Memorial Day
a reflective septolet108 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
When we are told that numerous 'troops' have died in war, it softens the actuality that these 'troops' are, many times, just teen boys! What a sad realization.
Your poem is poignant and displays a powerful truth.
Nic
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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When we are told that numerous 'troops' have died in war, it softens the actuality that these 'troops' are, many times, just teen boys! What a sad realization.
Your poem is poignant and displays a powerful truth.
Nic
Comment Written 25-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Nic, yes, I always hate that use of the word troops - it really doesn't translate into human terms. Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from perunest
Excellent poem, thought, and tribute
to all those who have fallen, dedicating
their lives to this country. Very sobering
to see all the graves of those who made
the ultimate sacrifice. Timely poem.
Carolyn
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Excellent poem, thought, and tribute
to all those who have fallen, dedicating
their lives to this country. Very sobering
to see all the graves of those who made
the ultimate sacrifice. Timely poem.
Carolyn
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Carolyn, thank you so much - sobering but also beautiful to know that while the toll taken is tragic, the selflessness of the sacrifices is beautiful. Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
this is the sad part. why do so many have to die? sometimes freedom isn't even the prize. pretty sad. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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brooke,
this is the sad part. why do so many have to die? sometimes freedom isn't even the prize. pretty sad. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 22-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Barbara, there is the question for the ages. Yes, tragically sad. Thank you, Brooke
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brooke,
i watched the movie "the day the earth stood still" last night. wow~ there were so many things in there that i had already thought but it really kept my eyes open. one of it's themes was why do people kill.
we may never know why people can be so cruel. yeah, technically we know pieces and parts but what really motivates another to take someone's life? how do we lose respect for others? many more questions than answers.
love,
barbara
Comment from sengwriter
I read a septolet consciously for the first time, I presume. This poem has some touchy element of an adolescence and about the transition to an adult life from a childhood. One example you cited here has had enough impact to clear your thoughts that you wanted to express here.
Thank you for sharing.
Gautam :)
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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I read a septolet consciously for the first time, I presume. This poem has some touchy element of an adolescence and about the transition to an adult life from a childhood. One example you cited here has had enough impact to clear your thoughts that you wanted to express here.
Thank you for sharing.
Gautam :)
Comment Written 22-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Gautam, thank you for your thoughtful response. Brooke
Comment from hagalaz
This was definitely not the poem I was expecting when I read the title. It does an awesome job of painting a complete (if not sad) picture of a young man's life.
AWESOME POEM!!
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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This was definitely not the poem I was expecting when I read the title. It does an awesome job of painting a complete (if not sad) picture of a young man's life.
AWESOME POEM!!
Comment Written 22-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your most generous response to my septolet - I appreciate your thoughtfulness and exceptional rating! Brooke
Comment from Mrs. KT
An excellent septolet and one that surely carries a huge message for all of mankind...Your word choice is succinct and precise. A fine rendering. diane
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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An excellent septolet and one that surely carries a huge message for all of mankind...Your word choice is succinct and precise. A fine rendering. diane
Comment Written 22-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Thanks so much for your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
We lose a very large amount of our youth in the glorious name of WAR. Let's practice Peace. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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We lose a very large amount of our youth in the glorious name of WAR. Let's practice Peace. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 22-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Charlie, Amen to that! Brooke :-)
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Fleedleflump
First part
a joy,
young enthusiasm.
Crushed sagely
by the real
futility
of war.
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Arranged, arrayed
to perfect purpose,
rifle lines.
Mowed,
mutilated,
masticated,
mauled by
state designs.
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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First part
a joy,
young enthusiasm.
Crushed sagely
by the real
futility
of war.
---------
Arranged, arrayed
to perfect purpose,
rifle lines.
Mowed,
mutilated,
masticated,
mauled by
state designs.
Comment Written 22-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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I especially like the second one!!! Thank you, Mike :-) Brooke
Comment from Amfunny
So sad, but beautifully written. I like the art work you chose also. Very fitting. Your poem presents a strong message and is well done. Great job.
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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So sad, but beautifully written. I like the art work you chose also. Very fitting. Your poem presents a strong message and is well done. Great job.
Comment Written 22-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Thank you yet again :-) Brooke
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thank you, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke How true your poem is and what price war? You certainly have painted an complete picture with you your two verses. Very clever piece of poetry. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Hi Brooke How true your poem is and what price war? You certainly have painted an complete picture with you your two verses. Very clever piece of poetry. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Gaye, thank you for "getting" my poem so perceptively. Brooke
