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Viewing comments for Chapter 260 "My Mom"Life stories in only six words!
32 total reviews
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
IndianaIrish,
I really like the picture
you chose to go with this
and wonder if it influenced
your selection of lighthouse
as opposed to simply the word
light. It's not the lighthouse
that guides, only the light
which illuminates from it.
I believe you could improve
your entry by changing lighthouse
to light. Either way, I love
the sentiment behind the story.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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IndianaIrish,
I really like the picture
you chose to go with this
and wonder if it influenced
your selection of lighthouse
as opposed to simply the word
light. It's not the lighthouse
that guides, only the light
which illuminates from it.
I believe you could improve
your entry by changing lighthouse
to light. Either way, I love
the sentiment behind the story.
Good luck.
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Hello Rdfrdmom! Thank you so much for taking the time to comment on this very brief submission. I really appreciate your comments and suggestion. I originally used used "beacon" instead of lighthouse, but decided my mom was more than just the light that guided me through rough waters. She had the strength and dependability of the entire lighthouse, so I decided to go with that. I found the wonderful picture in FanArt after writing the piece.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Teri7
This is just beautiful. I wish I had a copy of it to frame for my youngest brother. His birthday was yesterday and he collects light houses. Good luck. Love, Teri
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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This is just beautiful. I wish I had a copy of it to frame for my youngest brother. His birthday was yesterday and he collects light houses. Good luck. Love, Teri
Comment Written 17-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Hello Teri! Thank you for this wonderful review and I'm delighted you liked it. I found this incredible artwork in FanStory and the painter is lynnieellia.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Hitcher
I hope you showed this one to your mother Kar, she would love to read it for sure, awesome artwork you have chosen to accompany your six words. You say a great deal in so few words Indy, well done!
OH! And congrat's on your recent wins friend.
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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I hope you showed this one to your mother Kar, she would love to read it for sure, awesome artwork you have chosen to accompany your six words. You say a great deal in so few words Indy, well done!
OH! And congrat's on your recent wins friend.
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Hi ya Hitch! Thanks for reading and commenting on this shortie. My mom passed away 3 years ago, but she's still guides me through any rough waters to safety.
Thanks for the woo hoo, too!
Smiles,
Indy :>)
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Sorry about your mum Kar, I'm lucky to still have both my parents around to try and keep me on the straight and narrow[you can only imagine how difficult a task that is] ,ha ha. Take it easy friend, Hitch.
Comment from adewpearl
what a great picture to add to the symbolism of your declaration about your mother - the fact that she will be your guide forever implies the story of what she has been in the past. this is a good six word entry in this mother's day contest. Brooke
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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what a great picture to add to the symbolism of your declaration about your mother - the fact that she will be your guide forever implies the story of what she has been in the past. this is a good six word entry in this mother's day contest. Brooke
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 17-May-2009
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Thank you, Brooke, for taking the time to comment on this very brief submission. She passed away three years ago, but she still guides me through any rough waters to safety.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Lokman
Isn't that the truth for so many of us. Mine taught me to be independent, but she regrets it now, because she doesn't know two of her grandsons. How do I tell them how important she is to me?
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Isn't that the truth for so many of us. Mine taught me to be independent, but she regrets it now, because she doesn't know two of her grandsons. How do I tell them how important she is to me?
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Shea!! It's great to see you again and I'm so pleased you took the time to comment on this incredibly short contest entry. I think you are the middleman, my friend, between your Mom and your boys. They need you to tell them all about her and she needs you to keep her up on all their milestones and personalities. They may not get to see each other enough, but with your interventions, they can love each other as if they see each other every day. Why do I feel that their spunk and spirit is a reflection of your Mom??
Thank you for your review, Shea. Now that you're back, I'll try to catch up on your work. I'm sooooooo behind in all my reviewing...tsk tsk tsk on me. LOL
I've missed you!
Indy :><)
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Hey, Indy!
Can I say this? I don't know how to tell her.
I expressed my worry that they'll be different than what she expects. She interacts every day with her other two grandchildren, takes care of them, drives them to activities, etc.
