Comment from Freeflyer

Excellent

I believe we have some very good openers and closers here. I love your sense of humour and think Numbers three and five of the openers would get me right into reading the rest. Numbers two and five in the closers appeal to me. Good luck.
Freeflyer

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009

Thanks. It was a fun prompt for me.

Comment from Firefly54

Excellent

6. Knowing my daughter hates me breaks my heart but I continue to cling to the hope that someday she will forgive me.

This one is particular makes the reader need to know WHY?

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009

Thanks. This was a fun prompt.

Comment from valeries26

Excellent

I like these opening and closing lines. Some of these lines seem really amusing. Overall: You did a good job on this contest entry. I saw nothing wrong with the text. Good luck. Val

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009

Thanks. I had a lot of fun with this one.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

You have some good one liners that are guaranteed to hold the reader's attention. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009

Thank you. Writing froma child's prospetive is difficult and often requires simplistic dialogue and descriptions. I appreciate that you understand this.

reply by c_lucas on 21-Apr-2009

You're welcome, S. Charlie

Comment from Cranial Thinker

Excellent

This is fascinating I've never read anything like this before that is in this format,though I must say evey thing worked together to paint one solitary picture.Job well done,Smurphgirl.Cranial Thinker

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009

Thank you. This was a fun one for me.

reply by Cranial Thinker on 21-Apr-2009

You are very welcome,Smurphgirl.

Comment from thorney

Excellent

Hi there Smurphgirl. Well, you certainly came up with some doozies there. And, being the crude git that I am, it's not hard to guess which opening line I like best!
I'll give you a clue: It comes after 2, but before 4.

Closing thought? 2. Death did not frighten me; knowing no one cared was my only regret.

Good stuff! I hope you do well in the contest.
Regards, Pete.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009

Thanks. I had fun with this one.

Comment from Marathonwriter

Excellent

Hi Smurphgirl,
Are these actual story ideas? Or books you have written? I think that my favorites are 2 and 5. They seem like an opening and closing to books that I would read. I hope that helps LOL. This is difficult to review.
Love,
Chris

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009

Thanks. I had a lot of fun with this one.

Comment from Domino

Excellent

I just reserved a spot here. Now I've read yours, I wish I hadn't! These are all brilliant. I'm trying to pick favourites, but can't. The 'fart' one fascinates me, LOL.
Good luck n best wishes, Ray xx

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009

Thanks so very much. I had a good time with this.

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Oh, this contest has been fun to follow. I LOVE #3 for your opening line. Hilarious and I'd like to read the essays that end in #1, #3, and #5. Oh hell, I'd love them all. Excellent entry for this contest.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009

Thanks. I had fun with this one.

Comment from Sandollar

Excellent

I loved all of the opening and closing lines. My favorite was, of course, number 2. My dear, don't you know suicide is a permanent solution to a temporary problem? For the final thoughts, I enjoyed all of them. Number 3. (Christmas was obviously his favorite day but for some reason, Santa was not in his usual jolly mood.) seems like it could be an opener and a good one.

All your lines made want to read the story behind them. Good Work!
I found no errors.

Sandollar

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009

Thanks. I had fun with this one.