of seeing it nicely done :-)
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Comment Written 29-May-2009
reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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Jo, thank you - again you've given me a 4 but the comments are all positive. Is this in error? Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
A fantastic "if only" poem, Brooke. Think of the changes we'd be witness to if only people would open their locked and closed forever brains. Excellent words.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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A fantastic "if only" poem, Brooke. Think of the changes we'd be witness to if only people would open their locked and closed forever brains. Excellent words.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Indy, I could not agree more - thank you! Brooke :-)
Comment from Amfunny
Oh, I loved this one. So thought provoking and right on. Great writing. So true. Great artwork also. The perfect match. Very well done.
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Oh, I loved this one. So thought provoking and right on. Great writing. So true. Great artwork also. The perfect match. Very well done.
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Thank you yet again!! Brooke
Comment from Julia.
Even though they aren't traditionally parts of a cinquain, I like rhyme and regular iambic beat in this. The message is apt, too, and very true. I know people like that.
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Even though they aren't traditionally parts of a cinquain, I like rhyme and regular iambic beat in this. The message is apt, too, and very true. I know people like that.
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Thank you, Julia - I am a rhymer - it just happens! LOL Brooke
Comment from raimie
Thius is brillant! So much said in so few words. This should be made into posters and hung in every learning facility in the world..Lol!
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Thius is brillant! So much said in so few words. This should be made into posters and hung in every learning facility in the world..Lol!
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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I had a teacher tell me she wanted to use it - thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from sara-beth
I think this is fabulous, we all have so much to learn, and the ending line in your poem "if all it hears is what it first supposed" is so, so true. We need to stretch our minds above and beyond our first impressions, which are largely imposed by our environment....there is so much more out there!
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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I think this is fabulous, we all have so much to learn, and the ending line in your poem "if all it hears is what it first supposed" is so, so true. We need to stretch our minds above and beyond our first impressions, which are largely imposed by our environment....there is so much more out there!
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Sara-beth, thanks so much - I'm so glad you found the meaning in this - I appreciate your generosity! Brooke :-)
Comment from c_lucas
Seeking Truth with a closed mind is a waste of time. Very well written with a thought provoking truth. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Seeking Truth with a closed mind is a waste of time. Very well written with a thought provoking truth. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 26-May-2009
reply by the author on 26-May-2009
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Thanks, Charlie - glad you agree. Brooke : -)
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - That is so true and you put it succinctly. Some really think they know the truth and won't listen to others. Well written. Charlie
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Brooke - That is so true and you put it succinctly. Some really think they know the truth and won't listen to others. Well written. Charlie
Comment Written 25-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thanks, Charlie - I sure have known my share of people with closed minds. Brooke
Comment from Rottie
Wow! You are just kicking it to the curb tonight my friend! I think you should have saved this one for a contest of some sort cause it's a winner no matter what contest it's in! This is the poster child for visual poetry!
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Wow! You are just kicking it to the curb tonight my friend! I think you should have saved this one for a contest of some sort cause it's a winner no matter what contest it's in! This is the poster child for visual poetry!
Comment Written 25-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Rottie, thank you - you're one great ego booster :-)
