Beyond the Pier
poem106 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
(Late reviewing this one... I promise I'll get all caught up - one day/week/... LOL)
This is beautiful writing. Your well crafted words have placed me right there beside you on the pier.
What is it with the water theme? You keep making me yearn for a beach trip!!! LOL Stop it! ;)
where pods of whales sing lyric songs
and magic mermaids dwell. <--my fav lines! wow.
This flows nicely and I really enjoyed your wording (fluid waves, naught to stop their swell, waves upon it sweep). Nice work, Brooke.
Nic
Nic
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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(Late reviewing this one... I promise I'll get all caught up - one day/week/... LOL)
This is beautiful writing. Your well crafted words have placed me right there beside you on the pier.
What is it with the water theme? You keep making me yearn for a beach trip!!! LOL Stop it! ;)
where pods of whales sing lyric songs
and magic mermaids dwell. <--my fav lines! wow.
This flows nicely and I really enjoyed your wording (fluid waves, naught to stop their swell, waves upon it sweep). Nice work, Brooke.
Nic
Nic
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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You got it - I'm yearning for a beach trip! :-) Thanks, Nic. Brooke :-)
Comment from jdrhye
This is a lovely poem. I enjoyed the imagery that your words have depicted. The flow and rhyming schemes is very nice as well.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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This is a lovely poem. I enjoyed the imagery that your words have depicted. The flow and rhyming schemes is very nice as well.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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Thank you for another thoughtful and encouraging review, Brooke
Comment from jack silver
this was a wonderfully written poem. it described the picture and title perfectly. i didn't see anything that needed to be worked on and i look forward to reading more. i also liked the way you ended the poem with...
Perhaps one day I shall explore
the secrets of the deep --
For now I dream upon the pier
as waves upon it sweep.
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jack
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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this was a wonderfully written poem. it described the picture and title perfectly. i didn't see anything that needed to be worked on and i look forward to reading more. i also liked the way you ended the poem with...
Perhaps one day I shall explore
the secrets of the deep --
For now I dream upon the pier
as waves upon it sweep.
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jack
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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Jack, thank you - your lovely reviews all day long are keeping me in a good mood! :-) Brooke
Comment from fictionwriter
What a great little poem. I love the picture that you picked to go along with it. I alway admire you prowess with poetry. As always great work.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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What a great little poem. I love the picture that you picked to go along with it. I alway admire you prowess with poetry. As always great work.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Thank you for such a kind comment, Brooke
Comment from ~Dovey
I enjoyed this poem, Brooke. You include the beauty of the sea coupled with it's more mystical, fanciful notions, such as mermaids. Excellent work. The last stanza was my favorite. :)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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I enjoyed this poem, Brooke. You include the beauty of the sea coupled with it's more mystical, fanciful notions, such as mermaids. Excellent work. The last stanza was my favorite. :)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Dovey, I appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from raimie
Oh if you ever make it beyond. please do take me, lol. Would love to be there as well. Maybe we should just grab our slickers and bunker down in the light house, Lol. I love when you write of the sea. I have told you more than once, the water is my favorite element.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Oh if you ever make it beyond. please do take me, lol. Would love to be there as well. Maybe we should just grab our slickers and bunker down in the light house, Lol. I love when you write of the sea. I have told you more than once, the water is my favorite element.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Raimie, thank you for your great comments! Brooke :-)
Comment from Rottie
Very well written and put together.it was simple yet elegant. I can find nothing here to changed. Maybe one more stanza and that is not really needed. Just a great read
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Very well written and put together.it was simple yet elegant. I can find nothing here to changed. Maybe one more stanza and that is not really needed. Just a great read
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Brooke
Comment from BethShelby
Beautiful! Your lines are well contructed and musical. I love way you right. The second verse is my favorite. You words create a lovely picture.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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Beautiful! Your lines are well contructed and musical. I love way you right. The second verse is my favorite. You words create a lovely picture.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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Beth, thanks so much for your gracious comments, Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
::nodding, a smile on his face::
It's not anything deep or difficult, but it's a good, clean, enjoyably polished read, and I liked it, so here' a fiver.
:0)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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::nodding, a smile on his face::
It's not anything deep or difficult, but it's a good, clean, enjoyably polished read, and I liked it, so here' a fiver.
:0)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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Nescher, I will have to write something deeply profound for you soon! :-D Thanks,
Brooke
Comment from KelinaJ
Great image selection. Good presentation and color scheme. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well. A great piece.
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Sorry to be missing so long, I moved across the country and have been working to establish a new household. It's nice to finally be back.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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Great image selection. Good presentation and color scheme. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well. A great piece.
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Sorry to be missing so long, I moved across the country and have been working to establish a new household. It's nice to finally be back.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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Kelina, it is great to see you back! I know how much time and effort moving takes :-) Thanks, Brooke
