Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

This is really rather lovely,
albeit so sad -- has a smooth
flow to the words, cleverly
crafted as a Rictameter Poem.

Well penned, my friend.
Good luck with the contest.

Margaret.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

This is really good. Echoes. Never thought about it like that. I know the smallest things can trigger memories. But I like them being called echoes because that means they'll always come back. joan marie

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from starkat

Excellent

Hi diane,
This is a kind of a metaphorical trip through the rooms of memory. Echoes are heard and felt throughout the house, as you open and close the doors. There is a choice which doors to open and close... and I think that as time goes by, people close the doors of sadness and open wide those of love and laughter. We want to identify those rooms where tresured memories are stored.

Beautifully written and presented rictameter. Lovely imagery abounds that invite the reader to perhaps look at the rooms in their memories, and see which doors are opened or closed.

Enjoyed your rictameter. Excellent contest entry. Wishing you the best of luck. Cheers.. ;) Art

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009

Hello Art!
Much appreciation for your heartfelt and kind reviiew! diane

Comment from Writewoman

Excellent

Hmmm -- interesting poem in content and structure. It eloquently describes grief. I thought perhaps you were widowed until I read your profile. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from sherrygreywolf

Excellent

A nicely done entry for the Rictameter contest. I didn't see any problems with the form requirements or spelling. Your words carry a poingant, yet sweet sentiment. I especially loved the first three lines, "Echoes - Of your laughter - Serenade the stillness". Very nice!

great work - sherry

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from Crusty

Excellent

Ooh, I like this poem very much. It has a really nice feel. It flows exceptionally well, and I love your word choices. This line. [ Serenade the stillness ] just wonderful. You have a beautiful gift. I feel honoured to have reviewed this for you, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Thank you for sharing it.
Cheers.
Brad...

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

Mrs. KT,

excellent writing and a well thought out story. The descriptives are wonderful and the story offers us a great message. A good contest entry. Well done

Reggie

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

Hi Diane. This is such a beautiful piece of poetry written in rictameter style. It has a wonderful, haunting quality to it. This is certainly a winner in my opinion. Good luck

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from skye

Excellent

Lovely words in this structured and formal style poem.
I love these lines...
-- Serenade the stillness
they make the echoes come alive.
Very well done.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Lovely, lovely, lovely. It's always such a treat to read a post of yours and this is no exception. I've sort of developed an attitude toward these short forms because so many think they're an easy way to polish off a piece in few words and post crap. Not the case here. Did I say lovely yet? excellent, my friend, truly excellent.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009

Hey Judian!
Much appreciation. I haven't been able to do much writing as of late, but this is a form that interests me. Just wish I had time to write a pantoum...or a story in a rhyming format that flows well! Again, thank you for your kind review and I hope all is well! diane

reply by Judian James on 20-Apr-2009

I tried a new form for me with "Tomorrow" I think you'd like that one.