Taking Census
Free Verse: No Punctuation:39 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Whew...wish I had a bag of sixes for you. This is superb. Covers EVERYTHING with lucid clarity and honesty that echoes in the reader too.
Lovely artwork. Well presented with interesting and effective creative spacing.
Bravo and kudos.
Love, rd
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Whew...wish I had a bag of sixes for you. This is superb. Covers EVERYTHING with lucid clarity and honesty that echoes in the reader too.
Lovely artwork. Well presented with interesting and effective creative spacing.
Bravo and kudos.
Love, rd
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from jlsavell
Mrs. KT, this is a wonderful piece of poetic art. A beautiful statement of self reflection that encompasses all human emotion, convisitons and belief. I thoroughly enjoyed this excellent poem..jlsavell
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Mrs. KT, this is a wonderful piece of poetic art. A beautiful statement of self reflection that encompasses all human emotion, convisitons and belief. I thoroughly enjoyed this excellent poem..jlsavell
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Janelle
I think this poem is brilliant! I loved everything about it; the concept, the way it's set out, the minimalist use of strong words that say so much with so few,the colours used, the accompanying artwork and the message. It felt to me like you'd looked into my own heart and pulled all of the words out from there! I identified with all of the verses, but I especially like;
I have no answers for
The why of loss
The when of pain
The how of regret
The what if of perhaps
It speaks to me of a normal, everyday person contemplating their past, present and future and owning their mistakes, regrets and dreams. I loved it! (wish I'd written it!!) Well done, Regards, Jan
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I think this poem is brilliant! I loved everything about it; the concept, the way it's set out, the minimalist use of strong words that say so much with so few,the colours used, the accompanying artwork and the message. It felt to me like you'd looked into my own heart and pulled all of the words out from there! I identified with all of the verses, but I especially like;
I have no answers for
The why of loss
The when of pain
The how of regret
The what if of perhaps
It speaks to me of a normal, everyday person contemplating their past, present and future and owning their mistakes, regrets and dreams. I loved it! (wish I'd written it!!) Well done, Regards, Jan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Amen! This piece alone is an incredible legacy piece, speaks to the innermost essence of who you are and how you wish to be remembered. Great job! :)
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Amen! This piece alone is an incredible legacy piece, speaks to the innermost essence of who you are and how you wish to be remembered. Great job! :)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from debskatz
Hi Mrs. KT,
A Very Nice poem! I like all of the sentiments you have with one exception: in the first stanza, "I possess... less than others think." I would think it would be more as no one truly knows all that each is capable of.
But a great poem nonetheless. Thank you for sharing it with us!
smiles,
deb
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Hi Mrs. KT,
A Very Nice poem! I like all of the sentiments you have with one exception: in the first stanza, "I possess... less than others think." I would think it would be more as no one truly knows all that each is capable of.
But a great poem nonetheless. Thank you for sharing it with us!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from jdrhye
Nice writing, I like the ponderous statements that paint a vivid picture and imagery of the person. The flow and rythm is good as is the story and point of poem. No spags or corrections of any kind.
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Nice writing, I like the ponderous statements that paint a vivid picture and imagery of the person. The flow and rythm is good as is the story and point of poem. No spags or corrections of any kind.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
My, this is quite an introspective accounting of what you think and who you are. I am very impressed that you could be so clear and succinct about matters quite complex and issues that we would often rather not analyze. The format was quite inventive and the picture very resonant. BRAVO!
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My, this is quite an introspective accounting of what you think and who you are. I am very impressed that you could be so clear and succinct about matters quite complex and issues that we would often rather not analyze. The format was quite inventive and the picture very resonant. BRAVO!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from mslyla216
This poem is beautifully written and beautifully displayed, I think it is clever and creative and most heart-felt. You didn't indicate that it was designed to be any one specific format, but I do feel that since you had six three-line items before your fourth one, the ones you have no answers for, perhaps this one should be three lines as well. If not three, perhaps five so that you fulfill all of the"W's", the who, what, when, where, and why of it. Anyway, I really like the ending "Tostill surprise." mslyla
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This poem is beautifully written and beautifully displayed, I think it is clever and creative and most heart-felt. You didn't indicate that it was designed to be any one specific format, but I do feel that since you had six three-line items before your fourth one, the ones you have no answers for, perhaps this one should be three lines as well. If not three, perhaps five so that you fulfill all of the"W's", the who, what, when, where, and why of it. Anyway, I really like the ending "Tostill surprise." mslyla
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from Writewoman
Yours are thought-provoking sentiments. Thank you for sharing. However, I rather enjoy structure, so I find your verses 5, 7, and 8 a bit disconcerting because they break the pattern that was working so well in verses 1-4 and 6.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Yours are thought-provoking sentiments. Thank you for sharing. However, I rather enjoy structure, so I find your verses 5, 7, and 8 a bit disconcerting because they break the pattern that was working so well in verses 1-4 and 6.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Kind of like life, yes? The breaking of patterns, I mean :>) I love structured poetry as well, but with free verse, one has the opportunity to break out of structure and just let the thoughts flow...So pleased you enjoyed! diane
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Yeah, I know it isn't WRONG, and that's why I gave you 5 stars. I just expressed my druthers.
Comment from jadedgemini2
I absolutely love this!!! Everything is said simply, even though the emotions and ideas are not. I think (well hope anyway) that many of us feel the same; I know I do:)
Great job!!!!
Jaded:)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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I absolutely love this!!! Everything is said simply, even though the emotions and ideas are not. I think (well hope anyway) that many of us feel the same; I know I do:)
Great job!!!!
Jaded:)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Hello Jaded! Thank you very much for your kind review! So pleased you enjoyed! diane
