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Greed n' Feed

Selfish individuals seldom find true happiness.

49 total reviews 
Comment from AlvinTEthington
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An amazing horror story along the lines of Poe and Hitchcock (what a combination!) But they both move slowly and methodically, where the horror builds slowly. None of this immediate blood and gore of horror movies or stories today. You portray white trash every so well. I was enthrall with the story (and I usually hate horror.) The psychological studies in this are amazing. You should send this off to some horror magazines. They definitely need a better quality of work and this is it.

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Wow! Thanks so very much, Al...Long time no hear from...I am looking forwardm to reading your work again...Thanks again, Bob (Mastery)
Comment from apelle
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Thought provoking and smooth writing !
I like how you leave the reader pondering life and its meanings,,,like this sentence which i loved :)

There are moments in a person's life when they think the last few feet of film have snapped loose from the reel.

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Thans so much, apelle. Since you like it, I am just curious if the "four" stars was a mistake or is that all it rtes? How did you like the ending? Thanks again, Bob
reply by apelle on 10-May-2009
    I am so sorry , my cursor must have slipped ..i'll go back and fix it . i'm happy you mentioned it
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Hi, apelle No, No, I just meant I would like to know what you didn't like about it so I can do better....LOL..Thanks for the upgrade....Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Hi, apelle No, No, I just meant I would like to know what you didn't like about it so I can do better....LOL..Thanks for the upgrade....Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Hi, apelle No, No, I just meant I would like to know what you didn't like about it so I can do better....LOL..Thanks for the upgrade....Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Hi, apelle No, No, I just meant I would like to know what you didn't like about it so I can do better....LOL..Thanks for the upgrade....Bob (Mastery)
Comment from Thesis
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A gross, well told story.

I guess the old guy wasn't one to mess with.

The nephew and his thief girlfriend got what they deserved. The only disturbing part is that I'll never be able to enjoy bacon again. LOL - Thesis

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Thnks so much, Thesis. I appreciate your comments and look forward to reding your work, also...Bob (Mastery)
Comment from Max Edon
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I just wish I still had six stars left for this story. It was really great. I enjoyed reading it because it was so descriptive. The ending was a real hum dinger!

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Thanks so much, Max...Hope to catch up with you soon...You honor me with your review...Bob (Mastery)
reply by Max Edon on 13-May-2009
    You are welcome!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Exceptional
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Hello Mastery,
now your story was very intense, with pretty gory scenes, and how an old man can act when he's not to stable in his head and believes someone is doing him wrong.

( I was waiting for a big load of money to be found?)) You certainly knew how to end your story with a closure

good luck in the contest.
Gert


 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Awwww...Thanks so very much, Gert...and Happy Mother's Day to you and yours! Bob
reply by Gert sherwood on 10-May-2009
    Ray you are so welcome you deserved it.

    Hope you drop by and take time to read my 5 chapter book--
    Some Notable Facts About Vermonters

    which I have a Book Balloon on.

    Gert
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Hi, Gert...No, I'm Bob, hon. Not Ray..Yes, I will try asap...Bob (Mastery)
reply by Gert sherwood on 10-May-2009
    Sorry bob must be getting over tired
    Please forgive me and thank you for remind me you name is not Ray
    Gert
Comment from jojosug
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Can't say I'm sorry for their bloody end. My pity is with the old man. A brilliant story well written and it held me captivated throughout. Wonderful imagery and dialogue.

Jo

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Well, thanks so much, Jo...I truly apprecite it; Look forward to reading your work also. Bob (Mastery)
Comment from lola29
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From the beginning to the end, your creative writing held my interest. There was a point when I thought Duddles was too shy to stand up for himself, but, was I ever wrong.
Excellent creatitivity!

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Thanks so much, Lola..I am truly humbled...Looking foward to reading your work, also Bob (Mastery
Comment from Tricia
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Great story. That's all the couple were worth, pig food. I hope they didn't poison the pigs.You did such a great job of writing this. It's so real. Almost felt like I was there watching.
Trish

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Thanks so much, Trish...I appreciate that very much, I will also be looking t your work..Thanks again, Bob (Mastery)
Comment from Donovan
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I think this story flows well. It is easy to read and follow the storyline, which is well developed. The characters have good personalities. I like the down home style. Well done.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 10-May-2009


reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Hmmmm. Thanks so much, Donovan. Which part did you like the best? Mastery
reply by Donovan on 10-May-2009
    Hmmm, I like the 67 cents and 14 points......if you insist on a review that would be helpful, then I am not your guy. Story reminds me of a Charles Dickens piece in as much as you give elaborate description of everything, Duddles, the house Clarence and the Bimbo. It does present an image in the readers mind and I suppose that is good. It also reminds me of an Alfred Hitchcock TV Series show. The intrigue of the story is the description. The weakness is the plot, though well developed, not too suspenseful. You need a twist in it...something that takes the reader by surprise. That seems to be lacking. Zippo light is good, shows you are an old geezer yourself. Having Duddles ruminate is a little out of word choice for this story. That's it. See you really don't care what I had to say....We would both been better off for me to take the 67 cents and run...but no..you had to imply whatever was your implication. I will not go to have lunch...fried pork chops...probably from some Duddly type farm...mashed potatoes and gravy with corn on the cob and hot apple pie.
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Tyhanks so much for your comments. The twist is in the last paragraph, Donovan...Sorry you didn't like the stroy..Thanks, anyway. Bob
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
    Thanks so much for your comments. The twist is in the last paragraph, Donovan...Sorry you didn't like the stroy..Thanks, anyway. Bob