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haiku (tectonic)

A haiku

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Comment from babylonia
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mike,
nicely done. so many words and inspirations for this contest. you did well too. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. if the contest is on ... good luck~
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2009
    This was an interesting challenge, and drew me back to the detested haiku form. There were some damned fine entries, so I'm completely happy that I didn't win.

    Mike
reply by babylonia on 23-Mar-2009
    mike,
    i read some excellent ones. some people are just destined to write haiku. i prefer it's evil twin. LOL senryu.
    love,
    barbara
Comment from K-Patrick
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I'm voting on the 'VOLCANO Haiku' contest and as always, I am reading all entries before deciding. The number of entries and need to stay employed prohibit a more detailed review, but "tectonic anger" was very nicely thought out. Great job!

I wish you the best in the contest.

The only problem
with Haiku is that you just
get started and then
~ Roger McGough (UK Poet)



 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2009
    Thankyou K-Pat :-). This was an interesting exercise.

    Mike
Comment from Just2Write
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I really liked your word choices in this haiku. Tectonic anger would normally be something I would associate with earthquake, but, it fits well into the structure here. Good luck in the contest. Rose.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thankyou Rose :-). I enjoyed writing this one.

    Mike
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
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Good morning Mike
A very descriptive and powerful haiku.
I enjoy the varity you have posteed lately, good work!
Loyd

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thankyou Loyd :-). I do enjoy trying out different things. Haiku is very much not my comfort zone, but I do enjoy trying my hand from time to time!

    Mike
reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 18-Mar-2009
    A good Wednesday morning to you poet friend!
    Mike, you are so very welcome!
    Have a wonderful day, Loyd
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
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Your poem is nicely written and the message is wonderfullly presented. It was my pleasure to read this. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thankyou Gato; this was an interesting challenge, and I enjoyed having a stab at it.

    Mike
Comment from Hitcher
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Tectonic anger!
I like that Mike
Your Haiku makes another great entry into the contest friend, looks like the volcano is bringing the best out of people, good luck mate!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    I thought that was a killer line, but it's not won me any votes :-(. That's fine though, as I've read the others now and,. like you say, there's some brilliant ones.

    Mike
Comment from Crusty
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How can I fault something so simple and so honest. Love your work Mike, as always. (Okay, so I don't get these short poems) LOL. Though as far as I can tell, this makes sense, and that's more than I can say for most poetry I've read. ( I know, I'm showing my ignorance, ain't I. ) Well, give me time, I get the hang of it.

Brad..

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    I used to deteste haiku, lol. In fact I'm still not a fan, but it's interesting trying to write them every now and then, purely as an exercise.

    Cheers Brad :-)

    Mike
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
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hi ff,
"Burning fervour" surely are great words with which to describe a volcano. "Tetonic anger" is a great clincher too. I really enjoyed your fine haiku. Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Whizpurr ^-^

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thanks Whizpurr :-). Glad you enjoyed my effort.

    Mike
Comment from adewpearl
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burning fervor - tectonic anger - great, powerful imagery that helps one visualize the volcano when it erupts - I like the alliteration and the high impact verb of bursts boldly - this is an excellent haiku Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thankyou Brooke :-). I thought it was good, but then I read the rest and there's some great ones, so I have no chance in the contest. I still enjoyed scribbling it though!

    Mike
Comment from Domino
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Ok, Mike, I had to look up 'tectonic' to see it's to do with rocks. Not sure, knowing you, if you're referring to the volcanic type or the type between your legs, as either scenario could be applied to 'bursting boldly'. LMAO!
Excellent. Good luck n best wishes, Ray xx

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    I was thinking of the tectonic plates of the earth, the grinding together of which causes earthquakes and, indeed, volcanos. Having said all that, I like your idea about me referring to my knackersacker (tm), and shall henceforth explain to everyone that such was my meaning :-)

    lol, thanks Ray, glad you approve. Glad I remembered to change so I used the word "volcano". sigh...

    Mike

    PS: I thought of Brianna more as Irish, although it's a fantasy story so it would be "a beguiling, homey accent with sing-song rhythm and a definite twang" lol