Comment from EllieKaye

Excellent

Hi Brooke,
I love the images produced in your poem.

a lemon yellow sea,

its blossom winked at me.

but she beguiled me with the look
she flashed from that brown eye.

: ) Fun one!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009

Ellie Kaye, I'm so glad you enjoyed my little piece of fun. Thank you, Brooke

Comment from Justin Chopin

Excellent

Sounds like something that Robert Burns would write about his " Highland Mary." I love the way you worked out the Quatrains and made this a try romanticized poem which I must admit I really did enjoy.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009

Thank you for such a lovely compliment! Brooke :-)

Comment from sara-beth

Exceptional

This is awesome! I totally love it, with all my heart. This is what poetry should be, my dear lady. The last stanza made me feel truly gladdened with delight! This is the feeling I get from Charles Dickens novels, and Thomas Hardy,.....old world charm.......yay!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009

Sara-beth, thank you!! Your generous review and lovely comments have made my morning :-D Brooke

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hey, Brooke, no notes! Dammit! LOL!
I love the whimsiness here.

Ok to annoy you;

'A calming, yellow sea', as we know what 'lemon' looks like.

I guess 'brown eyed Susan' is the name for these flowers, which makes the poem doubly clever with its ambiguity
Short, sweet and spring-like romanticism.
Ray xx

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009

Ray, I suppose I could have given the scientific name of brown eyed Susans and told about the famous poem written about them a couple hundred years ago by some Brit, but I figured I'd please you with a no-notes poem. LOL
Yeah, I like lemon. LOL And they're really, really bright and gay flowers, not calming at all. Oh, I love to argue with you. If I haven't told you this before, I was the captain of my debate team and have always simply LOVED arguing - you make my day :-) Brooke

reply by Domino on 16-Apr-2009

LMAO, Brooke. I NEVER argue with a woman. What's the point? ;-) xx

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009

What's the point indeed? :-D

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

I'm glad this one caught my eye. I loved this poem about Brown-eyed Susan. The poem blows beautifully and really gives the reader a bouquet full of pleasure. Nice write, Brooke. Rose.

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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009

a bouquet of pleasure - that's a pretty image!!! Thank you, Rose :-) Brooke

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

What a lovely flower they are. Still got the mystery flower. Someone suggested Narcissis, but can't find anything close. Love the spring write. joan marie

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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2009

Are there any garden shops or florists near you where you can carry the potted plant? Thanks, Brooke

reply by joan marie on 16-Apr-2009

Didn't think about that. Good Idea. I can take a picture. It isn't a Narcissis. jm