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Comment from Nicnac
Beautiful! Trash to treasure!
This poem made me think of the film, "Sweet Home Alabama". Jake and Melanie find glass on the beach (made by lightning and sand), and Jake later opens a glass shop. (The glass shop in the movie is actually an old mill that is about 5 minutes from my house.) It's a great movie. If you haven't seen it, I recommend it.
Nic
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Beautiful! Trash to treasure!
This poem made me think of the film, "Sweet Home Alabama". Jake and Melanie find glass on the beach (made by lightning and sand), and Jake later opens a glass shop. (The glass shop in the movie is actually an old mill that is about 5 minutes from my house.) It's a great movie. If you haven't seen it, I recommend it.
Nic
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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I have seen it and enjoyed it - I am a sap for romantic comedies :-) I always cry. My daughter loves to watch movies with me so she can make fun of me when I cry. LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from marion
Hi Brooke
Very original! Very original! And so true. I really like this image. Well done. Yes, he does give it back doesn't he, and in a more beautiful form if you ask me. Marion.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke
Very original! Very original! And so true. I really like this image. Well done. Yes, he does give it back doesn't he, and in a more beautiful form if you ask me. Marion.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
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Marion, thank you - I hope your reviewing means you have a new story to post :-D Brooke
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No - sorry! No story. Very little writing being done, but with Steve gone back to the fires in Australia, (he was home for four days only) hopefully I can finish off the two I was in the process of writing and get them posted onto FS. I still have Chapter 2 to write of my mini-novel AND Chapter 5 of my children's story, Sahara and the Kangarooster. I hope to settle down to them soon. I am trying to do a few reviews each day when I have a little spare time so you will see me popping in and then out again! Talk again soon. M.
Comment from geetika sethi
PEARL..
YOU ARE A GENIUS..
YOU KNOW I HAD NO IDEA ABOUT THIS
AND YOU HAVE WRITTEN AND EXPLAINED IT ALL SO WELL
THANKS FOR THE INFORMATION AND THE BEST PART IS HOW YOU THANK GOD IN IT.WELL WONDERFUL..AS THAT IS TO BE DONE BY US ALL AFTER EACH BUT WHO REMEMBERS..
ONLY YOU AND THAT TOO IN SUCH A BEAUTIFUL WAY!!!
THANKS FOR SHARING AS ALWAYS AND WISH YOU ALL THE BEST EVER!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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PEARL..
YOU ARE A GENIUS..
YOU KNOW I HAD NO IDEA ABOUT THIS
AND YOU HAVE WRITTEN AND EXPLAINED IT ALL SO WELL
THANKS FOR THE INFORMATION AND THE BEST PART IS HOW YOU THANK GOD IN IT.WELL WONDERFUL..AS THAT IS TO BE DONE BY US ALL AFTER EACH BUT WHO REMEMBERS..
ONLY YOU AND THAT TOO IN SUCH A BEAUTIFUL WAY!!!
THANKS FOR SHARING AS ALWAYS AND WISH YOU ALL THE BEST EVER!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Thank you for this warm and thoughtful response - I truly appreciate each kind word. Brooke
Comment from fayesh
This was an artistically inspired cinquain. I had heard about these pieces of sea art. God transforms the oceans into artists who take our discards and make them into rare pieces of glass. You continue to see so much of nature in your poetry.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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This was an artistically inspired cinquain. I had heard about these pieces of sea art. God transforms the oceans into artists who take our discards and make them into rare pieces of glass. You continue to see so much of nature in your poetry.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Thank you so much for your most thoughtful comments, Brooke
Comment from Avid Aspirant
A provoking thought indeed. Although I myself would not attribute such a marvel to God but the to the deep and perfect oceans themselves. Still, it is marvelous how our trash is turned into something so pretty :)
The only thing I felt about your poem was that the -- after the second line wasn't really needed. Otherwise, good stuff :)
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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A provoking thought indeed. Although I myself would not attribute such a marvel to God but the to the deep and perfect oceans themselves. Still, it is marvelous how our trash is turned into something so pretty :)
The only thing I felt about your poem was that the -- after the second line wasn't really needed. Otherwise, good stuff :)
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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I reread my cinquain - If I did not have a dash I would have to use some other punctuation in order for the poem to work for me - I find it absolutely necessary, which goes to show how subjective punctuation can be in poetry. Thank you for your thoughts, Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke How lovely your messege in your poem, but not so lovely when one goes walking on a beautiful beach and it is marred by careless, thoughless people just leaving there cans and bottles behind. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke How lovely your messege in your poem, but not so lovely when one goes walking on a beautiful beach and it is marred by careless, thoughless people just leaving there cans and bottles behind. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
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Gaye, yeah, until the ocean makes glass into sea glass, it's just ugly trash!!! Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from tammipratt
I love sea glass, but your author notes are fascinating. Perhaps I'll look a bit harder next time. Well done, I thought it was great.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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I love sea glass, but your author notes are fascinating. Perhaps I'll look a bit harder next time. Well done, I thought it was great.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Thank you - it is gorgeous! Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
A stunning cinquain, Brooke. The thrill of finding such treasure must be wonderful. Your author's notes are always a great reading and learning experience.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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A stunning cinquain, Brooke. The thrill of finding such treasure must be wonderful. Your author's notes are always a great reading and learning experience.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Indy, thanks so much for your great review!! Brooke
Comment from sueseagull
What a wonderful refection you have made in your words through this poem! I have always loved sea glass. I remember having a jar of it when I was a kid. Like finding diamonds in the ocean! Thanks for the great memeory.
SUE
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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What a wonderful refection you have made in your words through this poem! I have always loved sea glass. I remember having a jar of it when I was a kid. Like finding diamonds in the ocean! Thanks for the great memeory.
SUE
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Sue, thank you - glad to know you love this glass too :-) Brooke
Comment from skye
Inevitably I learn something new and fascinating from your poetry, in a beautiful and imaginative way.
This is wonderful.... and well written.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Inevitably I learn something new and fascinating from your poetry, in a beautiful and imaginative way.
This is wonderful.... and well written.
Very well done.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Skye, thank you for your most thoughtful review, Brooke
