Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

You gave us a very vivid scene in your 5-7-5. I enjoyed the bonus of the strong rhyme and the alliteration of "s's". The satori makes a good comment.

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009

Thanks for the wonderful review. I appreciate your thoughtful comments.

Comment from sugarbear

Excellent

Great haiku! I like how you related it to a meal by using kettle and gulp, excellent imagery. The structure is perfect and I noticed no spags. Good luck in the contest. sugarbear

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009

Thanks for the wonderful review. I appreciate your thoughtful comments.

reply by sugarbear on 16-Mar-2009

You're welcome. sugarbear

Comment from jkhudson

Excellent

Very good haiku! It is very hard to bring such powerful images in just three lines without a picture whic you have seemed to do! Nice job!

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009

Thanks for the wonderful review. I appreciate your thoughtful comments.

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

This is a powerful Haiku. Much is said in these few words. I love your carefully chosen words. The metaphor is excellent. Good luck n the contest.
Delora

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009

Thank you so much for this very kind and uplifting review.

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

Wow! descriptive imagery at its peak. Wonderful little haiku. Best of luck in the writing prompt contest. Well done.

Duane

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009

Thank you so much for your support and kind review.

Comment from Roisin

Excellent

Wow! What a powerful description of an erupting volcano. You've painted a wonderful picture here. I stayed at the foot of Mount Etne in Sicily last year. It was quietly erupting at the time and it was such an amazing sight to see at night - orange flourescent light at the top of the mountain. You've done a great job here. Good luck.

Hugs

Roisin

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009

What a great experience.. to actually see the event.
I appreciate your kind thoughts and supportive review.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes you definitely brought the volcano too life here in the description you have done very well in this contest entry good luck regards Fuller

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009

Thanks so much for this terrific and kind review.

Comment from words

Excellent

Loved it!!

especially liked these lines:
stew of boiling fire erupts
swallows earth in gulps

Wonder though if "gulps" is the right word ?


"stew of boiling fire erupts" is especially evocative!







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 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009

I thought about it, and after watching the initial burst of a volcano -- on tv, of course -- it actually appeared to gulp up the earth at first, then oozed and licked up the rest.
Thanks for the great review. I appreciate your time.

reply by words on 15-Mar-2009

Wow. Glad I asked. I love the power of volcanos...they have always fascinated me. Thanks for the info.

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, Kathy, and thanks for entering your stunning haiku. Brilliant words! One thing, you're missed the rules on 'artwork' and I must ask you to REMOVE the picture immediately. Anyway, your words are strong enough that thay don's need it. Thanks and good luck, Ray xx

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 Comment Written 15-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009

I removed it, but I did really look and look and look to MAKE SURE I could use artwork, and didn't see where it was stated. Could you please show where it says. Thanks, I am getting old and miss many things. LOL
Thanks for the great review.

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009

I removed it, but I did really look and look and look to MAKE SURE I could use artwork, and didn't see where it was stated. Could you please show where it says. Thanks, I am getting old and miss many things. LOL
Thanks for the great review.
WAIT -- I found it.... duh!!!!!!!1

reply by Domino on 15-Mar-2009

Thanks very much, kathy.
The rule is clearly stated in the contest, along with the 'authors notes' rule - just below the box with the main rules which 'Tom' has edited.
Cheers, Ray xx