Blowing Bubbles
Reflective Quatrains96 total reviews
Comment from Sardinesandsucker
"Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death"
Excellently stated adewpearl. In the past I have gone out behind the reservior with a large container of bubbles and sat for hours watching and enjoying as my bubbles sailed away.
Peace and enlightenment
Sandina
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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"Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death"
Excellently stated adewpearl. In the past I have gone out behind the reservior with a large container of bubbles and sat for hours watching and enjoying as my bubbles sailed away.
Peace and enlightenment
Sandina
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Sandina, thank you for your kind review. I'm so glad we share the same love of bubbles and the same great memories :-) Brooke
Comment from MercyWrites
Your poem match the picture, and it made me smile. Your poem bring back fun memories. I know all of us can remember a time when we blew bottles as child.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Your poem match the picture, and it made me smile. Your poem bring back fun memories. I know all of us can remember a time when we blew bottles as child.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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I'm so glad you share these memories - I love bubbles! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Gramma Kathy
This is an "exquisite creation" - just like your bubbles.
I actually read it a couple days ago, but it was so thought-provoking, I had to come back to it. I'm still thinking about that last line:
"Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death."
Perhaps it's because I've been contemplating my own mortality that this hit so hard. I like the idea of a beautiful death.
Thank you for this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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This is an "exquisite creation" - just like your bubbles.
I actually read it a couple days ago, but it was so thought-provoking, I had to come back to it. I'm still thinking about that last line:
"Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death."
Perhaps it's because I've been contemplating my own mortality that this hit so hard. I like the idea of a beautiful death.
Thank you for this lovely poem.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Kathy, thanks so much for returning to my poem! Brooke :-)
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Nice use of the 7/6/7/6 syllabic form. Again, I wonder if lines five and seven should rhyme for a consistent abab syllablic count, but that is a minor concern. A nice portrait of ephemeral beauty. Great juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Nice use of the 7/6/7/6 syllabic form. Again, I wonder if lines five and seven should rhyme for a consistent abab syllablic count, but that is a minor concern. A nice portrait of ephemeral beauty. Great juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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I like the abcb rhyme scheme - not that I've never used abab, but abcb often sounds more natural to me. Thank you, Alvin - and rot on all those conference people who think they all have a monopoly on what is "correct." Should not people like that become accountants??? Brooke
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God, I don't know. They called me (in front of the patron who was sponsoring my trip and had gone out of his way to make restaurants available to them at a moment's notice) a "con man." He was appalled; I was stunned.
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a con man? I am dumbfounded
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One of the proclaimed experts was curious as to Ritchie's and my relationship. I said Ritchie had taken care of me while I was sick. Then this guy pressed us both on what was wrong with me. I finally told him I was dying (the weakened heart condition.) That's when he called me a con man because he thought I was lying. No, I don't understand it, either; neither did the other people at the table.
Comment from Peter@Poole
These are such gorgeous lines, Brooke. You often inject such joyfulness into your poems, especially those that mention or reflect on childhood pleasures or memories. The rhyming is delicious. Peter
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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These are such gorgeous lines, Brooke. You often inject such joyfulness into your poems, especially those that mention or reflect on childhood pleasures or memories. The rhyming is delicious. Peter
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Peter, thank you - I so prefer joy to misery in poems - not that there's no place for unhappy poems, but most of the time it is not my thing. Brooke
Comment from grassroots08
Your best phrase for my money is: "Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death." This was well penned - as usual. You do well to never disappoint us. Good job with these lines - easy to see. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Your best phrase for my money is: "Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death." This was well penned - as usual. You do well to never disappoint us. Good job with these lines - easy to see. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Don, thanks so much for your most encouraging comments, Brooke
Comment from BethShelby
Ah... the memories this brings back of those childhood days when we were intrigues by the rainbow hues of the bubbles we blew. This is great little poem with good rhyme that flows along. The picture is perfect for it. I love your last verse.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Ah... the memories this brings back of those childhood days when we were intrigues by the rainbow hues of the bubbles we blew. This is great little poem with good rhyme that flows along. The picture is perfect for it. I love your last verse.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Beth, glad you have common memories of lovely bubbles :-) Thanks for your kind comments, Brooke
Comment from bard owl
Your reflections on fleeting beauty are ones that we should take to heart. For every life is like the bubble of which you speak, and if we live our lives beautifully then there will be no regret on our part. That may be more meaning than you intended. However you meant this poem to read, it is extraordinary in depth. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Your reflections on fleeting beauty are ones that we should take to heart. For every life is like the bubble of which you speak, and if we live our lives beautifully then there will be no regret on our part. That may be more meaning than you intended. However you meant this poem to read, it is extraordinary in depth. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Linda, No, I meant quite a bit of meaning :-D thanks so much for your insightful comments! Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Nice cadence and really strong imagery.
You give the simplest things such beauty. I enjoyed this, Brooke.
I especially liked the last stanza:
Such exquisite creations
are born from children's breath -- NICE!
Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death. <- Satisfying closure to this poem.
Great writing.
~Nic
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Nice cadence and really strong imagery.
You give the simplest things such beauty. I enjoyed this, Brooke.
I especially liked the last stanza:
Such exquisite creations
are born from children's breath -- NICE!
Nobody mourns the breaking
when beauty precedes death. <- Satisfying closure to this poem.
Great writing.
~Nic
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Nic, thank you for your lovely comments - glad you enjoyed this! Brooke
Comment from womanwriter
Well done indeed!
I have always liked blowing bubbles - I have carried a vial of 'bubble soap' in my purse for almost 20 years now, and I can't tell you how many times I have refilled it. Some people know me as the 'crazy lady I saw blowing bubbles in Wal-Mart!'What can I say? It relieves stress, and not just for me. It's great to see someone laugh-out-loud when I do it in an unconventional place - perhaps the 'mood' should strike me even more than it already does. LOL
Thanks for sharing!
Sincerely,
womanwriter
PS May I please have your permission to print out? I'd like nothing more than to hang it in my kitchen where I have a beautiful picture of 'bubbles'.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Well done indeed!
I have always liked blowing bubbles - I have carried a vial of 'bubble soap' in my purse for almost 20 years now, and I can't tell you how many times I have refilled it. Some people know me as the 'crazy lady I saw blowing bubbles in Wal-Mart!'What can I say? It relieves stress, and not just for me. It's great to see someone laugh-out-loud when I do it in an unconventional place - perhaps the 'mood' should strike me even more than it already does. LOL
Thanks for sharing!
Sincerely,
womanwriter
PS May I please have your permission to print out? I'd like nothing more than to hang it in my kitchen where I have a beautiful picture of 'bubbles'.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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You may certainly print this out - anyone who blows bubbles in Walmart is OK by me!! In the real world my name is Brooke Baldwin, so please just put it with the poem :-) Thank you for your great review, Brooke
