Writing Prompt Entry
Opening Lines and Final Thoughts32 total reviews
Comment from prodigal
I think you have some best sellers in there. This contest has some talented writers entered into it, but this is by far the best I have read. Way to go. - Sam
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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I think you have some best sellers in there. This contest has some talented writers entered into it, but this is by far the best I have read. Way to go. - Sam
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thanks. This was really a fun prompt. I sincerely appreciate your encouagement and a 6 to boot! Be still my heart!!!
Comment from Marjorie D.
Good lines one and all, Smurphgirl. My favorites were one and three in the opening line and the fifth closing line. The "fart" line would seem to indicate a humorous story, and it would be a real hook, making the reader want to know how that would be possible. LOL
Knowing my daughter hates me brakes (breaks) my heart ...
Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Good lines one and all, Smurphgirl. My favorites were one and three in the opening line and the fifth closing line. The "fart" line would seem to indicate a humorous story, and it would be a real hook, making the reader want to know how that would be possible. LOL
Knowing my daughter hates me brakes (breaks) my heart ...
Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thanks, I fixed that one.
Comment from laurelp
Fascinating. This is the third one I have read. You can tell the state of each one of you by the topic lines you have choses. Your lines are far more full of discomfort than some of the others.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Fascinating. This is the third one I have read. You can tell the state of each one of you by the topic lines you have choses. Your lines are far more full of discomfort than some of the others.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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I know. I gues I was in a dark mood...my usual state of mind. I had fun with this though.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
You know what, Valerie? There is about a dozen books in this lot! Every one of them is brilliant. Only one minor spaggie:"...hates me brakes my heart" - breaks my heart. Although, I suppose, depending on the storyline, 'brakes' might also work! LOL
Great stuff. Will you develop any of them I wonder? I might give this prompt a go myself, you know......
Warmest wishes and blessings
Kat
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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You know what, Valerie? There is about a dozen books in this lot! Every one of them is brilliant. Only one minor spaggie:"...hates me brakes my heart" - breaks my heart. Although, I suppose, depending on the storyline, 'brakes' might also work! LOL
Great stuff. Will you develop any of them I wonder? I might give this prompt a go myself, you know......
Warmest wishes and blessings
Kat
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thaks, I had fun with this one.
Comment from snash41
These opening lines were fantastic. Each line was a story in itself. The final thoughts were powerful lessons that each of us should use in our day to day lives.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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These opening lines were fantastic. Each line was a story in itself. The final thoughts were powerful lessons that each of us should use in our day to day lives.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thanks, glad you like them. I had fun with this one.
Comment from nora arjuna
hi there, yes i think they are interesting opening and closings. by looking at the example, at first i thought the opening and closing should be related, but i may be wrong. best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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hi there, yes i think they are interesting opening and closings. by looking at the example, at first i thought the opening and closing should be related, but i may be wrong. best wishes to you.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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I'll double check but I don't think so. Thanks for the heads up.
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you are right. i just checked with Sam. :)
Comment from WRITER1
I finally get this prompt it has been a question in my mind as to what was going on. Okay you did a good job on this the beginnings and endings were all good.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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I finally get this prompt it has been a question in my mind as to what was going on. Okay you did a good job on this the beginnings and endings were all good.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thanks. I had a little fun with this one.
Comment from adewpearl
brakes my heart should be breaks
wow, I think you have a whole bunch of sentences you need to finish writing the stories to because they're all great ideas - and such a range from the grimly serious to the hilariously funny - putting the teeth in is my favorite for no good reason at all other than it tickles my fancy. LOL Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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brakes my heart should be breaks
wow, I think you have a whole bunch of sentences you need to finish writing the stories to because they're all great ideas - and such a range from the grimly serious to the hilariously funny - putting the teeth in is my favorite for no good reason at all other than it tickles my fancy. LOL Brooke
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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It's also true...Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from jlsavell
Smurphgirl, really well done..Opening lines are fantastic and closing lines..well they offer more than just a closing line..perhaps something we should all ponder on before the closing..well done..best wishes on the contest..jlsavell
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Smurphgirl, really well done..Opening lines are fantastic and closing lines..well they offer more than just a closing line..perhaps something we should all ponder on before the closing..well done..best wishes on the contest..jlsavell
Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Thanks. I had fun with this one.
Comment from Deejharrington
Excellent! I wouldn't be surprised to see these being used as the beginnings of some new stories. Or is that plagiarism? One small typo "Knowing my daughter hates me "brakes" shouldn't it be "breaks"? I guess both would work. To tear a part or to stop.
Good Luck!
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Excellent! I wouldn't be surprised to see these being used as the beginnings of some new stories. Or is that plagiarism? One small typo "Knowing my daughter hates me "brakes" shouldn't it be "breaks"? I guess both would work. To tear a part or to stop.
Good Luck!
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Comment Written 19-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2009
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Yes, it should be breaks...thanks. I had fun with this one.
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You're welcome
