The Orchard
a reflective septolet83 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke What an interesting form of poetry. This verse just shows so much even without the beautiful artwork
Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke What an interesting form of poetry. This verse just shows so much even without the beautiful artwork
Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Gaye, thank you once again! Brooke
Comment from Helen Tan
This format is new to me so thanks for the notes.
combine to form a single picture that often takes into account two contrasting points of view
With this in mind, I would say you have covered the entire picture of the orchard- the supplier i.e. the tangerines trees, the harvesters i.e the workers and the consumer i.e you.
The two contrasting POVs would be you enjoying the taste of the tangerines while the workers are tasting the hardship of harvesting the tangerines.
Branches bent
with tangerines
This means heavy with fruits, a lot of work harvesting which leads to "their aching backs."
Branches bent
Workers, stretching,
I enjoyed these two contrasting images - bent versus stretched.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2009
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This format is new to me so thanks for the notes.
combine to form a single picture that often takes into account two contrasting points of view
With this in mind, I would say you have covered the entire picture of the orchard- the supplier i.e. the tangerines trees, the harvesters i.e the workers and the consumer i.e you.
The two contrasting POVs would be you enjoying the taste of the tangerines while the workers are tasting the hardship of harvesting the tangerines.
Branches bent
with tangerines
This means heavy with fruits, a lot of work harvesting which leads to "their aching backs."
Branches bent
Workers, stretching,
I enjoyed these two contrasting images - bent versus stretched.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2009
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Helen, as usual, you give an insightful read of a poem - with great attention to detail - thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
i hope they are sweet tangerines. i haven't tasted one of those in a long, long time. LOL made me smile. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2009
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brooke,
i hope they are sweet tangerines. i haven't tasted one of those in a long, long time. LOL made me smile. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2009
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Barbara, thank you for your gracious comments, Brooke
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brooke,
you are very welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from Poetic Friend
Brooke, you execute this poetic form so well. The contrast in the stanzas is precise, sharp, and concise. I am in awe the concepts you used to convey the orchard.
Please continue to write in this poetic form. You are darn good!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2009
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Brooke, you execute this poetic form so well. The contrast in the stanzas is precise, sharp, and concise. I am in awe the concepts you used to convey the orchard.
Please continue to write in this poetic form. You are darn good!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2009
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Thank you - I really appreciate your encouraging review! Brooke
Comment from luna
Brooke, I love septolets and you've executed this one very well. Interestingly, your favorite example is the same example shown on the shadowpoetry.com site as their example for a septolet! That's the site I frequent most often for my form poetry rules and requirements. Also it has new forms as they are released quite frequently...thanks for sharing this one.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Brooke, I love septolets and you've executed this one very well. Interestingly, your favorite example is the same example shown on the shadowpoetry.com site as their example for a septolet! That's the site I frequent most often for my form poetry rules and requirements. Also it has new forms as they are released quite frequently...thanks for sharing this one.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Jenny, that could well be where I found the sample. Thanks so much, and it is good to see you!! Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
Why is succulent beauty so back breaking. I will pass along a compliment and discover it is ball breaking as well. LOL I enjoyed this well written poem that is very nicely illustrated.
True, we see the beatuy, but never the work. You know what? That is an inward reflection as well.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Why is succulent beauty so back breaking. I will pass along a compliment and discover it is ball breaking as well. LOL I enjoyed this well written poem that is very nicely illustrated.
True, we see the beatuy, but never the work. You know what? That is an inward reflection as well.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Mike, thank you for your insightful comments - I think lots of suburban kids think trees are just to look pretty and produce comes from the back of the store!!! Brooke
Comment from jdrhye
The imagery in this little poem is vivid and I can picture the pain of back aches as well as the tantilizing taste of fresh juices of fruit. Loved it, made me want an orange!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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The imagery in this little poem is vivid and I can picture the pain of back aches as well as the tantilizing taste of fresh juices of fruit. Loved it, made me want an orange!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Thanks so much! Brooke
Comment from Amfunny
Yum... nicely done, but now I am craving a tangerine. You always manage to find the perfect artwork for your poems and this was another perfect choice. This was a very good septolet, although I myself have never done one. Very good job.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Yum... nicely done, but now I am craving a tangerine. You always manage to find the perfect artwork for your poems and this was another perfect choice. This was a very good septolet, although I myself have never done one. Very good job.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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I search really hard for artwork - I often devote a half hour to it. So, thank you for noticing. Thanks for a great review, Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"The Orchard" is a creative and perfectly written septolet poem. It reads smooth from beginning to end in perfect rhythm. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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"The Orchard" is a creative and perfectly written septolet poem. It reads smooth from beginning to end in perfect rhythm. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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thank you for your most positive review, Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Hmm ... The fruits of our labors. ;)
Great writing, Brooke. The imagery in this is very strong. I can picture the hard workers, tending to their aching backs. Perhaps sinking their teeth into a juicy, tantalizing tangerine will help them forget about their tired muscles. ;)
I like this style of poetry. The contrasting verses give a special depth to such a short poem.
~Nic
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Hmm ... The fruits of our labors. ;)
Great writing, Brooke. The imagery in this is very strong. I can picture the hard workers, tending to their aching backs. Perhaps sinking their teeth into a juicy, tantalizing tangerine will help them forget about their tired muscles. ;)
I like this style of poetry. The contrasting verses give a special depth to such a short poem.
~Nic
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Nic, you are just making my night!!! Thank you :-)
