Blood Relations - A Vampire Tale
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Planning for Brook's Rescue"Some bloodlines run very deep.
12 total reviews
Comment from jlsavell
hello Nightwriter, oh so long I've been away. What a friggin way to travel..aboard a jet in a coffin, such a modern era for a Medieval legend..wonder how Bramstoker would like this>>>hehehe..wouldn't you love to meet that guy? another excellent chapter my friend..wait wait isn't Fata in Bran???
jimi
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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hello Nightwriter, oh so long I've been away. What a friggin way to travel..aboard a jet in a coffin, such a modern era for a Medieval legend..wonder how Bramstoker would like this>>>hehehe..wouldn't you love to meet that guy? another excellent chapter my friend..wait wait isn't Fata in Bran???
jimi
Comment Written 12-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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Thanks Jimi! Welcome back! I don't know about Bramstoker, but I'm having a ball, LOL! Thank you for your wonderful review. Looking forward to hearing from Fata. :)
Comment from Vladilynn
Wow!!! another taunting chapter!! you..really maing your readers stay to there seats!! loll
I loved your art...I got the same picture too but more better~ loll it's really taken from the location.
I hope they can save Brook!! more for the next time!! will be waiting~
thank you for sharing,
Love much
Lynn :0)
well written!
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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Wow!!! another taunting chapter!! you..really maing your readers stay to there seats!! loll
I loved your art...I got the same picture too but more better~ loll it's really taken from the location.
I hope they can save Brook!! more for the next time!! will be waiting~
thank you for sharing,
Love much
Lynn :0)
well written!
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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Thank you so much, Lynn. I try to get a chapter out a week. :)
Comment from babylonia
sure, that's what they all say. LOL just kidding. hmm ... so many questions. they can only be answered with new chapters. i have my hunches. :P
easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. can't wait to read more.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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sure, that's what they all say. LOL just kidding. hmm ... so many questions. they can only be answered with new chapters. i have my hunches. :P
easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. can't wait to read more.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 19-May-2009
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Thank you so much, Barbara! Yes, more excitement! :)
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LOL that's the plan
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Comment from angel of the quill
hm when you started about bucheresti. as the natives call it. I wondered. then the castle when ponarei was his own for years I wondered where are you going.
but i see you are in the more accepted places
not mentioning Sighisoara his birth place
which is perhaps a passing thought
I enjoyed it full of action
and a little drama
which is what we all seek.
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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hm when you started about bucheresti. as the natives call it. I wondered. then the castle when ponarei was his own for years I wondered where are you going.
but i see you are in the more accepted places
not mentioning Sighisoara his birth place
which is perhaps a passing thought
I enjoyed it full of action
and a little drama
which is what we all seek.
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your review! It's getting interesting, that's for sure. :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Night writer
I love this chapter and the sound of this castle that Stan and Lori are going to find Brooke.
I don't know what it is about the following for some reason it seems fragmented. Take a look what do you think-
((Passages that would lead us to the hidden treasures and ultimately my family who would be eternally grateful to her for their release. Of course, none of this is possible."))
Gert
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Hello Night writer
I love this chapter and the sound of this castle that Stan and Lori are going to find Brooke.
I don't know what it is about the following for some reason it seems fragmented. Take a look what do you think-
((Passages that would lead us to the hidden treasures and ultimately my family who would be eternally grateful to her for their release. Of course, none of this is possible."))
Gert
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your helpful and encouraging review, Gert. I'll take a look at that line. Thank you!
Comment from Sasha
Great chapter. Strong imagery. The tension has built to a fever pitch and the waiting is painful. Clearly lots can still go wrong but I have faith in Stan's abilities. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Great chapter. Strong imagery. The tension has built to a fever pitch and the waiting is painful. Clearly lots can still go wrong but I have faith in Stan's abilities. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Wow! Thank you so much, Smurphgirl, for such an encouraging and wonderful review. Fever pitch it it! :)
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Steve, I liked the chapter. At least now some progress is being made to reach Brook. No gremlins to moan about. Might just look at the beginning of the story where you used 'during' in quick succession.
Nice read. Have a good day - luv jada
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Hi Steve, I liked the chapter. At least now some progress is being made to reach Brook. No gremlins to moan about. Might just look at the beginning of the story where you used 'during' in quick succession.
Nice read. Have a good day - luv jada
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Jada! I'll take a look.
