Blood Relations - A Vampire Tale
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Linda's Escape"Some bloodlines run very deep.
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Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Action filled chapter carrying the story forward.
I was smelling that stink in the lab too as you were writing about it.
I am still not sure who all is human in the story apart obviously from the dead guards.
Interesting chapter.
Juliette
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Action filled chapter carrying the story forward.
I was smelling that stink in the lab too as you were writing about it.
I am still not sure who all is human in the story apart obviously from the dead guards.
Interesting chapter.
Juliette
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Thank you so much, Juliette for your wonderful review! You ask so very interesting questions that hopefully the next chapter will answer. Thanks again! :)
Comment from filmoreodragon
Good vampire twist at the end there. At the beginning I had no idea. I also like the dialogue and character development. All in all very well done.
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Good vampire twist at the end there. At the beginning I had no idea. I also like the dialogue and character development. All in all very well done.
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I try to keep the vampire theme going in every chapter, LOL. Thanks again.
NW
Comment from adewpearl
I'm sorry, sir add comma for direct address
Don't worry about me, gentleman add comma
lights to the runway ahead." Stan said change period to comma
Brook's?" Lori asked. add the apostrophe
Well, Stan has his work ahead to get Linda reined in, doesn't he? This is quite the exciting chapter, from the plane landing to the confrontation with Linda. Well done, and great dialogue, as usual. Brooke
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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I'm sorry, sir add comma for direct address
Don't worry about me, gentleman add comma
lights to the runway ahead." Stan said change period to comma
Brook's?" Lori asked. add the apostrophe
Well, Stan has his work ahead to get Linda reined in, doesn't he? This is quite the exciting chapter, from the plane landing to the confrontation with Linda. Well done, and great dialogue, as usual. Brooke
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Brooke and for catching those spaggies too. Oh, yes, things will be getting exciting. :)
Comment from angel of the quill
nice the ending was a little different but good
and the fact she is now in a hurricane adds more of the drama that florida offers. (former floridian i know the twists nature can hand you.)
good work I am sitting waiting for your next as always. wondering if brooke will wake and fight back or if the hurricane will win
or if they will find them in time
great cliff hanger.
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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nice the ending was a little different but good
and the fact she is now in a hurricane adds more of the drama that florida offers. (former floridian i know the twists nature can hand you.)
good work I am sitting waiting for your next as always. wondering if brooke will wake and fight back or if the hurricane will win
or if they will find them in time
great cliff hanger.
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and always encouraging review! There's a lot going on that's for sure. Thanks again! :)
Comment from jadapenn
Terrific chapter, Steve. I like how you work your weather and pilot knowledge so smoothly into the scene. The dialogue and pace is great. You hooked me and kept me engrossed. I didn't find any gremlins to groan about. Definately worth a sixer after the hanger at the end. How the heck is Stan going to trace Linda and save Brooke? luv jada
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Terrific chapter, Steve. I like how you work your weather and pilot knowledge so smoothly into the scene. The dialogue and pace is great. You hooked me and kept me engrossed. I didn't find any gremlins to groan about. Definately worth a sixer after the hanger at the end. How the heck is Stan going to trace Linda and save Brooke? luv jada
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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WOW!!! Thank you so much, Jada for this sixer. I'm blown away and clearly didn't expect it. Thank you for those wonderful compliments. Stan's going to have to use good old fashioned detective work to find them since he can't read them anymore. But a ticking clock has started on Brook. She needs to be rescued before her mind turns to mush. Thanks again so much. You made my day! :)
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It's a pleasure. Was a really good chapter. luv jada
Comment from Tellis
Well it looks like there will be a big battle sometime doan the way. I am enjoying this very well written story.
Tellis
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Well it looks like there will be a big battle sometime doan the way. I am enjoying this very well written story.
Tellis
Comment Written 09-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Tellis! Big battle for sure, LOL.
Comment from Sasha
Great chapter. Strong vivid descriptions as usual. Full of tension and intrigue. Well written except for one section ...
"Gees, Lori. Where can I meet you?" ...I don't care for this sentence. The situation is far too serious for him to say "Gees"....
Other than that, I think this is a great chapter an cannot wait to read the next one.
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Great chapter. Strong vivid descriptions as usual. Full of tension and intrigue. Well written except for one section ...
"Gees, Lori. Where can I meet you?" ...I don't care for this sentence. The situation is far too serious for him to say "Gees"....
Other than that, I think this is a great chapter an cannot wait to read the next one.
Comment Written 09-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Thank you so much, Smurphgirl for your wonderful review. You know, I had the same thoughts, but couldn't think of anything better to replace it with at the time. I'll think about it some more, but yes, something. Thanks again!
Comment from Patricia28
This story kept me interrested from the very beginning to the very end, it seemed to have different things going on to distract the reader from jumping to an early conclusion as to what the ending would be, I like to be kept thinking and this was very good at doing just that. It also keeps the reader hanging and wanting more.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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This story kept me interrested from the very beginning to the very end, it seemed to have different things going on to distract the reader from jumping to an early conclusion as to what the ending would be, I like to be kept thinking and this was very good at doing just that. It also keeps the reader hanging and wanting more.
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Comment Written 09-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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It's so nice to read reviews like yours. It tells me the magic is working. Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Patricia28.
Comment from Deejharrington
I like your straight forward vampire stories. No dressing it to something it isn't. I like the characters and the dialogue. The story line is exciting and building suspense.
I'll enjoy reading the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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I like your straight forward vampire stories. No dressing it to something it isn't. I like the characters and the dialogue. The story line is exciting and building suspense.
I'll enjoy reading the next chapter.
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Comment Written 09-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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One of the rules about writing is to keep it truthful. If it's not, the reader will pick up on it right away. Stephen King wrote that once. Thank you so much for your wonderful review, kidwrit! :)
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You are welcome
Deb:)))