She reminded me--in reality--she told me what it was like for her and my Dad to bring my sister and I down to southern California every year at Christmas to see our grandparents, how worried she was about what they'd think of us. Our world was different than theirs.
I shouldn't be worried at all, but I am. It's been 17 months since we saw them last. One more to go. And I can't wait, for my sake. Damn, but I better be quiet, lol. I'm homesick. My children's lives are here, not where I imagine them to be. Makes me wonder what my parents felt.
I was just about to delete this, scared to open up, but it's time.
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I just sent you an email, Shea :>)
Comment from prodigal
I don't fully understand the six word thing, my friend, but I like this one. Clear from six short words that you both love and admire your mother and that you are trying to model your life after hers. Well done- sam
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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I don't fully understand the six word thing, my friend, but I like this one. Clear from six short words that you both love and admire your mother and that you are trying to model your life after hers. Well done- sam
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Hello my friend, Sam! Thank you for taking the time to review this incredibly short thingy. I know it's difficult when the review has to be longer than the submission. Shelley started this six-word contest book last year and even though many people don't believe it's worth a review, it is difficult to use only six words for these contests. Thank you!
Indy :>)
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If you write it, I'll read it. :)
Comment from shelley kaye
awww....
nice one
nothing else to say except good work
no spaggies
no typos
thank you for sharing
and good luck in the contest! :-)
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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awww....
nice one
nothing else to say except good work
no spaggies
no typos
thank you for sharing
and good luck in the contest! :-)
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Thank you, shelley, for sponsoring the contest and for your very kind review. I don't mind havign author's notes, but I miss thanking the contest organizer and the creator of the artwork.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from wwmeggie
You fulfilled the contest rules very well. This submission looks and sounds like a Hallmark card. It expresses a deep emotional loss and simultaneously a deep commitment. It shows your faith.
Although the moderators of this site prefer long reviews, I am not sure what else to say. Good job. :)
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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You fulfilled the contest rules very well. This submission looks and sounds like a Hallmark card. It expresses a deep emotional loss and simultaneously a deep commitment. It shows your faith.
Although the moderators of this site prefer long reviews, I am not sure what else to say. Good job. :)
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Thank you so much, wwmeggie, for taking the time to review this incredibly short piece. I know it can be difficult when the review has to be longer than the submission. Thank you for your kind and encouraging comments.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
And a warm welcome to FanStory!!
Comment from thorney
Hi there IndianIrish. Wonderful words, your mother will be proud you love here and think so highly of her. We all owe them so much.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards, Pete.
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Hi there IndianIrish. Wonderful words, your mother will be proud you love here and think so highly of her. We all owe them so much.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards, Pete.
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Hello back at ya, Pete! Thank you for taking the time to comment on this very short contest submission. I know it can be a pain when the review has to be longer than the entry, so I appreciate it very much.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment from Marjorie D.
Okay, right from the hip 'cuz I know that's how you want it, Indy. It's clear exactly what you meant, but since it's the light that's the salvation of those in need of help,
"beacon" might be a better word choice than "lighthouse" in this instance, just to capture the sentiment. (Of course, that's strictly a personal opinion.) Either way, it says so much about you and your mom. Super!
Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Okay, right from the hip 'cuz I know that's how you want it, Indy. It's clear exactly what you meant, but since it's the light that's the salvation of those in need of help,
"beacon" might be a better word choice than "lighthouse" in this instance, just to capture the sentiment. (Of course, that's strictly a personal opinion.) Either way, it says so much about you and your mom. Super!
Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Hello my friend, M! Ya know, I used "beacon" instead of lighthouse, but decided she was more than just the light that guided me through rough waters. She had the strength and dependability of the entire lighthouse, so I decided to go with that. Does that make any sense? Anyway, you know I appreciate your wonderful opinions and always will.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
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I can understand that, Indy. With your explanation, it's clear your mom wasn't just the "light," she was the entire "foundation." I get it now. Perfect!
XO
