(cat's paws with caprice) haiku
a haiku79 total reviews
Comment from bard owl
Cat's paws is a very poetic way to describe the playful waves. The cat is so quick and yet almost elusive with their playful, searching touches. Excellent imagery. It is sleeting here and a nice, gentle day of moderation by the sea sounds so inviting. Excellent "getaway" read, Brooke. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Cat's paws is a very poetic way to describe the playful waves. The cat is so quick and yet almost elusive with their playful, searching touches. Excellent imagery. It is sleeting here and a nice, gentle day of moderation by the sea sounds so inviting. Excellent "getaway" read, Brooke. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Linda, I appreciate your lovely review, Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke I'm not sure about the last line for a haiku,
I see and feel the picture with the first two lines.Perhaps it's the word 'preferred' could be
re-thought. Haiku are just so tricky to get right. Just my thoughts Cheers Gaye
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke I'm not sure about the last line for a haiku,
I see and feel the picture with the first two lines.Perhaps it's the word 'preferred' could be
re-thought. Haiku are just so tricky to get right. Just my thoughts Cheers Gaye
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Gaye, thanks, as always, for your thoughtful comments, Brooke
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Adewpearl ....
Whilst I have always known about the very descriptive
term - "white horses" - relative to waves being whipped up to a white froth by the wind ... this is the first time I have heard the expression which you describe as
"cat's paws." Once again I realize I am never too old to learn.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Hullo Adewpearl ....
Whilst I have always known about the very descriptive
term - "white horses" - relative to waves being whipped up to a white froth by the wind ... this is the first time I have heard the expression which you describe as
"cat's paws." Once again I realize I am never too old to learn.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Nanette Mary, thank you for another wonderful review, Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Until I read your author notes, I wasn't really able to conjure up a picture in my mind. I had never heard of cat's paws breezes before. I had an image of cats spraying (as male cats do... LOL). After reading the author notes I was able to make out the image of the beautiful ocean waves.
Although I'm sure it wasn't your intention, this gave me quite a chuckle. (No offense intended.) I can't seem to get that mental image to go away. ;)
Have a nice day, Brooke.
Nic
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Until I read your author notes, I wasn't really able to conjure up a picture in my mind. I had never heard of cat's paws breezes before. I had an image of cats spraying (as male cats do... LOL). After reading the author notes I was able to make out the image of the beautiful ocean waves.
Although I'm sure it wasn't your intention, this gave me quite a chuckle. (No offense intended.) I can't seem to get that mental image to go away. ;)
Have a nice day, Brooke.
Nic
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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You're the second person who thought of cats spraying - yuck!! LOLOL This is the funniest thing since I wrote a really sweet poem where the young lovers made a daisy chain as part of their courting, and some guy told me that daisy chain is some position a group of people form into during an orgy. LOLOLOLOL Thanks, Nic. Brooke
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Thanks a lot, Brooke! Now I have TWO awful images in my mind!!! LOL EW! And daisies are my favorite flower. LOL (I remember your daisy chain poem; I loved it!) Nic
Comment from MJMuraco
Your Haiku is lovely. The metaphors used were great and the poem says a lot in very few words. Thank you for the author notes as they helped me understand.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Your Haiku is lovely. The metaphors used were great and the poem says a lot in very few words. Thank you for the author notes as they helped me understand.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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I appreciate your warm response!! Brooke
Comment from just2draw
Oh, now I've heard of this poem from somewhere else I reviewed! Congratulations on being an inspiration! A lovely little work, that skims over the wave type and it's status with the poet a treat. Nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Oh, now I've heard of this poem from somewhere else I reviewed! Congratulations on being an inspiration! A lovely little work, that skims over the wave type and it's status with the poet a treat. Nice job.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Thank you so much - I'm glad my poem inspired someone :-) Brooke
Comment from fayesh
I see a trend in your writing - a draw toward the ocean with your last two poems - white horses, and now cat's paws. I am getting an education in waves and breeze effects on them. Nice job.
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I see a trend in your writing - a draw toward the ocean with your last two poems - white horses, and now cat's paws. I am getting an education in waves and breeze effects on them. Nice job.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Yes, I'm in the mood to take a trip to the sea for sure! :-) Thank you, Brooke
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very nice haiku. You have told me something I didn't know before. I've never heard of cat's paw breezes but I like the idea and I think I would perfer that to anything overly dramatic.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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This is a very nice haiku. You have told me something I didn't know before. I've never heard of cat's paw breezes but I like the idea and I think I would perfer that to anything overly dramatic.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Beth, thanks so much for your lovely review, Brooke :-)
Comment from jkhudson
Well, if I was just judging on the poem itself, although good, I really didn't understand it, but since I have learned to read your author's notes, I do. So very nice!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Well, if I was just judging on the poem itself, although good, I really didn't understand it, but since I have learned to read your author's notes, I do. So very nice!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Thanks for your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from MaureenC
Brooke, thank you for the explanation you gave. The poem just rolls off the tongue with a beautiful description of 'cat's paws'. Just beautiful!
Maureen
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Brooke, thank you for the explanation you gave. The poem just rolls off the tongue with a beautiful description of 'cat's paws'. Just beautiful!
Maureen
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Maureen, thank you for your lovely comments, Brooke
