A Full Morning
A Septolet78 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke....this reminds me of me! I go to the gym three times a week and work my fanny off...so why am I not as thin as a reed? It could not possibly be cuz I take in too many calories....or could it? Cute septolet..guess I'll carrots for supper....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke....this reminds me of me! I go to the gym three times a week and work my fanny off...so why am I not as thin as a reed? It could not possibly be cuz I take in too many calories....or could it? Cute septolet..guess I'll carrots for supper....blessings....chey
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Chey, that is a mystery man have yet to solve LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
A perfect choice of photograph
to go along with your morning
breakfast and then of course the
price we must pay,because, of course,
nothing is free.
A light-hearted Septolet beautifully
orchestrated in charming mouth-watering
words.
Well done
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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A perfect choice of photograph
to go along with your morning
breakfast and then of course the
price we must pay,because, of course,
nothing is free.
A light-hearted Septolet beautifully
orchestrated in charming mouth-watering
words.
Well done
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thanks for your perceptive review!! Brooke
Comment from tony bronk
I seem to see you speaking of an indulgence, only to have to try and make up for it on the treadmill. It certainly does make sense though. A good and witty poem. tony
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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I seem to see you speaking of an indulgence, only to have to try and make up for it on the treadmill. It certainly does make sense though. A good and witty poem. tony
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Tony, thank you - I appreciate your positive comments, Brooke
Comment from fictionwriter
The meal sounds great, the working it off not so much. What a great little poem that left me with a large smile on my face. Great job.
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The meal sounds great, the working it off not so much. What a great little poem that left me with a large smile on my face. Great job.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from RapturedHeart
Ha, clever, Brooke. Gotta get in shape for that heart test! I'm programmed to have my toast and jam - and sometimes egg in a cup - but it's fun to have a hearty breakfast with homefries when you're travelling. The picture made me think of that. I imagine if you did that too often, though, you'd probably fail the test. Thanks for sharing this witty number,
Heather
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Ha, clever, Brooke. Gotta get in shape for that heart test! I'm programmed to have my toast and jam - and sometimes egg in a cup - but it's fun to have a hearty breakfast with homefries when you're travelling. The picture made me think of that. I imagine if you did that too often, though, you'd probably fail the test. Thanks for sharing this witty number,
Heather
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Heather, thanks for your perceptive review :-) Brooke
Comment from Dklrdmcches
you described me! I got a chuckle out of this piece and found it to be the truth. great job of catching everyone's demons that are found on a plate of fat...DKLRD
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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you described me! I got a chuckle out of this piece and found it to be the truth. great job of catching everyone's demons that are found on a plate of fat...DKLRD
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Dklrd, so you like the triple jumbo breakfasts, huh? So do I, but it's been a while since I've had one. LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from glacierbabe
LOL I love Belgian waffles with blueberry or strawberry syrup and the bit about the treadmill is hilarious but so very very true. I wish I could indulge more often. This is great. Wonderfully written as usual. Made me hungry. :)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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LOL I love Belgian waffles with blueberry or strawberry syrup and the bit about the treadmill is hilarious but so very very true. I wish I could indulge more often. This is great. Wonderfully written as usual. Made me hungry. :)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Don't we all share that wish?? LoL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
I had to laugh at that second stanza. Nice to see the opposing images side by side. Self-indulgence and "suffering" (if you want to call it that!); or you could think of the second stanza as the logical result of the first, since gluttony leads to health problems and the probability of needing a treadmill test.
I enjoyed this septolet, Brooke. You have a nice way of connecting different images and turning them into fun/serious/powerful poems. Good work. Laura
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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I had to laugh at that second stanza. Nice to see the opposing images side by side. Self-indulgence and "suffering" (if you want to call it that!); or you could think of the second stanza as the logical result of the first, since gluttony leads to health problems and the probability of needing a treadmill test.
I enjoyed this septolet, Brooke. You have a nice way of connecting different images and turning them into fun/serious/powerful poems. Good work. Laura
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Laura, thank you for your great review - it is most perceptive - not everyone really "got" this septolet. Brooke
Comment from LynnRadford
As you weren't forthcoming as to whether this was your stress test or someone else's, I wondered. I said a quick prayer anyway and wish you (or whomever...) the best.
I liked this one in all its simplicity.
L
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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As you weren't forthcoming as to whether this was your stress test or someone else's, I wondered. I said a quick prayer anyway and wish you (or whomever...) the best.
I liked this one in all its simplicity.
L
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Lynn, nope, no stress test - it's just satire of a society of people who eat these massive diner dinners with no regard to the consequences. :-) Thanks, Brooke
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SMILES! :)
Thanks for that clarification...
I was a bit worried...
You are right in that so many disregard their health and well-being even in light of impending issues.
Thanks again.
L
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P.S. I feel stupid that I didn't pay attention to the category....
Comment from Psychonaut X
Great, great, great image! I can picture an out-of-shape, middle-aged guy sitting at the diner counter ordering his usual. I can hear the cholesterol clogging his arteries. A full morning, indeed! Actually, now that I think about it, that's also a perfect double meaning for the word "full."
The second section has great alliteration, consonance AND assonance. Well done!
(Incidentally, I've been toying with writing a septolet myself. I have a question for you. Is it always 1st section - 4 lines, 2nd section - 3 lines? Or can the number of lines per section vary?)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Great, great, great image! I can picture an out-of-shape, middle-aged guy sitting at the diner counter ordering his usual. I can hear the cholesterol clogging his arteries. A full morning, indeed! Actually, now that I think about it, that's also a perfect double meaning for the word "full."
The second section has great alliteration, consonance AND assonance. Well done!
(Incidentally, I've been toying with writing a septolet myself. I have a question for you. Is it always 1st section - 4 lines, 2nd section - 3 lines? Or can the number of lines per section vary?)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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You're only the second person to notice the double meaning of full - thank you!! And you also get the satire, which has been missed by more than you'd imagine. Thank you thank you thank you, oh perceptive reader. LOL :-) I have found no rule that says it has to be 4, then 3 and have written a couple that are 3, then 4. I pretty much think you need to keep it one of those two for balance, though. I am eager to read yours!! Brooke
