Sweet Brown-eyed Susan
whimsical quatrains96 total reviews
Comment from Fish
I went down to the garbage dump
and thought I saw a hand;
its middle finger sticking up
to cheer the stinky land.
Alas, 'twas not a hand at all
but roses in decay;
life's beauty turned to ebon death-
as love that's passed away.
Yes, I spend a lot of time at the dump...lol
Nice poem.
Yours, Fish
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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I went down to the garbage dump
and thought I saw a hand;
its middle finger sticking up
to cheer the stinky land.
Alas, 'twas not a hand at all
but roses in decay;
life's beauty turned to ebon death-
as love that's passed away.
Yes, I spend a lot of time at the dump...lol
Nice poem.
Yours, Fish
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Fish, what a charming poem about the dump - thank you for sharing it with me. LOL And thanks for the review! Brooke
Comment from earthlybeing
Lovely and well written. I love the bright color of Brown eyes Susan's. They seem to light up an area. Well written and enjoyable. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Lovely and well written. I love the bright color of Brown eyes Susan's. They seem to light up an area. Well written and enjoyable. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Jeanet, thanks so much!! Brooke
Comment from MJMuraco
Booke, well written poem but I never knew that there were brown eyed susans. I thought they were black eyed. I learn something new everyday from you. Your poem has great rhyme and rhythm.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Booke, well written poem but I never knew that there were brown eyed susans. I thought they were black eyed. I learn something new everyday from you. Your poem has great rhyme and rhythm.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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It's the same flower - I looked it up, and several sources say people call it both things - brown eyed sounded prettier to me, and the centers actually are brown, not black. Thank you :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well done very creative and again reads very well I enjoyed the journey it is again very well written and presented regards Fuller
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Very well done very creative and again reads very well I enjoyed the journey it is again very well written and presented regards Fuller
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Fuller, thank you - I appreciate your kind review, Brooke
Comment from Amicus
Geez, Brooke, you started out all wrong here--You should have written lovely well written memorable whimsical quatrains!
Diction and imagery really fine in this one to my way of thinking.
These are among my favorite flowers and now I have a poem to recite when I see them. Thanks.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Geez, Brooke, you started out all wrong here--You should have written lovely well written memorable whimsical quatrains!
Diction and imagery really fine in this one to my way of thinking.
These are among my favorite flowers and now I have a poem to recite when I see them. Thanks.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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thank you - you've just made a poet smile : -) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
Gee, this is a real stumper. It's quite good and an enjoyable read. I thought for a moment that the susan's were black-eyed, but that would be the pea. I think the only black eyed susan, is the lady that stayed too long at the bar and fell off her stool resulting in the description of her self affliction. mstad55
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Gee, this is a real stumper. It's quite good and an enjoyable read. I thought for a moment that the susan's were black-eyed, but that would be the pea. I think the only black eyed susan, is the lady that stayed too long at the bar and fell off her stool resulting in the description of her self affliction. mstad55
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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They are called black eyed or brown eyed - it's quite the controversy! LOL Please, no abuse in my cute poems :-) Brooke
Comment from Soulester
Love the flower--love the poem, Brooke. I can just see the little flower heads bobbing. Your rhymes work well and the flow is perfect for this subject. Question: Are you sure they are not Black-eyed Susans? I was recently told, quite emphatically, that they are Black-eyed Susans. I was so excited to see you call them Brown-eyed Susans, also. I just now looked in my American Heritage Dictionary, and to my chagrin, only Black-eyed Susan is listed. Haven't tried Google, yet. At any rate, I enjoyed your poem--as always!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Love the flower--love the poem, Brooke. I can just see the little flower heads bobbing. Your rhymes work well and the flow is perfect for this subject. Question: Are you sure they are not Black-eyed Susans? I was recently told, quite emphatically, that they are Black-eyed Susans. I was so excited to see you call them Brown-eyed Susans, also. I just now looked in my American Heritage Dictionary, and to my chagrin, only Black-eyed Susan is listed. Haven't tried Google, yet. At any rate, I enjoyed your poem--as always!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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I googled them - black eyed susans are also called brown eyed susans and a list of other names like brown betty - I went with brown because I thought it a prettier eye color, but take my word, I always research this stuff first :-) Thanks so much, Brooke
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I just Googled them, too--and made a copy of the entries to show my friend. Brown-eyed sounds much sweeter and makes better sense.
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yes, it does, since the center is actually brown, and yes, I thought a brown-eyed girl sounded sweeter too!! :-)
Comment from boberto
You know, Brooke, I once knew a brown eyed Susan
like this. She sure was wild and bewitching. I love the flower too. Technically, a good write as usual. When you grow up, you may be as good as me.
Rob
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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You know, Brooke, I once knew a brown eyed Susan
like this. She sure was wild and bewitching. I love the flower too. Technically, a good write as usual. When you grow up, you may be as good as me.
Rob
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Rob, I'm glad you have good memories of bewitching women :-)
I was hoping I wouldn't have to grow up, but if it means becoming a poet as good as you, I may have to give it a whirl. Thanks, Brooke :-)
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Thank you, dear for the compliment. Thankfully, I always have found women much more bewitching than men.
Rob
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Them, thar brown eyes will doer everytime! Beautiful pic and lovelier poem. Thought they were sunflowers when I looked at em.
Dave
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Them, thar brown eyes will doer everytime! Beautiful pic and lovelier poem. Thought they were sunflowers when I looked at em.
Dave
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Dave, thank you! They're too short for sunflowers :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Whmisical, but oh how lovely...touching, sweet...it actually made me sigh!!!!
Such a gorgeous poem on such a simple subject! Bravo!!!
I adore this stanza:I fought flirtation's pull at first --
I tend to be quite shy,
but she beguiled me with the look
she flashed from that brown eye
I know I am gushing...but,here, in praise of the well crafted verse, gushing is a good thing!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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Whmisical, but oh how lovely...touching, sweet...it actually made me sigh!!!!
Such a gorgeous poem on such a simple subject! Bravo!!!
I adore this stanza:I fought flirtation's pull at first --
I tend to be quite shy,
but she beguiled me with the look
she flashed from that brown eye
I know I am gushing...but,here, in praise of the well crafted verse, gushing is a good thing!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009
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You are gushing and I am smiling. Thank you!!!!! Brooke :-)
