A Full Morning
A Septolet78 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Humorous! LOL
Love the twist in second half.
Yummy breakfast...hmmmm
And great artwork choice to enhance the presentation.
No nits or spags.
Best of luck to you dear Brooke.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Humorous! LOL
Love the twist in second half.
Yummy breakfast...hmmmm
And great artwork choice to enhance the presentation.
No nits or spags.
Best of luck to you dear Brooke.
Love, rd
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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rama devi, glad you like the twist as that is the point of the septolet :-) Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from Helen Tan
A Full Morning
This title suits the theme.
A Septolet
If I remember correctly from your previous notes, there should be 2 different views presented in such a poem other than the 7 lines requirement.
I think the title should be changed to a More Than A Full Morning after the heavy breakfast described in your first verse.
The second verse gives the reverse side of the story after eating, exercise is required, worse you have a physical test so soon after. It appears to be a full morning in terms of a full schedule too.
I hope you got a clean bill of fitness!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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A Full Morning
This title suits the theme.
A Septolet
If I remember correctly from your previous notes, there should be 2 different views presented in such a poem other than the 7 lines requirement.
I think the title should be changed to a More Than A Full Morning after the heavy breakfast described in your first verse.
The second verse gives the reverse side of the story after eating, exercise is required, worse you have a physical test so soon after. It appears to be a full morning in terms of a full schedule too.
I hope you got a clean bill of fitness!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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The poem was not autobiographical! Yes, you understood the two sections well :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"A Full Morning" is an incredibly well written septolet poem. I salivated over that perfectly described breakfast, then cringed at the treadmill test. Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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"A Full Morning" is an incredibly well written septolet poem. I salivated over that perfectly described breakfast, then cringed at the treadmill test. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your perceptive read of my satiric piece, Brooke
Comment from earthlybeing
Another great one. Yes we indulge way too much then expect to pass that dreaded test. We set our own selves up and then pay the price. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Another great one. Yes we indulge way too much then expect to pass that dreaded test. We set our own selves up and then pay the price. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Jeanette, thank you for your perceptive read!! Brooke
Comment from K-Patrick
Well I was reviewing some book chapters and decided I needed a fun break, so I looked a the poems list and what did I see - a unicorn! No, silly! I saw 'A Full Morning' by adewpearl. So I know I was in for a treat.
The treat turned out to be breakfast and then a stress test - oooh boy.
I think you did an awesome job on this septolet (?) it was very dynamic food wise and then wham - reality check with a heart monitor. We should lay off the cholesterol. I enjoyed this. It was a nice break from chapters - Thank you!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Well I was reviewing some book chapters and decided I needed a fun break, so I looked a the poems list and what did I see - a unicorn! No, silly! I saw 'A Full Morning' by adewpearl. So I know I was in for a treat.
The treat turned out to be breakfast and then a stress test - oooh boy.
I think you did an awesome job on this septolet (?) it was very dynamic food wise and then wham - reality check with a heart monitor. We should lay off the cholesterol. I enjoyed this. It was a nice break from chapters - Thank you!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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I wrote such a serious religious poem yesterday - I was in the mood for a bit of satire/fun :-) Glad you liked it - thanks for your most perceptive review, Brooke
Comment from Journey woman
Full morning, full breakfast, and a stress test. That is a full morning, indeed. Well done. The art fit perfectly.
Enjoyed,
Journey Woman
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Full morning, full breakfast, and a stress test. That is a full morning, indeed. Well done. The art fit perfectly.
Enjoyed,
Journey Woman
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Journey woman, thanks for your insightful review, Brooke
Comment from Amicus
Delightful septolet, Brooke. I love the ironic title -- "A Full Morning" indeed. A friend of mine used to call these breakfasts "the heart attack on a plate" --your clever juxtaposition of treadmill test and heavy breakfast reminded me of that.
Thanks for a smile maker.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Delightful septolet, Brooke. I love the ironic title -- "A Full Morning" indeed. A friend of mine used to call these breakfasts "the heart attack on a plate" --your clever juxtaposition of treadmill test and heavy breakfast reminded me of that.
Thanks for a smile maker.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thank you for being the first person to notice or at least note the title!!! Your most perceptive comments have made me very happy! Brooke
Comment from mslyla216
Your septolets are brilliant, Brooke. You have gotten the hang of them in aces! This one definitely shows the connection and the opposing side. Eat your waffles and enjoy them for you will pay for it on the treadmill! True to life, this is. Lyla
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Your septolets are brilliant, Brooke. You have gotten the hang of them in aces! This one definitely shows the connection and the opposing side. Eat your waffles and enjoy them for you will pay for it on the treadmill! True to life, this is. Lyla
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Lyla, thanks so much for your great comments, Brooke :-)
Comment from palsuresh
A very nice contrasting segments:
The first one is about fooditems- Energy intake
and
The second one is about workout- Energy output.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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A very nice contrasting segments:
The first one is about fooditems- Energy intake
and
The second one is about workout- Energy output.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
LOL yeah, that sounds about right. where are all the people who are supposed to be eating oatmeal? made me smile. made me giggle. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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brooke,
LOL yeah, that sounds about right. where are all the people who are supposed to be eating oatmeal? made me smile. made me giggle. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Barbara, at least around here, people who go into Denny's and House of Pancakes are not ordering oatmeal! :-) Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
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brooke,
i don't think they do around here either. LOL but then we don't have either one. i have ordered oatmeal at denny's. i think i had a toothache or something. it was strange.
love,
barbara
