Birthing Place
a reflective tanka86 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
A beautiful tanka!
I like it!
One mans trash is another mans (or birds lol) treasure. ;)
What a cute photo you chose for this poem.
Nic
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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A beautiful tanka!
I like it!
One mans trash is another mans (or birds lol) treasure. ;)
What a cute photo you chose for this poem.
Nic
Comment Written 07-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2009
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I liked this one :-) Thanks, Nic. Brooke :-)
Comment from jack silver
perfectly written. really enjoyed reading. It really told how one person can put something in the rubbish but another can pick it up and think it's a treasure.
Enjoyed reading and look forward to seeing the next.
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Jack
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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perfectly written. really enjoyed reading. It really told how one person can put something in the rubbish but another can pick it up and think it's a treasure.
Enjoyed reading and look forward to seeing the next.
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Jack
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 28-May-2009
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Jack, thanks so much - this is just so unexpected - and generous! Brooke :-)
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no probs. I have been away for a bit because I had some help on fixing wordings in my writing. I have fixed up the prologue for The Mask of Shadows to make it more reader friendly. I was wondering if you would like to take a look at it and see if it's any better.
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Jack
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sure!!! :-)
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I just added some SPAG comments to the bottom of the review - so go back to my old review to see them - your creative writing - what you have to say, is still far better than your technical ability to execute what you have to say :-)
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Thanks for that. I have made the few corrections you put in. When I have fixed the first chapter and second, I will let you know, so that, you can have a look.
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi How lovely this poem is. The little dove being an opportunist not missing a chance for making a nest, perfit choice of artwork. Good luck in the contest Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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Hi How lovely this poem is. The little dove being an opportunist not missing a chance for making a nest, perfit choice of artwork. Good luck in the contest Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 06-May-2009
reply by the author on 06-May-2009
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Thank you for another lovely review, Gaye. Brooke :-)
Comment from raimie
How beautiful, what a wonderful piece. That photo is so very darling. Your love for nature and all it includes is inspiring. Your ability to say so much with so few word sis amazing!
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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How beautiful, what a wonderful piece. That photo is so very darling. Your love for nature and all it includes is inspiring. Your ability to say so much with so few word sis amazing!
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Raimie, thank you for another thoughtful review, Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
You should do well with this, Brooke. You've had me thinking of nesting birds to the point where I've been examining the trees in my yard, looking for the beginning of nests. Nothing so far, although I suspect a swallow might be thinking of nesting in one of the eves of my house. Nuissance, as I have to prevent it.
Lovely little tanka poem. Love the artwork. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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You should do well with this, Brooke. You've had me thinking of nesting birds to the point where I've been examining the trees in my yard, looking for the beginning of nests. Nothing so far, although I suspect a swallow might be thinking of nesting in one of the eves of my house. Nuissance, as I have to prevent it.
Lovely little tanka poem. Love the artwork. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thanks so much - I have reviewers who leave materials out for the birds on their property :-) Brooke
Comment from vtmom13
Wonderful use of the photo to help enhance your poem. I love the way that all the words fit together and sound smooth, even without the rhyme. You have painted such a lovely picture of Springs renewal.
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Wonderful use of the photo to help enhance your poem. I love the way that all the words fit together and sound smooth, even without the rhyme. You have painted such a lovely picture of Springs renewal.
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thanks so much - I always appreciate your visits and comments. Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
pigeon pecks up sick,
nutritious, warm, and yummy,
belly full all day.
Some drunkard's wasted dinner
turned to good use for a change.
My reflection of your reflection :-). I liked how you'd given dual perspective to illustrate nature vs human reaction ...
Mike
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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pigeon pecks up sick,
nutritious, warm, and yummy,
belly full all day.
Some drunkard's wasted dinner
turned to good use for a change.
My reflection of your reflection :-). I liked how you'd given dual perspective to illustrate nature vs human reaction ...
Mike
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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I love this!!! Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Crusty
Another fine poem. This one doesn't have to rhyme, now that's my kind of poem. I can handle that. LOL
Lovely presentation again Brooke. Spectacular.
Brad...
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Another fine poem. This one doesn't have to rhyme, now that's my kind of poem. I can handle that. LOL
Lovely presentation again Brooke. Spectacular.
Brad...
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Brad,thank you - since it doesn't rhyme, this one gave me problems! It is extremely difficult for me to resist the temptation to rhyme. Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"Birthing Place" is another beautifully written tanka poem. Perfectly written, with a nice rhythm and reads so smooth. Well done. I like the picture too.
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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"Birthing Place" is another beautifully written tanka poem. Perfectly written, with a nice rhythm and reads so smooth. Well done. I like the picture too.
Comment Written 04-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thanks so much - sorry I was not able to comment on the art sale story beginning - I wanted to put in my two cents and encourage you to finish the story - I love the premise. Brooke
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Thanks Brooke. I will finish that story. I'm also hard at work trying to get the next chapter of my main story out. So much to do, so little time, LOL.
Take care!
Steve
Comment from sara-beth
Oh, I love doves! They made a nest in my yard once, and I was so excited when the babies were born! This is an example of how we take for granted that every part of the earth is used for something creative!
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Oh, I love doves! They made a nest in my yard once, and I was so excited when the babies were born! This is an example of how we take for granted that every part of the earth is used for something creative!
Comment Written 04-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Sara-beth, a third lovely review - thank you!! :-)
