Dear Lexi
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "First Sunday in Church""Let the little children come unto me." ~ Jesus
16 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
Hallelujah!
Wow! 5th generation. That is fabulous.
This poem made me want to stand up and shout. :) I feel the joy and pride displayed in this poem.
I especially liked:
very special day
your great-grandfather's birthday
sense of irony
Wonderful, full writing. :)
Nic
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
Hallelujah!
Wow! 5th generation. That is fabulous.
This poem made me want to stand up and shout. :) I feel the joy and pride displayed in this poem.
I especially liked:
very special day
your great-grandfather's birthday
sense of irony
Wonderful, full writing. :)
Nic
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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written with a very full heart that day, for sure. love, jan
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
My dad just sent me my baby tape and my baptism on it. The entire time I think I'm screaming. This made me think of that.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
My dad just sent me my baby tape and my baptism on it. The entire time I think I'm screaming. This made me think of that.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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hopefully, Lexi won't do that. love, jan
Comment from Twomoon
Jan, this is just a beautiful piece of your thoughts and heart. I enjoyed touching that today. Running to the Pancake Breakfast, as it is still morning...smile, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
Jan, this is just a beautiful piece of your thoughts and heart. I enjoyed touching that today. Running to the Pancake Breakfast, as it is still morning...smile, much love twomoon
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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church to breakfast--it's how most of my Sundays go, for sure. love, jan
Comment from luisestable
Of all the poems I`ve read of yours, this one is the most prose-like and least poetry-souding. The sentiment is clear, but It lacks a bit the language of poetry. It reads like a number of affirmations and It is devoid somehow of truly poety qualities. But I applaud the effort and your love for the child.
Keep on writing.
luis
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
Of all the poems I`ve read of yours, this one is the most prose-like and least poetry-souding. The sentiment is clear, but It lacks a bit the language of poetry. It reads like a number of affirmations and It is devoid somehow of truly poety qualities. But I applaud the effort and your love for the child.
Keep on writing.
luis
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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I understand, luis
I was trying to capture the moment
maybe it would have been done better in prose
thanks, again
love, jan
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed all your 5-7-5's and 3-5-3's. Lexi's parents should be very proud of your chronicles. I especially liked the special tribute to your dad.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
I enjoyed all your 5-7-5's and 3-5-3's. Lexi's parents should be very proud of your chronicles. I especially liked the special tribute to your dad.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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thanks, Joan E. love, jan
Comment from howling harp
you created a very effective form by skipping some lines in this piece. i found that the enforced pause's really worked for me here. i liked your cord choices and the meter too. thanks
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
you created a very effective form by skipping some lines in this piece. i found that the enforced pause's really worked for me here. i liked your cord choices and the meter too. thanks
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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thanks, howling harp. love, jan
Comment from joan marie
I felt that he had passed when you used the word irony. What a lovely series of life and family this is going to be. I am so glad to be a part of it. May have missed some, being sick but I'll read them all. joan marie
Unable to think clearly under new meds, I have reposted one from before we were reading each other. I would love it if you took a moment to read it. Still That Little Child. It is on page 2 of available reading poetry or on my portfolio. Thanks, jm
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
I felt that he had passed when you used the word irony. What a lovely series of life and family this is going to be. I am so glad to be a part of it. May have missed some, being sick but I'll read them all. joan marie
Unable to think clearly under new meds, I have reposted one from before we were reading each other. I would love it if you took a moment to read it. Still That Little Child. It is on page 2 of available reading poetry or on my portfolio. Thanks, jm
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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joan marie, I'm way behind on posting and reading but I'll be most happy to do that. I want to get to know your work, too. love, jan
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Thanks and you're welcome. Potent antibiotics for digestive problems got me so tired and writing seems like such an effort. Thought some of my older work that the people who I read now might give me their take on. jm
Comment from rmdelta
Jan, another excellent chapter for Lexie's book. Strong writing and beautiful wording make this a very good chapter and one to be proud of.
Reggie
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
Jan, another excellent chapter for Lexie's book. Strong writing and beautiful wording make this a very good chapter and one to be proud of.
Reggie
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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thanks, again, Reggie
Comment from Tellis
A very sweet and inspirational poem. I enjoyed reading it very much. I don't do spags on poems so keep up the good work.
Tellis
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
A very sweet and inspirational poem. I enjoyed reading it very much. I don't do spags on poems so keep up the good work.
Tellis
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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thanks, Tellis. love, jan
Comment from words
Nice use of form to create a diary of the child entering into your family life.
The following lines seem to be the thru line of the poem:
"connections
so interwoven
in your life"
Might tie everything together better if they were oft repeated in this piece and following pieces.
GOod work!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
Nice use of form to create a diary of the child entering into your family life.
The following lines seem to be the thru line of the poem:
"connections
so interwoven
in your life"
Might tie everything together better if they were oft repeated in this piece and following pieces.
GOod work!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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thanks, words
good idea, I'll try to use it often
love, jan