Sweet Brown-eyed Susan
whimsical quatrains96 total reviews
Comment from Roisin
What a lovely, clever little poem. You have such a wonderful imagination and you have the ability to take a subject and put your own stamp on it. Your rhymes and rhythm are perfect and I love the up-beat tone. I really enjoyed this one.
Hugs
Roisin
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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What a lovely, clever little poem. You have such a wonderful imagination and you have the ability to take a subject and put your own stamp on it. Your rhymes and rhythm are perfect and I love the up-beat tone. I really enjoyed this one.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Roisin, thank you - I was in the mood for fluffy fun though I just found out from an earlier review that I evidently also made a quite profound point about the environment and man's possessiveness. Sometimes I astound myself! LOL Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
It'll be a while before those start blooming here. I love that you write about flowers. It gives me ideas for what might be missing in my own gardens. Brown-eyed Susans are one of my favorite low-maintenance fall flowers. Lovely flowers, lovely poetry.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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It'll be a while before those start blooming here. I love that you write about flowers. It gives me ideas for what might be missing in my own gardens. Brown-eyed Susans are one of my favorite low-maintenance fall flowers. Lovely flowers, lovely poetry.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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They're not blooming here yet either - just in my imagination. LOL Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
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Hey, I was out cleaning leaves and stuff out of a bed this afternoon. What fun! I trimmed rose bushes, cleaned up a few clumps of Irises. And cleaned up the old stems of black-eyed susans from the bed. What fun. Most beds are still under snow, but this one is in full sun and raised, and the daffodils are peaking through the mulch. Thought you might want to know. Spring has sprung!
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Hurray!!!!!!!!!!!! :-D
Comment from Annelisa
What a fun and sweet poem. We have tons of brown-eyed Susans growing along our road in late summer. I just love them.
I love your nature poems the best. This is a great line: you wild, bewitching flower.
Well done!
Annelisa
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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What a fun and sweet poem. We have tons of brown-eyed Susans growing along our road in late summer. I just love them.
I love your nature poems the best. This is a great line: you wild, bewitching flower.
Well done!
Annelisa
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Annelisa, thank you - I'm so glad you enjoy my nature poems :-) Brooke
Comment from ickajopat
The theme of this poem is the irrepressible implse in us to possess the things or persons we like and admire without considering the harm and damage we cause to the environment and the persons or animals themselves. It is an unobtrusive appeal for respect and circumspection when making our egoistic claims on possession. But sometimes the impulse is too strong that we cannot resist it and we are captured and ensnared by beauty. Best regards from icajopat.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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The theme of this poem is the irrepressible implse in us to possess the things or persons we like and admire without considering the harm and damage we cause to the environment and the persons or animals themselves. It is an unobtrusive appeal for respect and circumspection when making our egoistic claims on possession. But sometimes the impulse is too strong that we cannot resist it and we are captured and ensnared by beauty. Best regards from icajopat.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Thank you for such thoughtful comments, Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke
It's so sweet how you have the brown eyed Susan talk.
Just don't stick your nose in her eye I have gotten a surprise when I did, with a honey bee saying, 'This is my Flower--go away' the stung my nose
I love you happy poem
smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Hello Brooke
It's so sweet how you have the brown eyed Susan talk.
Just don't stick your nose in her eye I have gotten a surprise when I did, with a honey bee saying, 'This is my Flower--go away' the stung my nose
I love you happy poem
smiles
Gert
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Gert, sorry about the bee sting!!! I don't know as if I've ever been stung right on my nose :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
You witch! You stole my flowery soul.
You sucked me with your eyes.
You drowned my smiles with wicked wiles
and pressed me down to size.
You ironed my face at breakneck pace,
your malice killed my joy.
Your hateful plan, pancake or flan,
Will taste only of soy.
I'm Japanese Anemone, you silly witch, you see,
you flattened out the wrong flower, now I'm your enemy.
You put me in your Burdock bath, and hoped for fizzy drink,
but I taste not so yummy, so your hopes will now sink!
Mike
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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You witch! You stole my flowery soul.
You sucked me with your eyes.
You drowned my smiles with wicked wiles
and pressed me down to size.
You ironed my face at breakneck pace,
your malice killed my joy.
Your hateful plan, pancake or flan,
Will taste only of soy.
I'm Japanese Anemone, you silly witch, you see,
you flattened out the wrong flower, now I'm your enemy.
You put me in your Burdock bath, and hoped for fizzy drink,
but I taste not so yummy, so your hopes will now sink!
Mike
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Mike, haven't a down day???? LOL Next thing you know, my field of flowers is going to be drowning in puddles of blood while all their little heads are hacked off!!! I think you need to write a happy little fairy poem and then rent Fantasia and then go visit your sainted grandmom!!! Brooke :-)
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Aww, I thought this was fun! Plus, I'd just written you two nice ones, so I was all out of romance :-(
Mike
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Mike, don't frown. They are all nice ones. I was only joking with you. Don't pout and cry. That would make me sad. :-) Brooke
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Fear not, Lady Brooke, I am in pretty high spirits today ;-)
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Good, now I can resume smiling :-D
Comment from Rabianabian
Oh, this is really nice. Whimsical is really the word for it! I love it. The description is pretty good too. I would however, prefer something other than "lemon yellow". It makes me think of something sour.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Oh, this is really nice. Whimsical is really the word for it! I love it. The description is pretty good too. I would however, prefer something other than "lemon yellow". It makes me think of something sour.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Thank you - I did not think about anyone's having that negative association with lemon. I will ponder it! :-D Brooke
Comment from RG Hamilton
Outstanding rhyme, rhythm and imagery. You have complimented your work with the perfect picture.
"a lemon yellow sea,"
"you wild, bewitching flower."
...two of my favorite lines...
A pleasure to read.
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Outstanding rhyme, rhythm and imagery. You have complimented your work with the perfect picture.
"a lemon yellow sea,"
"you wild, bewitching flower."
...two of my favorite lines...
A pleasure to read.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Robert, thank you - you know how much I admire your poetry, so a six from you is heavenly :-) Brooke
Comment from Carol D Parker
What a clever, creative poem. I love the words you use,like, "She winked at me." I must tell you that all my life I've been calling them black-eyed Susans. So did everyone in my family. This is a beautiful poem that I really enjoyed.
Carol
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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What a clever, creative poem. I love the words you use,like, "She winked at me." I must tell you that all my life I've been calling them black-eyed Susans. So did everyone in my family. This is a beautiful poem that I really enjoyed.
Carol
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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They are called black eyed or brown eyed Susans - I checked with several websites that give those two names plus a list of others! Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Brooke, another of your gorgeous poems for me to drool over. I grow these in my garden because they're so pretty. Do you have them wild where you live? Lucky lady.
No faults; I couldn't possibly criticize perfection.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Brooke, another of your gorgeous poems for me to drool over. I grow these in my garden because they're so pretty. Do you have them wild where you live? Lucky lady.
No faults; I couldn't possibly criticize perfection.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Kat, yes, they grow wild around here - at least one website says they're the most common wildflower. That is not true of here - we have more buttercups and violets. Thanks so much, Brooke
