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nature haiku read poem before author's notes77 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke This Haiku really works. A wise choice not putting a picture on. Your words tell it all. Under the sea is a continuation of what we have above, I've seen it and nature is SO beautiful Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke This Haiku really works. A wise choice not putting a picture on. Your words tell it all. Under the sea is a continuation of what we have above, I've seen it and nature is SO beautiful Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Gaye, thanks so much - I appreciate your kind review, Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Clever and unique!
I enjoyed this haiku. It painted a lovely mental image, as haiku's should. After reading your author notes, and re-reading the poem, I got a whole new picture!
Nice work.
Nic
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Clever and unique!
I enjoyed this haiku. It painted a lovely mental image, as haiku's should. After reading your author notes, and re-reading the poem, I got a whole new picture!
Nice work.
Nic
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Nic, thank you once again :-) Brooke
Comment from just2draw
Oh, a tricky little poem here... you were quite right to exclude a picture - seeing if your mind connected to the theme of a coral is defiantly a little bit of the fun.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Oh, a tricky little poem here... you were quite right to exclude a picture - seeing if your mind connected to the theme of a coral is defiantly a little bit of the fun.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Thanks - I'm so happy you appreciate my fun reveal. Brooke
Comment from sharon fallis
A well thought out and researched subject for this very well written haiku. Good word choices and usage. The format is exceptional and the context is quite lovely. Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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A well thought out and researched subject for this very well written haiku. Good word choices and usage. The format is exceptional and the context is quite lovely. Sharon
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Sharon, thank you for your gracious comments, Brooke
Comment from jkhudson
Well, you don't really need a picture here as you paint one skillfully with your words. Once again a very nice and informative authors notes.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Well, you don't really need a picture here as you paint one skillfully with your words. Once again a very nice and informative authors notes.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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I so appreciate your gracious reviews, Brooke
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Short and nice, This were poetic colorful, and vivid. it fills the senses every word I thought it was very enjoyable. Well done. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Short and nice, This were poetic colorful, and vivid. it fills the senses every word I thought it was very enjoyable. Well done. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thanks for another positive review, Alexander. Brooke
Comment from jmyron
Now this one is a Haiku. Good syllable count, great storyline and a good satori. Well done slice of the pie that is the beauty of the sea.
John
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Now this one is a Haiku. Good syllable count, great storyline and a good satori. Well done slice of the pie that is the beauty of the sea.
John
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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John, thanks so much!!! Brooke
Comment from Sixteezkid
Well, you've just written about one of my favorite beauties of nature to see. To dive and look in wonder and awe at the reefs and coral is as close to heaven as I can get while here on earth.
This is a beautiful haiku, giving imagery throughout. Lovely alliteration.
"caressed by crystal waters" is such a beautiful line. And your satori is perfect!
Thanks for this wonderful picure!
Sue
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Well, you've just written about one of my favorite beauties of nature to see. To dive and look in wonder and awe at the reefs and coral is as close to heaven as I can get while here on earth.
This is a beautiful haiku, giving imagery throughout. Lovely alliteration.
"caressed by crystal waters" is such a beautiful line. And your satori is perfect!
Thanks for this wonderful picure!
Sue
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Sue, thank you!! I agree with you that coral growing in the ocean is as good as life gets. :-) Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
This was pretty good. You followed the 5-7-5 form well. The imagery of the first two lines was vivid and well drawn, but I really think the third line could be better. Perhaps if it said something about coral being the ocean's posy? I don't know, I'm no expert.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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This was pretty good. You followed the 5-7-5 form well. The imagery of the first two lines was vivid and well drawn, but I really think the third line could be better. Perhaps if it said something about coral being the ocean's posy? I don't know, I'm no expert.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Brooke
Comment from tony bronk
Anybody that smokes weed would understand budding. I no longer do but, there was a time and the "Almighty Bud!" was something to be admired. A lovely poem. tony
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Anybody that smokes weed would understand budding. I no longer do but, there was a time and the "Almighty Bud!" was something to be admired. A lovely poem. tony
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Tony, I graduated from high school in 1969 and never did any of that stuff though had plenty of opportunities. Thanks so much for your smile-inducing review, Brooke :-)
