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Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke What a wonderful thing nature is to survive the most extreme conditions. You discribed this so well in your poem. Thanks for the enlighening aurthors notes.
Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke What a wonderful thing nature is to survive the most extreme conditions. You discribed this so well in your poem. Thanks for the enlighening aurthors notes.
Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Gaye, thank you for your thoughtful comments, Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Hmm.
I think I wanted more from your premise. It's SOOOOOOOO big that I don't think a rinky-tink cinquain is gonna do the job. Make me feel the desert; the heat, the gritty breeze, the smell of sage and time.
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Hmm.
I think I wanted more from your premise. It's SOOOOOOOO big that I don't think a rinky-tink cinquain is gonna do the job. Make me feel the desert; the heat, the gritty breeze, the smell of sage and time.
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Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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So, your complaint is that I wrote a cinquain? I may well write a longer quatrain poem about the desert in the future, but I was rather hoping that when I made an artistic decision to write in a given poetic form, I would be allowed to do that. This is not intended to be a full description of the desert but a commentary on the resilient tumbleweed, which can then be taken as a metaphor for resilient people :-) Thanks for your thoughts, Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
I drop my seeds in London by snapping off extraneous words from my sentences, and littering them about, paying particular attention to big puddles and the fountain in Trafalgar Square. Despite the drought of interesting people and colours, I live in the hope that one day my progeny will rise, verbose and pretentious, and take the capital by wordy storm.
Mike
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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I drop my seeds in London by snapping off extraneous words from my sentences, and littering them about, paying particular attention to big puddles and the fountain in Trafalgar Square. Despite the drought of interesting people and colours, I live in the hope that one day my progeny will rise, verbose and pretentious, and take the capital by wordy storm.
Mike
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Mike, have I mentioned that I love the places your mind goes? I can just see you romping through Trafalgar Square dropping your words here and there, and mini-poets rising up from the puddles and fountain! LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Rabianabian
Sorry I haven't been reviewing your poems for the last few days. Anyway, this one was wonderful. I love the description and the rhythm. Great job.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Sorry I haven't been reviewing your poems for the last few days. Anyway, this one was wonderful. I love the description and the rhythm. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Thank you - I thought I had replied to this but it must not have gotten saved - I'm glad to see you :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Nice piece. Saguaro's grow larger and healthier in the area between Scottsdale, AZ and Payson, AZ. Now I think it's becoming clear about your sanity. Anyone who would spend summers in Arizona would also spend a lot of time in a Dodge Dart.
Dave
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Nice piece. Saguaro's grow larger and healthier in the area between Scottsdale, AZ and Payson, AZ. Now I think it's becoming clear about your sanity. Anyone who would spend summers in Arizona would also spend a lot of time in a Dodge Dart.
Dave
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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I detest the humidity around Philly - I swear it feels so much better there at 110 than it does here at 85. Also, I had huge huge allergies back then, and I would get off the plane in Tucson, and miraculously, they were gone. It was like a little miracle. And there you are with the Dart again. LOLOLOL Thanks so much, Brooke
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Well at least you've got Villanova in the "Final Four."
Dave
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Quite a few people in my church live in Villanova, work at Villanova, are Villanova alumni - church was one happy place this morning!!!
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
those are some great cacti. my grandparents carried tumbleweeds when they walked down the aisle. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. made me smile. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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brooke,
those are some great cacti. my grandparents carried tumbleweeds when they walked down the aisle. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. made me smile. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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They carried tumbleweeds down the aisle? I've never heard of that before!!! Thanks, Brooke
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brooke,
it was new mexico. they were born in 1895. not sure when they married. i do know that my grandmother was a progressive woman. she had already been married, divorced with a child.
love,
barbara
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what a cool family story!
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i thought so until my mom and aunts decided to let me carry the other family secrets, the dark ones. i still love my grandpa dearly it explains a lot. i was adopted and my birth grandparents were also characters as well. so many stories to draw from.
Comment from Peter@Poole
You've produced yet another fine cinquain, Brooke. I particularly like your poetic reflections on nature. thinking of something read in your bio, I find that you generally write in accordance with the rules, and always with passion. Peter
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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You've produced yet another fine cinquain, Brooke. I particularly like your poetic reflections on nature. thinking of something read in your bio, I find that you generally write in accordance with the rules, and always with passion. Peter
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Peter, yes, I think form poetry has rules for a reason, and I only break them upon the rare occasion it is, in my opinion, called for. I think those rules should not make one a slave to them, but a vast majority of the time, they make for lovely structure. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Wow, Brooke. I feel like I need to put some lotion on. The hot desert winds have shriveled me up.
You've painted a beautiful, arid scene.
You're author notes are informative and add to the feel of your poem.
As always, I have no suggestions. You're too good. ;) lol
Nic
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Wow, Brooke. I feel like I need to put some lotion on. The hot desert winds have shriveled me up.
You've painted a beautiful, arid scene.
You're author notes are informative and add to the feel of your poem.
As always, I have no suggestions. You're too good. ;) lol
Nic
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Nic, thank you - just keep the compliments coming and I'll keep smiling! LOL Brooke
Comment from gerry26
An entire story in 3 short lines-amazing. I do find it wonderful that you can look or think of an object and write about it. You do have talent and I hope you are getting these published.
gerry
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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An entire story in 3 short lines-amazing. I do find it wonderful that you can look or think of an object and write about it. You do have talent and I hope you are getting these published.
gerry
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Gerry, thank you for your supportive and encouraging comments, Brooke
Comment from Avid Aspirant
A nice poem in cinquian form. It's always good to learn new things. Now I'll now where the Sonora desert is if it should ever come up in a game of Trivial persuit of Articulate! Well done on the poem. Have you entered another for the cinquian contest? I think this one would have done a good job!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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A nice poem in cinquian form. It's always good to learn new things. Now I'll now where the Sonora desert is if it should ever come up in a game of Trivial persuit of Articulate! Well done on the poem. Have you entered another for the cinquian contest? I think this one would have done a good job!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Yes, I entered Apathy for the contest a long time ago when the contest was first announced. Thank you for your kind comments, Brooke
