haiku (hidden underground)
5-7-5 volcano haiku26 total reviews
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi IIrish,
I enjoyed the lively word picture you created on an exploding volcano. Your haiku is well written and has an energetic quality to it, just like a real volcano does.
Thanks for sharing.
Whizpurr ^-^
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Hi IIrish,
I enjoyed the lively word picture you created on an exploding volcano. Your haiku is well written and has an energetic quality to it, just like a real volcano does.
Thanks for sharing.
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Hello whizpurr! Thanks for taking the time to comment on this haiku and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate your kind review.
Indy :>)
Comment from sherrygreywolf
A perfect entry for the contest. The colors work well with your descriptive words. Best of luck. You should do well.
have a great day - sherry
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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A perfect entry for the contest. The colors work well with your descriptive words. Best of luck. You should do well.
have a great day - sherry
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Hello sherry! Thanks for your kind review for this haiku and I appreciate your taking the time to comment.
Indy :>)
Comment from Judian James
this is a fascinating contest. Every single entry has to be on a volcano and a haiku. They've all been excellent. I have no idea how anyone can sort them out to vote!! This is excellent Indy.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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this is a fascinating contest. Every single entry has to be on a volcano and a haiku. They've all been excellent. I have no idea how anyone can sort them out to vote!! This is excellent Indy.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Hello Jude! Thanks for your kind comments and review of this haiku. I always appreciate hearing your feedback.
Indy :>)
Comment from Allezw2
Paracutin still fumes
Destroyed San Juan with a puff
Church tower still stands
Fascinating topic, well presented.
Paricutin last erupted in 1943 and covered the town so completely that only the church bell tower is visible above the all-encompassing ash.
How many remember the Caribbean island of Monserrat's destruction?
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Paracutin still fumes
Destroyed San Juan with a puff
Church tower still stands
Fascinating topic, well presented.
Paricutin last erupted in 1943 and covered the town so completely that only the church bell tower is visible above the all-encompassing ash.
How many remember the Caribbean island of Monserrat's destruction?
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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hello Fantasist! Thank you for your review and kind comments for this mini story intro. I look forward to reading about Monserrat.
Thank you,
Indy :>)
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No less than you deserved, no more than you have earned.
Comment from rmdelta
Karyn, this was a very well written story and a wonderful contest entry. Hard to review for me since I seldom understand them, but this was an easy read. Best of luck in the contest.
Reggie
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Karyn, this was a very well written story and a wonderful contest entry. Hard to review for me since I seldom understand them, but this was an easy read. Best of luck in the contest.
Reggie
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Hello Reggie! Thank you, kind sir, for reading and reviewing something you usually don't. I appreciate that very much.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment from starkat
I know I wake up everytime my hot molten lava explodes. I usually have to take a couple of Tylenol pm's and drink a glass of chocolate milk to calm down and go back to bed..;)
Hi Indy, excellent contest entry as you followed all of Ray's rules. Nice imagery of what's happening underground, beneath our range of vision. After Volcano's wake up and start throwing temper tantrums is when we usually pay attention to them. I can see now that volcano's are prone to indigestion.
Wishing you luck in this contest. I'm tempted to create an entry, but I don't know if I can follow all of Ray's stringent rules... :) Cheers... SK
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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I know I wake up everytime my hot molten lava explodes. I usually have to take a couple of Tylenol pm's and drink a glass of chocolate milk to calm down and go back to bed..;)
Hi Indy, excellent contest entry as you followed all of Ray's rules. Nice imagery of what's happening underground, beneath our range of vision. After Volcano's wake up and start throwing temper tantrums is when we usually pay attention to them. I can see now that volcano's are prone to indigestion.
Wishing you luck in this contest. I'm tempted to create an entry, but I don't know if I can follow all of Ray's stringent rules... :) Cheers... SK
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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LMAO! Ya gotta be careful 'bout those hot molten lava erutions! Ya just can't trust them things...you never know when they're gonna explode! Chocolate milk works, huh? hmmmmmmm
Thanks for your wonderful review this morning, SK. Started this Monday off with a giggle and a smile.
Indy :>)
Comment from Joan E.
I liked the image of the brewing eruption being "hidden underground". I also enjoyed the bonus of a bit of alliteration in your 5-7-5 with its successful satori.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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I liked the image of the brewing eruption being "hidden underground". I also enjoyed the bonus of a bit of alliteration in your 5-7-5 with its successful satori.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Hello Jona E! Thank you so much for taking the time to look this over and for your kind comments and review. I appreciate your feedback.
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Hitcher
This is the second one of these volcano Haiku's that I've read friend, both are excellent, I think you have got a great competition on the cards if your two[ You and Ray] are anything to go by.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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This is the second one of these volcano Haiku's that I've read friend, both are excellent, I think you have got a great competition on the cards if your two[ You and Ray] are anything to go by.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Hello Hitch! Thanks for your comments, my friend, for this haiku. We're spewing molten ash and lava all over FanStory with this contest. LOL Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Marjorie D.
You're awfully good at producing these visual images, Indy. Haikus may be your forte! Nice choice of colors to go with the topic, too. Good luck, kiddo!
XO
Marjorie
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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You're awfully good at producing these visual images, Indy. Haikus may be your forte! Nice choice of colors to go with the topic, too. Good luck, kiddo!
XO
Marjorie
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Hello M! Thank you for such a lovely compliment. I do enjoy trying to cram all the syllables in my head into a 5-7-5 format. Believe me...it's quite the challenge. LOL
Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Domino
Hi, Kar, and thanks for entering (I think, LOL)
The intesity of your words 'awakes' me. ;-).
OK, this is terific, as usual. You're so good at humour and word economy. Good luck n love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Hi, Kar, and thanks for entering (I think, LOL)
The intesity of your words 'awakes' me. ;-).
OK, this is terific, as usual. You're so good at humour and word economy. Good luck n love, Ray xx
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Hello RayMan! Some weird rules didn't allow me to thank you for the contest...so please accept my thanks for spending your hard-earned money for these contests. I'm glad my haiku awakened you...lol I can rhyme!
Smiles,
Indy :>)
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Oy, You, it's your turn to sponsor fifty contests. Do it! LOL. xx
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Ok...Ok...sheeeesh!!! lmaooooo
