Quaterns: Observations on Life
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Comment from Phil Kitom
Your writing sings to me and creates a picture of a beating heart. The pulsation of both heart and pulse appear to syncranise with the poetic flow of your writing. As a newcomer to ths site look forward to reading more of your work... thank you
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Your writing sings to me and creates a picture of a beating heart. The pulsation of both heart and pulse appear to syncranise with the poetic flow of your writing. As a newcomer to ths site look forward to reading more of your work... thank you
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Phil, thank you yet again - I welcome you to Fan Story. I just read your wonderful piece about the bull at the bull fight - you will be a huge asset to our community. Brooke :-)
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Thank you Brooke the poems that are dear to me have an emotional effect when I write. I have written for many years and felt that i would like to share some of my work with others.
Comment from Rar22
I just returned to fanstory and am happy to find one of your poems again :) Once again, this is lovely and the form is very tight. The repetition and movement of "sure and steady beat" from beginning to end is effective and gives the piece aim and structure. Great work!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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I just returned to fanstory and am happy to find one of your poems again :) Once again, this is lovely and the form is very tight. The repetition and movement of "sure and steady beat" from beginning to end is effective and gives the piece aim and structure. Great work!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Welcome back and thank you :-) I appreciate your taking the time to visit and comment. Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well done you have taken something most precious to all of us and written about it there are many that just take life for granted regards Fuller
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Very well done you have taken something most precious to all of us and written about it there are many that just take life for granted regards Fuller
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Fuller, you're right - many take it for granted. Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I liked it!
I liked the way this one felt like I was reading the lyrics to a song. I liked it enough not to complain about it!
:0D
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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I liked it!
I liked the way this one felt like I was reading the lyrics to a song. I liked it enough not to complain about it!
:0D
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Nescher, no complaining??? What ever am I going to do? LOL Thanks, Brooke :-D
Comment from adamlipert
hi
this is a great poem. and i think its great because first its not a cliche poem. you took a theme and ran with it. and it beams with realism. i feel alot of poems are the same old same. and in todays world after a billion poems have been written its hard not to be the same. but you took the "same" and made it 100 percent "yours" and thats why i think this is a hands down 5 star poem. each stanza is unique and is something i would interrupt a friend and say "hey man! listen to this!"
great writing,
sincerely,
a. :)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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hi
this is a great poem. and i think its great because first its not a cliche poem. you took a theme and ran with it. and it beams with realism. i feel alot of poems are the same old same. and in todays world after a billion poems have been written its hard not to be the same. but you took the "same" and made it 100 percent "yours" and thats why i think this is a hands down 5 star poem. each stanza is unique and is something i would interrupt a friend and say "hey man! listen to this!"
great writing,
sincerely,
a. :)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Adam, thank you - I truly appreciate your comments - yes, there are times when I've read a dozen poems and they all blur together, so I am really grateful to hear you think this poem has an originality to it. Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke A great poem, rhymes well, and verses well placed. I love the blood red background. Your blood keeps pumping around and you keep pumping out the poems.
Cheers GAye
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Hi Brooke A great poem, rhymes well, and verses well placed. I love the blood red background. Your blood keeps pumping around and you keep pumping out the poems.
Cheers GAye
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Gaye, thank you - I truly appreciate it. Brooke :-)
Comment from MJMuraco
I haven't had time to review these past few days because of real life commitments. It was so refreshing to read you poem and how it pertains to life. It flowed nicely and I truly enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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I haven't had time to review these past few days because of real life commitments. It was so refreshing to read you poem and how it pertains to life. It flowed nicely and I truly enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Mary Jayne, thanks so much for your gracious response, Brooke :-)
Comment from jkhudson
I liked the repeat of the first line moving down the positions in the stanzas, steady and sure! Very nice poem that brings a peace in its consistancy. Does that make sense?~:O)J
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I liked the repeat of the first line moving down the positions in the stanzas, steady and sure! Very nice poem that brings a peace in its consistancy. Does that make sense?~:O)J
Comment Written 29-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Jules, thank you - yes, the peace in consistency thing makes lots of sense. Brooke :-)
Comment from Helen Tan
I see you're enjoying this new format. =D
its course a circuit to complete
Again this theme is suited to this quatrain format which also has a course to complete - the shifting of "I feel the sure and steady beat" through the verses. You're making the selection of theme and line into an art form.
As tides of fortune ebb and flow,
the rise that follows each retreat.
I found the continuation of images well done here, rise and fall of tides.
an affirmation meant to show
the rise that follows each retreat.
This is to me, the pick me up after a fall, good times follows bad. It's a promise that things will improve with time.
but till death stills that final drum,
I feel the sure and steady beat.
I love these lines, the contrast of life, of our beating heart with the strike of death, followed by total silence
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2009
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I see you're enjoying this new format. =D
its course a circuit to complete
Again this theme is suited to this quatrain format which also has a course to complete - the shifting of "I feel the sure and steady beat" through the verses. You're making the selection of theme and line into an art form.
As tides of fortune ebb and flow,
the rise that follows each retreat.
I found the continuation of images well done here, rise and fall of tides.
an affirmation meant to show
the rise that follows each retreat.
This is to me, the pick me up after a fall, good times follows bad. It's a promise that things will improve with time.
but till death stills that final drum,
I feel the sure and steady beat.
I love these lines, the contrast of life, of our beating heart with the strike of death, followed by total silence
Comment Written 29-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2009
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I do get a tad obsessive - I know :-D Thanks, Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"I Feel the Sure and Steady Beat" is another beautifully written contemplative quatern poem. Bravo! This is life, it surrounds us and binds us together. Hmm, sounding like something familiar here. Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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"I Feel the Sure and Steady Beat" is another beautifully written contemplative quatern poem. Bravo! This is life, it surrounds us and binds us together. Hmm, sounding like something familiar here. Well done!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
