The Ticking Clock
reflective quatrains85 total reviews
Comment from Peter@Poole
Wow! This is incredible, my dear. I can only begin to tell you of the stupefaction your deft words induce, but I can't express the fullness of my admiration. I love your poetry. Peter
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Wow! This is incredible, my dear. I can only begin to tell you of the stupefaction your deft words induce, but I can't express the fullness of my admiration. I love your poetry. Peter
Comment Written 25-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Peter, so glad you found this old post :-) Brooke
Comment from raw form
Life and its many wonders will always surprise us Brooke. I heard that a fly has the life span of thirty days I dont know if this is true but could you imagine that! thirty days probably 15 if ya get swatted outside someones porch lol always interesting reads from you.
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Life and its many wonders will always surprise us Brooke. I heard that a fly has the life span of thirty days I dont know if this is true but could you imagine that! thirty days probably 15 if ya get swatted outside someones porch lol always interesting reads from you.
Comment Written 05-May-2009
reply by the author on 05-May-2009
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Thanks for your most interesting observations :-) Brooke
Comment from ersorenson
You have vivid description here as you describe the dinosaur and monarch butterfly. This poem has wonderful rythm and is easy to read. The picture and colors scheme make this an overall sensory experience. Nice poem Brooke.
Eric
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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You have vivid description here as you describe the dinosaur and monarch butterfly. This poem has wonderful rythm and is easy to read. The picture and colors scheme make this an overall sensory experience. Nice poem Brooke.
Eric
Comment Written 27-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2009
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Eric, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke The only trouble I had was the rhyming of 'dinosaurs' and 'horns' Perhaps it is just my Kiwi accent. Otherwise love everything about it, glorious chose of colours to go with the butterfly. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Hi Brooke The only trouble I had was the rhyming of 'dinosaurs' and 'horns' Perhaps it is just my Kiwi accent. Otherwise love everything about it, glorious chose of colours to go with the butterfly. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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I know - accents mess up lots of rhyming and syllable count stuff for international readers on this site - at least you recognize that and don't assume people have done something wrong! :-D Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from mstad55
A busy little girl with the reaserch paper. Time doesn't stand still for even a moment, and we are all but a blip on the radar of the ticking clock in the cycle of life. Even though it's not meant to be, it's kind of sad. We only have a moment and then we are history. What shall they say of are bones 65 million years from now? Will they say, Hey these two were Fanstory buddies, we can tell by the keyboard fingers and squinty eyes from reading too much.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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A busy little girl with the reaserch paper. Time doesn't stand still for even a moment, and we are all but a blip on the radar of the ticking clock in the cycle of life. Even though it's not meant to be, it's kind of sad. We only have a moment and then we are history. What shall they say of are bones 65 million years from now? Will they say, Hey these two were Fanstory buddies, we can tell by the keyboard fingers and squinty eyes from reading too much.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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I've been working at my church's annual flea market all day, so I'm already tired and prone to be giddy - and that last comment you made has put me over the edge. LOL Thanks, Mike :-) Brooke
Comment from Tellis
This is a very good poem and the imagery is excellent. I enjoyed reading this very well written piece of poetry.
Tellis
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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This is a very good poem and the imagery is excellent. I enjoyed reading this very well written piece of poetry.
Tellis
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Tellis, thank you for your kind review, Brooke :-)
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpearl,
Very nice poem. Very descriptive and created impressions are very vivid and understandable. The flow was good. The theme was excellent!
I did spot an error for you-
(with armored sides and fearsome size)
grammar is wrong **of fearsome size with armored sides
Everything else was wonderful.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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adewpearl,
Very nice poem. Very descriptive and created impressions are very vivid and understandable. The flow was good. The theme was excellent!
I did spot an error for you-
(with armored sides and fearsome size)
grammar is wrong **of fearsome size with armored sides
Everything else was wonderful.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Oatmeal, thanks - I did like your way better and just edited :-) Brooke
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good contest entry you have penned. I used to collect dinosaurs when I was a little girl and butterflies are one of my favorite of all. They are so dainty. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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This is a very good contest entry you have penned. I used to collect dinosaurs when I was a little girl and butterflies are one of my favorite of all. They are so dainty. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Teri, thank you - I appreciate your encouraging review :-) Brooke
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hugs
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a fine entry in the contest, Brooke. You covered the bases, from the big and ugly dinosaurs to the tiny beautiful monarchs to the powerful waves. I like it. Good luck in the contest.
Sally
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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This is a fine entry in the contest, Brooke. You covered the bases, from the big and ugly dinosaurs to the tiny beautiful monarchs to the powerful waves. I like it. Good luck in the contest.
Sally
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Sally, thanks for your supportive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Eaglewolf
Extremely informative. I love dinosaurs they are such fascinating creatures. Of course I'd hate to meet one in a dark alley, even if it was a herbivore. So true that when time is up, time is up.. that's just the way of things. Wonderful poem as always.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Extremely informative. I love dinosaurs they are such fascinating creatures. Of course I'd hate to meet one in a dark alley, even if it was a herbivore. So true that when time is up, time is up.. that's just the way of things. Wonderful poem as always.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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I think if I met one in a dark alley, I'd never live to write the poem about it! LOL Thanks so much, Brooke
