cinquains
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Comment from Nicnac
"So can I" in your author notes cracked me up.
Hey - It's your poem, Brooke. You can write it however your heart leads you. So there! ha ha
In my (always right) opinion, (LOL) a poem is a great poem if it makes you 'feel' or 'reflect'. I've not read a poem of yours yet that hasn't made me do both. This poem is no exception. The words of this poem, however they are arranged, stir me - just as the March winds stir the air.
Beautiful writing.
Nic
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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"So can I" in your author notes cracked me up.
Hey - It's your poem, Brooke. You can write it however your heart leads you. So there! ha ha
In my (always right) opinion, (LOL) a poem is a great poem if it makes you 'feel' or 'reflect'. I've not read a poem of yours yet that hasn't made me do both. This poem is no exception. The words of this poem, however they are arranged, stir me - just as the March winds stir the air.
Beautiful writing.
Nic
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Nic, you are a gem - you deserve every lovely moment you can steal on your swing :-) Brooke
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Aw, thanks! Maybe I'll get home before dark tomorrow and steal a few quiet moments out there. :)
I'm still trying to catch-up on reviews. I've got a busy 12 hour work day coming in 7 hours. I should be sleeping, but ... LOL
Comment from fastdigits
Always nice to learn new things
and especially of different forms
of writing.
Your presentation, no matter whether
it be a pure Quantrain of not is a
thought-provoking work that is tinged
with the sound of the howling winds of
March, the feeling of the cold whirling
breezes upon the face that also make one
feel alive.
A lovely presentation that flows like
the March winds.
Well done
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Always nice to learn new things
and especially of different forms
of writing.
Your presentation, no matter whether
it be a pure Quantrain of not is a
thought-provoking work that is tinged
with the sound of the howling winds of
March, the feeling of the cold whirling
breezes upon the face that also make one
feel alive.
A lovely presentation that flows like
the March winds.
Well done
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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thank you for your kind and supportive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from glacierbabe
Ok, my friend, I admit that my eyes glazed over reading the author notes. LOL I finally understood them and in doing so have a great appreciation for this piece. Those few words say a lot. I liked the cadence better when I read it aloud. I found nothing that needs correcting. It is very well written. Thank you for sharing the information about cinquain. This helps me learn more about poetry. Cheryl :)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Ok, my friend, I admit that my eyes glazed over reading the author notes. LOL I finally understood them and in doing so have a great appreciation for this piece. Those few words say a lot. I liked the cadence better when I read it aloud. I found nothing that needs correcting. It is very well written. Thank you for sharing the information about cinquain. This helps me learn more about poetry. Cheryl :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Glad you liked the poem and learned a bit about cinquains :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Lovely imagery in this one, Brooke, no matter how many syllables there are. I like your positive message very much. Lovely!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Lovely imagery in this one, Brooke, no matter how many syllables there are. I like your positive message very much. Lovely!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Indy, thanks so much for your supportive comments! Brooke
Comment from literaturelove
Good point. Love this poem short and to the point loved it. Yeah I feel alive when the wind is blowing especially when I feel like I must might be lifted off the ground. Cute poem just loved it.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Good point. Love this poem short and to the point loved it. Yeah I feel alive when the wind is blowing especially when I feel like I must might be lifted off the ground. Cute poem just loved it.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Thanks for your most positive comments! Brooke :-)
Comment from Rabianabian
This is another one of your excellent poems. And though it may not follow the exact cinquian form, it still flows very well and has great description. Bravo!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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This is another one of your excellent poems. And though it may not follow the exact cinquian form, it still flows very well and has great description. Bravo!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from S.Yocom
I like what you've done with this cinquain, Brooke. You're right that you certainly can modify the "rules," if by doing so, you improve the poem. I think you got it just right.
Sally
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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I like what you've done with this cinquain, Brooke. You're right that you certainly can modify the "rules," if by doing so, you improve the poem. I think you got it just right.
Sally
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Sally, thank you for your supportive comments,Brooke :-)
Comment from Senyai
Oh, I loved this, Adewpearl. Your double meaning for the March wind remind us that the things that toughen in life are often the very things that bring us pain and pleasure.
I loved your analogy here in this well written cinquain.
Well done,
Foxey
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Oh, I loved this, Adewpearl. Your double meaning for the March wind remind us that the things that toughen in life are often the very things that bring us pain and pleasure.
I loved your analogy here in this well written cinquain.
Well done,
Foxey
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Foxey, thank you so much for your thoughtful response - I appreciate your encouragement. Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
::Shaking finger wildly::
Nuh-UH! You gotta do it RIGHT! You gotta count EACH syllable an' write it RIGHT! An' . . .an' . . .an' if you don't, you're just a POOP!
::Grinning::
So there!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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::Shaking finger wildly::
Nuh-UH! You gotta do it RIGHT! You gotta count EACH syllable an' write it RIGHT! An' . . .an' . . .an' if you don't, you're just a POOP!
::Grinning::
So there!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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If you call me a poop, I'll tell Tom! LOL Thank you, dear friend - you'd be surprised how many people DO get uptight about things like syllables and where people place them. :-D Brooke
Comment from tammipratt
to whip my reddened face, Really liked that line :) I could see it. I can't and won't comment on your adjusted form - I'm not that well-versed in poetry correctness :) but I do think the content was very good.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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to whip my reddened face, Really liked that line :) I could see it. I can't and won't comment on your adjusted form - I'm not that well-versed in poetry correctness :) but I do think the content was very good.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind comments, Brooke :-)
