Wash Day Never Ends
Reflective Quatrains97 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
This spiritual poem is simple, but has a very strong message.
This almost sounds like a hymn. You can sing it to the tune of Amazing Grace!
Lovely.
Nic
(catching up on inbox reviews) lol
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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This spiritual poem is simple, but has a very strong message.
This almost sounds like a hymn. You can sing it to the tune of Amazing Grace!
Lovely.
Nic
(catching up on inbox reviews) lol
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Nic, thank you :-) Never occurred to me to sing it - but yes, it uses a meter often used in hymns. :-) Brooke
Comment from NadineM
Brooke,
I enjoyed this poem and the humor in your author's notes! It's always hindsight, isn't it, that we see it would've just been easier to behave in the first place!
Thank-you for sharing this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Brooke,
I enjoyed this poem and the humor in your author's notes! It's always hindsight, isn't it, that we see it would've just been easier to behave in the first place!
Thank-you for sharing this lovely poem.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Nadine, thank you for "getting" it. :-) Brooke
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice introspective and reflective piece . Virtually everyone can relate with that struggle with temptation that often sees us in the pit of sin against our wish. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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This is a nice introspective and reflective piece . Virtually everyone can relate with that struggle with temptation that often sees us in the pit of sin against our wish. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Perp, thank you - I appreciate your thoughtfulness. Brooke
Comment from Aussie
The simple sketch was just the right artwork for your little poem; I liked your poem regarding temptation. So simple the words and yet so poignant its meaning. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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The simple sketch was just the right artwork for your little poem; I liked your poem regarding temptation. So simple the words and yet so poignant its meaning. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Kay, thank you! I came in second in the competition to a fun poem about dessert temptations, but that's okay. LOL Brooke
Comment from tammipratt
I loved your author notes on this! Well done, a great poem and lovely image to go with it. Great work again! No SPAG that I could see, sits all very well.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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I loved your author notes on this! Well done, a great poem and lovely image to go with it. Great work again! No SPAG that I could see, sits all very well.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from fayesh
Your short quatrains have a lot of wisdom in them, but also speak to human nature and the tendency to go astray. Without sins, there can be no salvation because there would be no need to save anyone.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Your short quatrains have a lot of wisdom in them, but also speak to human nature and the tendency to go astray. Without sins, there can be no salvation because there would be no need to save anyone.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Thank you for your perceptive and warm review, Brooke
Comment from nora arjuna
ah Brooke, i could very well relate to this. i'm committing little sins everyday and keep asking for His forgiveness. great one and all the best to you.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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ah Brooke, i could very well relate to this. i'm committing little sins everyday and keep asking for His forgiveness. great one and all the best to you.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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I bet God barely notices you little ones with the big old doozies going on! :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Good points in this poem, Brooke, and in your notes too. It is far easier to restrain that to retrain. Your verse is simple and short, yet gets the message across beautifully. Rose.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Good points in this poem, Brooke, and in your notes too. It is far easier to restrain that to retrain. Your verse is simple and short, yet gets the message across beautifully. Rose.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Rose, thank you so much - you obviously get my point! Brooke
Comment from debskatz
Hi brooke,
Nice quatrains! Easily read & understood & the rhymes are perfect. Good job! And good luck in the contest.
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Hi brooke,
Nice quatrains! Easily read & understood & the rhymes are perfect. Good job! And good luck in the contest.
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 13-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Thank you - I appreciate your supportive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from shy1250
Awesome imagery and I love the picture of the apple accompanying it. I do not know your spiritual persuasion, but mine does say "he removes our sins as far from the east to the west." I like to think of our accidental sins as being when a toddler, trying to walk, falls down. We do not blame the child, we know it's simply a stage in his development. No spag, suggestions, corrections. I wish I'd written this. shy
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Awesome imagery and I love the picture of the apple accompanying it. I do not know your spiritual persuasion, but mine does say "he removes our sins as far from the east to the west." I like to think of our accidental sins as being when a toddler, trying to walk, falls down. We do not blame the child, we know it's simply a stage in his development. No spag, suggestions, corrections. I wish I'd written this. shy
Comment Written 13-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2009
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Shy, thank you so much for saying that! I do believe God forgives our sins. I also believe we need to take responsibility for our actions and do our best at all times to treat others with respect, honesty, fidelity. Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
