The Prodigal Child
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Comment from maxic59
A wonderful poem............It is very well written........a beautiful ending..........good luck with the competition entry..........well done
cheers max
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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A wonderful poem............It is very well written........a beautiful ending..........good luck with the competition entry..........well done
cheers max
Comment Written 06-May-2009
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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Thank you very much.
Comment from LairDog5
I thought this was a sad poem that brings up memories of what I'm sure I put my parents through. The last line:
The prodigal dances on.
May be true but many times it's quite the opposite. We children think we know more than we do. Great piece of work.
Lary
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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I thought this was a sad poem that brings up memories of what I'm sure I put my parents through. The last line:
The prodigal dances on.
May be true but many times it's quite the opposite. We children think we know more than we do. Great piece of work.
Lary
Comment Written 06-May-2009
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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Thank you very much. We children and our children, and all the children of earth.... LOL
Comment from words
This one blew me awaY!
Especially liked:Rambling from chest to closet to bed the mother
touches a shoe, wipes a picture, smoothes the spread.
Tears fall slowly, her reservoir emptied by time.
The prodigal dances on.
And the "prodigal dances on ".........
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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This one blew me awaY!
Especially liked:Rambling from chest to closet to bed the mother
touches a shoe, wipes a picture, smoothes the spread.
Tears fall slowly, her reservoir emptied by time.
The prodigal dances on.
And the "prodigal dances on ".........
Comment Written 06-May-2009
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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Thank you very much. I am grateful for the gift of stars, the fact that you liked it, and your very kind comments.
Comment from Soulester
Dear Skye, I enjoyed "The Prodigal Child." The last full verse is especially poignant. An interesting aspect to me was that you never say if it is a young man or young womanwho left. I read it a couple times to determine which, and decided it works for either--thus, the Pridigal CHILD. Clever! Great job!
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Dear Skye, I enjoyed "The Prodigal Child." The last full verse is especially poignant. An interesting aspect to me was that you never say if it is a young man or young womanwho left. I read it a couple times to determine which, and decided it works for either--thus, the Pridigal CHILD. Clever! Great job!
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review. It does work for either, so the reader can insert personal emotions and thoughts.
Comment from Lex82103
When I first started to read this poem I was wondering why it had the title it has, but as I started the ending part, I understood why and I kept reading because I wanted to find out about the title. Great poem.
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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When I first started to read this poem I was wondering why it had the title it has, but as I started the ending part, I understood why and I kept reading because I wanted to find out about the title. Great poem.
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from pixiemillie
"There was a man and he had 2 sons. The younger one was but a boy, when he took his inheritance, that he might enjoy what life had to offer- -the father waited. . .And in this case the mother as well. The sadness exudes from this post beginning with the freezer burned fatted calf, the cluttered entrance, bitterness of the father and the distraught mother. . .No feasting, no dancing to music, no alleluias to sing, for love it appears has left this home while the 'wild' one dances on with no regard. This reads so well, is descriptive in its sadness, flows well. No spags noted.
Thank you so much (That first scriptural line in this review is from the song entitled "Prodigal Son" it goes on to tell the whole story in song.)
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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"There was a man and he had 2 sons. The younger one was but a boy, when he took his inheritance, that he might enjoy what life had to offer- -the father waited. . .And in this case the mother as well. The sadness exudes from this post beginning with the freezer burned fatted calf, the cluttered entrance, bitterness of the father and the distraught mother. . .No feasting, no dancing to music, no alleluias to sing, for love it appears has left this home while the 'wild' one dances on with no regard. This reads so well, is descriptive in its sadness, flows well. No spags noted.
Thank you so much (That first scriptural line in this review is from the song entitled "Prodigal Son" it goes on to tell the whole story in song.)
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review. I really appreciate how you understand the inner meaning.
Comment from fictionwriter
What a sad state of affairs. I would hate to be the one so sad and wanting that all I can do is live in the past. I love the poem.
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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What a sad state of affairs. I would hate to be the one so sad and wanting that all I can do is live in the past. I love the poem.
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from S.Yocom
What a poignant poem, Kathy! It must be hard to bear when one's children don't turn out the way one had hoped. I especially like your closing line. Beautifully done.
Sally
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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What a poignant poem, Kathy! It must be hard to bear when one's children don't turn out the way one had hoped. I especially like your closing line. Beautifully done.
Sally
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from Carol D Parker
This a heart-rending story in a very creative poem. Believe me, I can identify with this. It's not easy to deal with. If this is your experience in some way, it nust help to write aboout it. I think the poem is excellent in every way.
Delora
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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This a heart-rending story in a very creative poem. Believe me, I can identify with this. It's not easy to deal with. If this is your experience in some way, it nust help to write aboout it. I think the poem is excellent in every way.
Delora
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thank you so much. There is always some truth in whatever we write. Raising children is HARD.
Comment from Judian James
Very well written and very sad. Everyone is weeping for the prodigal son. "Bitterness etching his face the father grays slowly. Rambling from chest to closet to bed the mother touches a shoe, wipes a picture, smoothes the spread" Excellent!!
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Very well written and very sad. Everyone is weeping for the prodigal son. "Bitterness etching his face the father grays slowly. Rambling from chest to closet to bed the mother touches a shoe, wipes a picture, smoothes the spread" Excellent!!
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thank you so much.
