Quaterns: Observations on Life
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well done this has a very good feel to it with very detailed notes below sharing your memory's with the readers regards Fuller
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Very well done this has a very good feel to it with very detailed notes below sharing your memory's with the readers regards Fuller
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Fuller, thank you, as always!! Brooke :-)
Comment from EllieKaye
You can't imagine how it gleamed,
that laughing water struck by light.
I skipped a stone upon a stream
that summer day when all seemed right
I do love the trivia, but in this poem, I specially love the memory of how simple and sweet and carefree the 'skipping stones days' were!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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You can't imagine how it gleamed,
that laughing water struck by light.
I skipped a stone upon a stream
that summer day when all seemed right
I do love the trivia, but in this poem, I specially love the memory of how simple and sweet and carefree the 'skipping stones days' were!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Thanks so much, Ellie :-) Brooke
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
Aha! So there is a method to the madness. I saw this pattern in another poem of yours that I reviewed. It's very nice. The repetition of the selected line really adds to the tone and to the point of emphasis in the poem. I think I like this one best because of the memories it evokes from my childhood. Very nicely done. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2009
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Aha! So there is a method to the madness. I saw this pattern in another poem of yours that I reviewed. It's very nice. The repetition of the selected line really adds to the tone and to the point of emphasis in the poem. I think I like this one best because of the memories it evokes from my childhood. Very nicely done. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2009
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I've now written three quaterns and am totally in love with the form. :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke How clever of you this poem and skipping a stone even six times. I've never really got the hang of it. I thought it was more of a mans thing. Anyway love the poem. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Hi Brooke How clever of you this poem and skipping a stone even six times. I've never really got the hang of it. I thought it was more of a mans thing. Anyway love the poem. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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It's also a little girl's thing with her dad :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from dportwood
I like this poetic style. The repetition keeps the subject connected and focused. As to skipping stones, I think my record is 12. Thanks for posting. Well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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I like this poetic style. The repetition keeps the subject connected and focused. As to skipping stones, I think my record is 12. Thanks for posting. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Twelve is excellent - I marvel when I see someone hit twelve. Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from S.Yocom
This is an beautiful quatem, Brooke. Even though it is your first one, you have demonstrated a mastery of the form. I especially like the abab rhyme scheme. Brava.
Sally
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This is an beautiful quatem, Brooke. Even though it is your first one, you have demonstrated a mastery of the form. I especially like the abab rhyme scheme. Brava.
Sally
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Sally, thanks so much. I truly appreciate your generous response and warm comments. I just posted my third quatern in three days - I am smitten with the form. Brooke :-)
Comment from Just2Write
Great poem about a feat I have yet to accomplish. I remember teaching my granddaughter to do it at Deception Pass in Washington State. She felt like a million bucks when she finally did it. Loved this poem - a new format for you, and you did it justice. Rose.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Great poem about a feat I have yet to accomplish. I remember teaching my granddaughter to do it at Deception Pass in Washington State. She felt like a million bucks when she finally did it. Loved this poem - a new format for you, and you did it justice. Rose.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Rose, you taught her when you couldn't do it yourself? That's pretty good!!! Thanks, Brooke
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My own mother used to say, you don't have to be green to know what asparagus is. My father used to say - They what can - do. Them what can't - teach. I just kept telling her the principles, and she kept throwing the stones. It is a good thing she is so patient, but she got it.
Comment from NightWriter
"Skipping Stones" is a beautiful contemplative quatern that reads perfectly smooth from beginning to end. I manage maybe two or three skips myself, but your son with twelve is really good. And that record of 51, what kind of rock can do that?!?! Amazing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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"Skipping Stones" is a beautiful contemplative quatern that reads perfectly smooth from beginning to end. I manage maybe two or three skips myself, but your son with twelve is really good. And that record of 51, what kind of rock can do that?!?! Amazing.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much - since I've never gotten past 5 or 6, I have no idea how one manages 51 :-) Brooke
Comment from photopoet
Very beautifully done, Brooke, with your usual attention to the technical aspects of form. Quite effective repetition of the same line in each stanza that is a wonderful thread through the poem. A simple reflection well said.
Barb
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Very beautifully done, Brooke, with your usual attention to the technical aspects of form. Quite effective repetition of the same line in each stanza that is a wonderful thread through the poem. A simple reflection well said.
Barb
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Barb, thank you for your thoughtful comments, Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
I think my record is about three or four, lol. I never was very good; my Dad was better, but then he probably had more patience at the time. You've picked your topic very shrewdly for your first quatern; it matches the form marvellously, and you've done a fantastic job with it.
Mike
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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I think my record is about three or four, lol. I never was very good; my Dad was better, but then he probably had more patience at the time. You've picked your topic very shrewdly for your first quatern; it matches the form marvellously, and you've done a fantastic job with it.
Mike
Comment Written 28-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2009
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Thank you - you're one of only a couple to notice that!! Brooke :-)