Steve
Comment from Tellis
Woohoo! Got a evil vampire and a good vampire showdown in an old castle in Romania. I enjoyed reading this well written piece.
Tellis
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Woohoo! Got a evil vampire and a good vampire showdown in an old castle in Romania. I enjoyed reading this well written piece.
Tellis
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Thank you so much Tellis! Things are heating up again, LOL.
Comment from Deejharrington
Thank you for staying true to the vampire stories. Have enjoyed reading it, though it sounds like its coming to its conclusion. I've enjoyed every word.
Deb
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Thank you for staying true to the vampire stories. Have enjoyed reading it, though it sounds like its coming to its conclusion. I've enjoyed every word.
Deb
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Thank you so much, Deb for this wonderful review! It's about to get exciting, LOL. :)
Steve
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You're welcome. I'll keep an eye out for the new chapter
Comment from K-Patrick
Yes there's a lot of stuff under this - Do Not despair - THIS IS GREAT. A very good stepping stone chapter. I would add before Stan goes to bed, he directs Chuck to have a tactical plan for securing/searching the yacht AND get the layout of the castle downloaded and to the team, so they are familiar with the terrain.
paid each of the deceased families ten million dollars -- this is generous, but is it caring? Stan paid each family a one million dollar benefit from a life insurance he quickly invented and promised to continue paying salaries to families, as well as education trust funds for children of the deceased. -- I'm rambling again.
SPAG-- A light wind blew threw -- sp- through
SPAG-- new passages would open[.] Passages that would
Still holding hands, Lori and Stan took a seat near the front and snapped their seatbelts around their waists. -- how did they buckle up with letting go?
Jim stopped by. -- Like dude, I was out for ice cream and ... Sorry, people don't just 'stop by' on an airplane. --maybe- Looking around, Lori spotted Jim as he hurriedly climbed on board, just before the door was closed...
talking...then... 'Great, then I'll just sit over there with Chuck.' just a suggestion.
Through his smile, two sharp fangs poked through his lips. -- through and through -- I think just...'He smiled, revealing two sharp fangs already eager.'
"Good morning, Stan, Lori," Chuck said as he nodded to both. -- DO you think Jim would insist on coming in with Chuck?
Grabbing his cup of coffee from Lori, -- Grabbing? Gingerly taking? Accepting his cup?... but grabbing? Manners they may be friends, but Stan and Lori pay the bills.
Wonderful chapter. Great build up and I love Linda's castle vision. Wonder how that will go down? :o)
Great job - keep it going!!
K-P :o)
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Yes there's a lot of stuff under this - Do Not despair - THIS IS GREAT. A very good stepping stone chapter. I would add before Stan goes to bed, he directs Chuck to have a tactical plan for securing/searching the yacht AND get the layout of the castle downloaded and to the team, so they are familiar with the terrain.
paid each of the deceased families ten million dollars -- this is generous, but is it caring? Stan paid each family a one million dollar benefit from a life insurance he quickly invented and promised to continue paying salaries to families, as well as education trust funds for children of the deceased. -- I'm rambling again.
SPAG-- A light wind blew threw -- sp- through
SPAG-- new passages would open[.] Passages that would
Still holding hands, Lori and Stan took a seat near the front and snapped their seatbelts around their waists. -- how did they buckle up with letting go?
Jim stopped by. -- Like dude, I was out for ice cream and ... Sorry, people don't just 'stop by' on an airplane. --maybe- Looking around, Lori spotted Jim as he hurriedly climbed on board, just before the door was closed...
talking...then... 'Great, then I'll just sit over there with Chuck.' just a suggestion.
Through his smile, two sharp fangs poked through his lips. -- through and through -- I think just...'He smiled, revealing two sharp fangs already eager.'
"Good morning, Stan, Lori," Chuck said as he nodded to both. -- DO you think Jim would insist on coming in with Chuck?
Grabbing his cup of coffee from Lori, -- Grabbing? Gingerly taking? Accepting his cup?... but grabbing? Manners they may be friends, but Stan and Lori pay the bills.
Wonderful chapter. Great build up and I love Linda's castle vision. Wonder how that will go down? :o)
Great job - keep it going!!
K-P :o)
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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I just LOVE your reviews and encouragement K-P. They're always right on target and very helpful. I will use your suggestions and tweak this tonight. Your review made me think. Thank you!!! :)
