A Full Morning
A Septolet78 total reviews
Comment from Writewoman
Seven lines fits the requirement, but you squeezed in humour too. Loaded up with all those carbs, I picture some breathless fatty struggling on the treadmill.
I don't know where you live so hope I'm not hitting too close to home. I once worked a Red Cross disaster in Louisiana bayou country where they deep-fried everything, including liver -- can you imagine anything more ghastly? A big heart clinic was doind pretty good business in that town.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Seven lines fits the requirement, but you squeezed in humour too. Loaded up with all those carbs, I picture some breathless fatty struggling on the treadmill.
I don't know where you live so hope I'm not hitting too close to home. I once worked a Red Cross disaster in Louisiana bayou country where they deep-fried everything, including liver -- can you imagine anything more ghastly? A big heart clinic was doind pretty good business in that town.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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I'm so glad you appreciated the satiric humor. I live outside of Philly, PA. Deep fried liver - UGH. Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from Carol D Parker
Sounds wonderful except for the stress test. This poem makes me hungry. The imagery is so great I could eat it. Shouldn't read about food when you're hungry. great poem. I love it.
Carol
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Sounds wonderful except for the stress test. This poem makes me hungry. The imagery is so great I could eat it. Shouldn't read about food when you're hungry. great poem. I love it.
Carol
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Carol, thank you for your thoughtful comments. Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
LOL--I loved this. I can't tell you how many times I've punished myself with a workout after indulging. Not much to gauge on this one, since I don't recognize the poetic form. Free verse? Anyway, you did a wonderful job of conveying so much with an economy of words.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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LOL--I loved this. I can't tell you how many times I've punished myself with a workout after indulging. Not much to gauge on this one, since I don't recognize the poetic form. Free verse? Anyway, you did a wonderful job of conveying so much with an economy of words.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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it is a septolet - 14 words divided into two verses, 7 lines
each part forms part of the same picture, but with some sort of irony because of seeing something from two different perspectives Thank you! Brooke
Comment from Rabianabian
I think I know what this poem is about... and it is pretty funny! Though it does not rhyme like many of your other poems, I did not enjoy it less. Great job.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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I think I know what this poem is about... and it is pretty funny! Though it does not rhyme like many of your other poems, I did not enjoy it less. Great job.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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It's about a person eating a terribly unhealthy breakfast on the way to taking a stress test that tests the heart, which can be ruined by this kind of breakfast. :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from jkhudson
I am just rolling on the floor laughing my head off! Does that use up any calories? This is so true and in such a small poem! Great job~ :-)Jules
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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I am just rolling on the floor laughing my head off! Does that use up any calories? This is so true and in such a small poem! Great job~ :-)Jules
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Jules, I doubt stress tests use up many calories, maybe one waffle's worth?? LOL Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from Gail Allred
That was too funny, but oh how it sounds. I think I know what I am having for breakfast in the morning! Good Job! I needed that, my dear. Big Hugs!~MYSTERIA
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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That was too funny, but oh how it sounds. I think I know what I am having for breakfast in the morning! Good Job! I needed that, my dear. Big Hugs!~MYSTERIA
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Mysteria, I seem to have made quite a few people in the mood for a breakfast I just attempted to scare them away from! Oh, the irony. LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Mrs. KT
Oh, Brooke!
This is all too humorous! Kind of like riding a bike for two miles to buy dessert and believing that the bike ride cancels out any calories! (Now...who would do such a thing?)
Your septolet follows the form perfectly. Well-executed.
diane
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Oh, Brooke!
This is all too humorous! Kind of like riding a bike for two miles to buy dessert and believing that the bike ride cancels out any calories! (Now...who would do such a thing?)
Your septolet follows the form perfectly. Well-executed.
diane
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Diane, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from dportwood
Too bad the dreaded stress test is so joined with eggs and other goodies in the minds of the medical community. LOVE my eggs - what is life without them? Enjoyed your septolet.
Duane
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Too bad the dreaded stress test is so joined with eggs and other goodies in the minds of the medical community. LOVE my eggs - what is life without them? Enjoyed your septolet.
Duane
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Duane, thanks - I am sure with all your outdoor activity and exercise you are able to eat more than the average office worker and get away with it! :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Blue berries waffles, I hope. I would assume you are taling about a stress test when you refer to tread mill test. Very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Blue berries waffles, I hope. I would assume you are taling about a stress test when you refer to tread mill test. Very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Yes, a stress test it is though half the readers or more have failed to understand that. Thank you for being perceptive, Brooke
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You're welcome Brooke. Been there, Done that. Charlie
Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, now this one hits the right note. I can smell the breakfast as I read. Throw in a couple slices of bacon and I'll follow you anywhere. Great little poem. Loved it.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Ah, now this one hits the right note. I can smell the breakfast as I read. Throw in a couple slices of bacon and I'll follow you anywhere. Great little poem. Loved it.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Bacon is all I didn't add to this heart attack special. LOL Thanks, Brooke
