Sonnets
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Comment from fictionwriter
If we are looking for love, as is my experience, it never finds us. It is when we give up and decide to just let it be, then it falls in your lap. Great poem.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2009
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If we are looking for love, as is my experience, it never finds us. It is when we give up and decide to just let it be, then it falls in your lap. Great poem.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2009
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Thank you for this thoughtful response, Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke This is so clever, beautiful rhyming and you show a great knowledge of myths, every blended so well. I have never quite got the idea of sonnets. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2009
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Hi Brooke This is so clever, beautiful rhyming and you show a great knowledge of myths, every blended so well. I have never quite got the idea of sonnets. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 07-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2009
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Gaye, I love sonnets but don't write a whole lot of them - thank you! Brooke
Comment from Annelisa
This request is so endearingly presented, I don't know how it could be refused. Your ending couplet is perfect. I love this sonnet. Good luck in the contest.
Annelisa
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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This request is so endearingly presented, I don't know how it could be refused. Your ending couplet is perfect. I love this sonnet. Good luck in the contest.
Annelisa
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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I'm actually dying in the contest, but I've had many lovely reviews, and that counts even more to me, so thank you for this most generous review and thoughtful comments. :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Brooke,
Of all your lovely creations, I love your sonnets the best.
This is a magnificent work of art.
I enjoyed every aspect of this poem. It flows beautifully and has a dreamy feeling.
Ye gods who've granted love's requests before,
please plot a path that stops at my front door. <--I especially like this closing couplet.
Beautiful writing.
Nic
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Brooke,
Of all your lovely creations, I love your sonnets the best.
This is a magnificent work of art.
I enjoyed every aspect of this poem. It flows beautifully and has a dreamy feeling.
Ye gods who've granted love's requests before,
please plot a path that stops at my front door. <--I especially like this closing couplet.
Beautiful writing.
Nic
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Nice, thank you so much for your lovely comments - this poor sonnet is getting creamed in the contest, but has received wonderful reviews, so that makes me feel ever so much better. :-) Brooke
Comment from jmyron
I'm not an expert on sonnets, but it looks like 'ya dune well.' Content is great: a romantic fantasy of longing , sweet and biter entwined.
John
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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I'm not an expert on sonnets, but it looks like 'ya dune well.' Content is great: a romantic fantasy of longing , sweet and biter entwined.
John
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Thank you - you're most kind! Brooke
Comment from Freeflyer
Well done. You have brought old myth with present yearnings. This poem has wonderful rhyme and flow. The rules do not make this an easy task but you have done well. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Well done. You have brought old myth with present yearnings. This poem has wonderful rhyme and flow. The rules do not make this an easy task but you have done well. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Freeflyer, thank you so much for your gracious and encouraging review, Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
I don't think that I've reviewed one of your sonnets before, Brooke. This is an enjoyable format and one that you write well.
I like your choices of mythical characters. (It was a nice refresher for me. I always liked mythology.) If I recall the P&B story correctly, weren't they turned into some kind of tree or plant? If so, you've used a nature image in each quatrain: the river Styx, the crimson flower, blossoms on my trellised bower, a path to my front door. Nice way to unify the imagery of the poem. Very romantic, too.
I also like your method of ending each quatrain with a question, all of which point to the idea in the final couplet.
I believe that you've fulfilled all the contest requirements. Excellent work.
Laura
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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I don't think that I've reviewed one of your sonnets before, Brooke. This is an enjoyable format and one that you write well.
I like your choices of mythical characters. (It was a nice refresher for me. I always liked mythology.) If I recall the P&B story correctly, weren't they turned into some kind of tree or plant? If so, you've used a nature image in each quatrain: the river Styx, the crimson flower, blossoms on my trellised bower, a path to my front door. Nice way to unify the imagery of the poem. Very romantic, too.
I also like your method of ending each quatrain with a question, all of which point to the idea in the final couplet.
I believe that you've fulfilled all the contest requirements. Excellent work.
Laura
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Yes, one was turned into a linden tree and the other some other kind of tree, and the trees were intertwined. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments. Brooke
Comment from Rottie
If Aphrodite's tears at lover's blood
could turn each drop into a crimson flow'r,
If such devotion causes blooms to bud,
where are the blossoms on my trellised bow'r?
I love what you did here, flow'r and bow'r. This whole poem was brilliant! Using Greek Gods in question of love. I have recently become interested in Greek history, this just makes me want to learn more.
Very nice!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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If Aphrodite's tears at lover's blood
could turn each drop into a crimson flow'r,
If such devotion causes blooms to bud,
where are the blossoms on my trellised bow'r?
I love what you did here, flow'r and bow'r. This whole poem was brilliant! Using Greek Gods in question of love. I have recently become interested in Greek history, this just makes me want to learn more.
Very nice!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Thank you - I really liked the challenge of this sonnet and have long thought mythology is cool :-) Brooke
Comment from marion
Hi Brooke
WOW -- On this one!! Beautiful. I have begun to love the sound of a sonnet since coming to FS, and when I come
across one, I actually start to feel quite excited! I don't really know much about these mythical lovers but I do love the beauty of this sonnet, and I really appreciated your last line. Good luck in the contest. Marion.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Hi Brooke
WOW -- On this one!! Beautiful. I have begun to love the sound of a sonnet since coming to FS, and when I come
across one, I actually start to feel quite excited! I don't really know much about these mythical lovers but I do love the beauty of this sonnet, and I really appreciated your last line. Good luck in the contest. Marion.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Marion, I appreciate such an enthusiastic review :-) Brooke
Comment from Bryana
Dear Brooke, you do so well with anything you write. I don't even know all the mythical gods you mentioned.
I love the ending ...
Ye gods who've granted love's requests before,
please plot a path that stops at my front door.
Have a wonderful day. Love, Ana
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Dear Brooke, you do so well with anything you write. I don't even know all the mythical gods you mentioned.
I love the ending ...
Ye gods who've granted love's requests before,
please plot a path that stops at my front door.
Have a wonderful day. Love, Ana
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Ana, thank you - mythology is fun stuff!! Brooke
