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Comment from Gramma Kathy
Ouch! This one hits hard. It does seem that the gap between rich and poor is widening daily, with more and more on the "poor" side.
I need to apologize for neglecting my reviews for so long. I have been enjoying catching up on many things left undone while I was unwell. Fanstory has been one of those pleasures that has had to take a back seat while I play catch-up.
I will continue to check back when I can, though, and your work is my first stop. You continue to be an inspiration to me. Thank you!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Ouch! This one hits hard. It does seem that the gap between rich and poor is widening daily, with more and more on the "poor" side.
I need to apologize for neglecting my reviews for so long. I have been enjoying catching up on many things left undone while I was unwell. Fanstory has been one of those pleasures that has had to take a back seat while I play catch-up.
I will continue to check back when I can, though, and your work is my first stop. You continue to be an inspiration to me. Thank you!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Kathy, yes, the gap is large and cruel. I am sorry to hear you were ill - thank you so much for reviewing my poems this morning. I will keep you in my thoughts and prayers, Brooke :-)
Comment from skye
When I first read it, I imagined playing in those boxes as a child, making a home for dolls.
Reading your notes brought this to life for today, when reality makes these boxes real homes.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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When I first read it, I imagined playing in those boxes as a child, making a home for dolls.
Reading your notes brought this to life for today, when reality makes these boxes real homes.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Skye, I used to love to play in boxes too - how things can change. Thanks, Brooke
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
An excellent short poem from the master of this form. How true the theme. I remember one Christmas at home when my nephews took the large toys out of their very large boxes and played in the boxes. I know your "boxes" refer to something much more significant in the scheme of things. I have seen the situation You describe. It is a terrible scene. Very well expressed.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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An excellent short poem from the master of this form. How true the theme. I remember one Christmas at home when my nephews took the large toys out of their very large boxes and played in the boxes. I know your "boxes" refer to something much more significant in the scheme of things. I have seen the situation You describe. It is a terrible scene. Very well expressed.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Thank you for your most thoughtful and perceptive comments, Brooke :-)
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Brooke, you've made the comparison so glaring in these few lines. It is dreadful being homeless. Many are. What kind of world do we live in where folks live in the discarded remains of others' luxury? Beautiful septolet. Great writing, as usual.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Brooke, you've made the comparison so glaring in these few lines. It is dreadful being homeless. Many are. What kind of world do we live in where folks live in the discarded remains of others' luxury? Beautiful septolet. Great writing, as usual.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Kat, a world of people who don't care enough about each other! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Nice poem about a very simple theme-the home. Perhaps the poet was thinking of the enormity of the challenge of establishing a home. nice colour and style of presentation. kudos
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Nice poem about a very simple theme-the home. Perhaps the poet was thinking of the enormity of the challenge of establishing a home. nice colour and style of presentation. kudos
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Perp, the second verse is about how those who have nothing take the trash/boxes from the homes of those rich enough to redecorate their kitchens so that they can create makeshift shelter from the boxes - tent cities are cropping up more and more in my country in the past months. Thanks, Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
Thought-provoking poem. (Especially since our family just got done doing extensive renovations to our home.)
I like the contrast of the fortunate's circumstances with the unfortunate's desperation. How sad to see people living in tents or boxes.
This poem flows well. The septolet form was well-chosen for your message. Thanks for sharing this with us and for the reminder to count our blessings when we have a home. Laura
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Thought-provoking poem. (Especially since our family just got done doing extensive renovations to our home.)
I like the contrast of the fortunate's circumstances with the unfortunate's desperation. How sad to see people living in tents or boxes.
This poem flows well. The septolet form was well-chosen for your message. Thanks for sharing this with us and for the reminder to count our blessings when we have a home. Laura
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Laura, Thank you for your insightful read!! Brooke
Comment from Poetic Friend
Brooke, this poem reminds me of the popular quotation, "Home is where the heart is." I understand it was written to bring awareness to crisis in this country -- homelessness, but it also reminds me of the quotation that I mentioned.
I love the poignant contrast. Another well-written poem from your pen, Brooke.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Brooke, this poem reminds me of the popular quotation, "Home is where the heart is." I understand it was written to bring awareness to crisis in this country -- homelessness, but it also reminds me of the quotation that I mentioned.
I love the poignant contrast. Another well-written poem from your pen, Brooke.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Thank you for recognizing the meaning in the contrast. Brooke
Comment from Rabianabian
This is very, very good. You have been doing a lot of septolets lately, but this one is really well done. Excellent job and good luck in your further work.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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This is very, very good. You have been doing a lot of septolets lately, but this one is really well done. Excellent job and good luck in your further work.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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I'm glad you like this septolet :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
It is a shame that these people are in this position but they have done well to get them shelter it is a pity that more cannot be done for these people they are often in this situation through no fault of their own well done again on a thought provoking poem regards Fuller
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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It is a shame that these people are in this position but they have done well to get them shelter it is a pity that more cannot be done for these people they are often in this situation through no fault of their own well done again on a thought provoking poem regards Fuller
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Fuller, thank you, and yes, it is quite often through no fault. Brooke
Comment from bard owl
THis poem is unspeakably sad. That someone would be forced to call an appliance box home is a terrible mark on our care for our fellow man. Excellent imagery in this one, Brooke. Terrible imagery.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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THis poem is unspeakably sad. That someone would be forced to call an appliance box home is a terrible mark on our care for our fellow man. Excellent imagery in this one, Brooke. Terrible imagery.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2009
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Thank you --yes, it is a tragic commentary on human nature for we as a society have chosen to allow this to occur and continue, make no mistake about it! Brooke
