Quaterns: Observations on Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "I Dreamed I Wore Orion's Belt"Assorted Reflections
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Comment from babylonia
brooke,
a nicely done quatrain and a lesson as well. always good to learn something new. i once went to a museum that had anciet mayans goodies as well as aztec stuff. they kept saying these people discussed the stars. then they would say they had no way to progress because they slept at night. i thought that's crazy. if they were astronomers, they lived mostly at night. they had fire. they had weapons. when it gets to be 130 degrees in the shade, you do the hard work at night under lights. what do i know?
beautiful poem.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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brooke,
a nicely done quatrain and a lesson as well. always good to learn something new. i once went to a museum that had anciet mayans goodies as well as aztec stuff. they kept saying these people discussed the stars. then they would say they had no way to progress because they slept at night. i thought that's crazy. if they were astronomers, they lived mostly at night. they had fire. they had weapons. when it gets to be 130 degrees in the shade, you do the hard work at night under lights. what do i know?
beautiful poem.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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Barbara, thank you :-) Brooke
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brooke,
you are very welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from bard owl
What imagination! This read has such depth and really delves into the many aspects that surround Orion's Belt - the time-honored observer of earth's history. Excellent and thought-provoking, Brooke. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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What imagination! This read has such depth and really delves into the many aspects that surround Orion's Belt - the time-honored observer of earth's history. Excellent and thought-provoking, Brooke. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 19-May-2009
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Linda, thank you so much - I really enjoyed writing this one, so I'm thrilled you like it :-) Brooke
Comment from Eaglewolf
It was the title that caught my eye first on this one. I really enjoyed this poem. It made me feel so small, and insignificant. But, the stars always do.
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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It was the title that caught my eye first on this one. I really enjoyed this poem. It made me feel so small, and insignificant. But, the stars always do.
Comment Written 19-May-2009
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Yes, the stores have that effect on me also. Thank you, Brooke :-)
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*laughs* The stores? I guess it depends on if it's the pre xmas rush or not...
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laugh at me - that's really nice! LOLOLOL
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I know.. LOL!!
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke A very thought provoking poem and all the information you supplied with it is amazing. The verses are well spaced and I do like the white text on a black background. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 20-May-2009
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Hi Brooke A very thought provoking poem and all the information you supplied with it is amazing. The verses are well spaced and I do like the white text on a black background. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 20-May-2009
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Gaye, thank you - I always appreciate your visits and comments :-) Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
This should strike a chord with anyone who has ever wanted to be heroic or god-like, and then remembered that no human can ever be a god.
I enjoyed the references to literature (Bible, Iliad), mythology (Orion's belt), and the Bible (the God of Job.)
I also liked the opening l ines, as the opening line becomes the closing line, and the 2nd line/3rd line's references to dead of night/death. Nice touch!
Great lines:
whose course my stars could set aright
A million years this legend's lived--/this hubris but one night I felt
death's my destiny
As always, excellent work! Laura
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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This should strike a chord with anyone who has ever wanted to be heroic or god-like, and then remembered that no human can ever be a god.
I enjoyed the references to literature (Bible, Iliad), mythology (Orion's belt), and the Bible (the God of Job.)
I also liked the opening l ines, as the opening line becomes the closing line, and the 2nd line/3rd line's references to dead of night/death. Nice touch!
Great lines:
whose course my stars could set aright
A million years this legend's lived--/this hubris but one night I felt
death's my destiny
As always, excellent work! Laura
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Laura, thank you for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from luna
Orion has always been my favorite constellation and I can remember talking to him just like I would a friend when I was a young girl. I enjoyed reading your well written words, you are so talented! Is there anything you cannot write about? I think not.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Orion has always been my favorite constellation and I can remember talking to him just like I would a friend when I was a young girl. I enjoyed reading your well written words, you are so talented! Is there anything you cannot write about? I think not.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Jenny, thank you - I'm sure I could write a list pages long of things I could not write about - just ask me to write an erotic poem and you'll know how to start the list! LOL Brooke
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Brooke,
I liked the steady rhythm and solid rhyme used in this poem. The repetitious downward movement of the opening line through all four positions in the four verses is an interesting scheme. Your story is also very good and interesting. You always back up your writings.
Great poem.
Ray
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Hello Brooke,
I liked the steady rhythm and solid rhyme used in this poem. The repetitious downward movement of the opening line through all four positions in the four verses is an interesting scheme. Your story is also very good and interesting. You always back up your writings.
Great poem.
Ray
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Ray, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mommynow
Very beautifully done, once again. I don't see anything to suggest changing. I think you've done an excellent job. A pleasure to read and review!
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Very beautifully done, once again. I don't see anything to suggest changing. I think you've done an excellent job. A pleasure to read and review!
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Thanks so much!! Brooke :-)
Comment from amada
I love the rhyming of your works! It seems so easy and so natural to find the right words to rhyme with the thought. This one was a lesson as well in astronomy, the mysterious and alluring Orion's belt.
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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I love the rhyming of your works! It seems so easy and so natural to find the right words to rhyme with the thought. This one was a lesson as well in astronomy, the mysterious and alluring Orion's belt.
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Thank you - I always appreciate your great comments. Brooke
Comment from Jarlsbane
Another wonderful piece!! What talent you have... and prolific!! I love the word choices and imagery!! Seems you have found a very deep well from which to draw inspiration!! I envy you, brooke!! Hugs, Michael
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Another wonderful piece!! What talent you have... and prolific!! I love the word choices and imagery!! Seems you have found a very deep well from which to draw inspiration!! I envy you, brooke!! Hugs, Michael
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Michael, thank you - it's always great to hear from you. :-) Brooke
