Blood Relations - A Vampire Tale
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Death Before Sunrise"Some bloodlines run very deep.
22 total reviews
Comment from findingmyroom
Red Herring alert...Brook strains to see the tv, hmmm. Lots of action here, from the holy water plot to the death of the Godfather to the development of the relationship between Brook and Jim. Nice chapter!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2009
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Red Herring alert...Brook strains to see the tv, hmmm. Lots of action here, from the holy water plot to the death of the Godfather to the development of the relationship between Brook and Jim. Nice chapter!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and always encouraging review! :) There's a lot going on, LOL.
Comment from Vladilynn
geeessssshh!! what a relief!! that's good to hear!! that stan was okay!! My gosh!!!
nice dialogs too!! great next chapter please!!
Thank you for sharing
love much
Lynn ( ^ _______ ^ )
reply by the author on 08-May-2009
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geeessssshh!! what a relief!! that's good to hear!! that stan was okay!! My gosh!!!
nice dialogs too!! great next chapter please!!
Thank you for sharing
love much
Lynn ( ^ _______ ^ )
Comment Written 08-May-2009
reply by the author on 08-May-2009
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Thank you Lynn so much for all your support!!! :)
Steve
Comment from Sasha
I guess I got a head of myself...good to know holy water doesn't work. Personally I think Lori should have kicked Amanda's ass. Great chapter, lots of action and tension. Fun to read. Cannot wait until the next chapter.
reply by the author on 07-May-2009
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I guess I got a head of myself...good to know holy water doesn't work. Personally I think Lori should have kicked Amanda's ass. Great chapter, lots of action and tension. Fun to read. Cannot wait until the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-May-2009
reply by the author on 07-May-2009
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Thank you so much!!! That's exactly what I wanted too, but there was a struggle between her getting to Stan ASAP and kicking Amanda's ass. In this case, love triumphed over hate, with a little help from Vito, LOL. Thanks again!
Comment from nightraine1956
I read this one second. I guess I need to read them in order huh? This is a great chapter too. Lots of excitement and suspense. This will turn out to be a very good book
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2009
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I read this one second. I guess I need to read them in order huh? This is a great chapter too. Lots of excitement and suspense. This will turn out to be a very good book
Comment Written 24-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Nightraine1956! I'm sorry the story didn't offer much in points or dollars, which makes your review worth even more to me. Thank you also for your encouragement. :) I hope to get the next chapter out over the weekend.
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Looking forward to more. Have a great weekend.
Comment from tammipratt
Pace was very good.
This was interesting and I really enjoyed it.
Good descriptions and use of words to create some great images.
You've done a great job.
I can't see anything to improve.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2009
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Pace was very good.
This was interesting and I really enjoyed it.
Good descriptions and use of words to create some great images.
You've done a great job.
I can't see anything to improve.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging review! Creating an interesting story that can produce images in the reader's mind is the best compliment I could hope for as it tells me the magic in the story worked. I'm still working on my descriptions so in future writing the stories should get better (that's the goal anyway). Thanks again!
Comment from Jonez08
Hi Steve, excellent chapter. Full of action and imagery. So, the Godfather is gone...wow. I look forward to the next chapter. Good job!
Please wake up(,) honey,
Amanda's face drained of color (as) she saw Stan
(when)
Cassandra
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Hi Steve, excellent chapter. Full of action and imagery. So, the Godfather is gone...wow. I look forward to the next chapter. Good job!
Please wake up(,) honey,
Amanda's face drained of color (as) she saw Stan
(when)
Cassandra
Comment Written 14-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Cassandra! Yes, one trouble maker gone, only a billion more to go, LOL. Thanks for catching those spaggies. No matter how many times I read the chapter, these little things sneak through. These got past a few reviewer's eyes. Thanks again. Looking forward to your next chapter too.
Steve
Comment from rmdelta
Night writer,
another excellent chapter, my friend. Great dialogue throughout really place is over a lot of other books. It is very realistic and quite believable. Well done, NightWriter
Reggie
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Night writer,
another excellent chapter, my friend. Great dialogue throughout really place is over a lot of other books. It is very realistic and quite believable. Well done, NightWriter
Reggie
Comment Written 13-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging review, Reggie! :)
Comment from babylonia
looks like the godfather will be taking new residence. karma, gotta love it. LOL easy to read and follow. some spaggies.
Rushing to the room (comma) she found Stan lying on the balcony floor in a puddle of blood.
Looking at Brook (comma)he replied
(stray quotation mark) "Looking ahead, Jim replied, "Let's go home."
Helping Stan to his feet (comma) she replied,
imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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looks like the godfather will be taking new residence. karma, gotta love it. LOL easy to read and follow. some spaggies.
Rushing to the room (comma) she found Stan lying on the balcony floor in a puddle of blood.
Looking at Brook (comma)he replied
(stray quotation mark) "Looking ahead, Jim replied, "Let's go home."
Helping Stan to his feet (comma) she replied,
imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 13-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Thanks again, Barbara! What a nice review and the much appreciated encouragement. Thanks also for catching the spaggies. :)
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you are very welcome~
:P
Comment from Tellis
A great chapter and a really good end to the Godfather. LoL I enjoyed reading tis well written piece. Keep up the good work.
Tellis
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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A great chapter and a really good end to the Godfather. LoL I enjoyed reading tis well written piece. Keep up the good work.
Tellis
Comment Written 13-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much, Tellis! :)
Comment from oledihard
the tension was great. Switching between scenes you kept me interested as I visioned the whole thing like a movie. I'll have to keep on your story. I have a book on how to write about Vampires, but never tried. You have done a really great job, putting a new twist on it.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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the tension was great. Switching between scenes you kept me interested as I visioned the whole thing like a movie. I'll have to keep on your story. I have a book on how to write about Vampires, but never tried. You have done a really great job, putting a new twist on it.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review! That's exactly how I see it too, like a movie, so I'm glad to see that you saw it that way too. I didn't know there was a book out on how to write about vampires. Cool! Thanks again!
