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haiku (volcano)

Contest Prompt 5-7-5 haiku

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Comment from K-Patrick
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I'm voting on the 'VOLCANO Haiku' contest and as always, I am reading all entries before deciding. The number of entries and need to stay employed prohibit a more detailed review, but I think you have done well and offer an excellent glimpse into a volcano.

"stew of boiling fire" - very powerful!

I wish you the best in the contest.

The only problem
with Haiku is that you just
get started and then
~ Roger McGough (UK Poet)

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thanks so much for your always supportive kindnesses.
Comment from Just2Write
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I enjoyed this one. There have been so many fine entries into this contest, yours among them. I like the analagy of the volcano simmering like a pot of stew. Nice job. Rose.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thank you so much for this very kind and uplifting review.
    I really appreciate your insightful comments.
Comment from Fleedleflump
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Hungru Hungry Volcano! The new board game from MB! Kids will love devouring each other's tropical paradise with their gooey lava flows! Mess on the carpet! Yells of outrage! Every parent's dream!

Don't mind my weird imagination. Your imagery is different to the others, and sets your haiku apart, which is always a good thing.

Mike

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thank you so much for this very kind and uplifting review.
    I really appreciate your fanciful comments.
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
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Your poem is nicely written and the message is wonderfullly presented. It was my pleasure to read this. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    I really appreciate your kind comments and review. Thanks so much.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
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Hi skye,
You have surely painted a vivid word picture of a hungry and active volcano. I enjoyed your well written haiku very much. Thanks for sharing.
Whizpurr ^-^

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    I really appreciate your kind comments and review. Thanks so much.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
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Afternoon Skye - this is great. The personification of the volcano was very descriptive and the alliteration was a nice touch.

good luck - sherry

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    Thank you very much for such a kind review. I appreciate your thoughtful insight.
Comment from adewpearl
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I love the imagery of the stew of lava erupting and the lava swallowing the earth in gulps - like a reverse stew that eats the earth instead of being eaten simmers - it all ties together - a strong haiku Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    Thank you very much for such a kind review. I appreciate your thoughtful insight.
Comment from Donovan
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Volcanos are hot and steamy. They sometimes erupt unpredictably. Sometimes there s long anticipation and then...well..and then they swallow you up. Sometimes.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    Sometimes the swallowing is followed by long periods of drought.....
    And then more anticipation of another eruption.
    Waiting is the hardest.... it makes time move so slowly.
Comment from Judian James
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Whoa, good one. I haven't read any of the other entries, I don't think but this one would be hard to beat. I loved your choice of "swallows" and "gulps" for the final line.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    Thanks so much for the great review. I really thought those words fit what I was trying to say... glad you liked it.
Comment from prodigal
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Wow. Very well done. Swallows earth in gulps is a very vivid image. THis is a very well constructed haiku. I can clearly picture the volcano in my mind by reading this. Well done- Good luck in the contest. - Sam

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2009

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
    Thanks so much for the great review. I really thought those words fit what I was trying to say... glad you liked it.