Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "If I Controlled the Hands of Time"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from HarmonyIsle
I was sifting through some of your work and came across this piece. I really enjoy the flow and the premise of this work. I see that it was written in the constraints of a contest. Sometimes this can give a writer pause and cause them to unbalance their flow - but yours was wonderful.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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I was sifting through some of your work and came across this piece. I really enjoy the flow and the premise of this work. I see that it was written in the constraints of a contest. Sometimes this can give a writer pause and cause them to unbalance their flow - but yours was wonderful.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2009
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Thank you - I have not written many triolets, and this was my first one, so it is lovely to hear your compliments :-) Brooke
Comment from Mischief's Momma
Of all the experiences we have in life, isn't it so true that the moment of true excitement as we become fully connected to someone is one of the things we will always remember.
Great job, Brooke!
Sharon
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2009
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Of all the experiences we have in life, isn't it so true that the moment of true excitement as we become fully connected to someone is one of the things we will always remember.
Great job, Brooke!
Sharon
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2009
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Sharon, thank you - you are such a loyal reader!!! Brooke
Comment from jack silver
this was a wonderful poem about love. it was really splendidly written. if their was one time i wish i could change or repeat it would be to relive the day i proposed to Nattily so that she could kiss me again when she excepted my offer to be with me until life itself ends.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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this was a wonderful poem about love. it was really splendidly written. if their was one time i wish i could change or repeat it would be to relive the day i proposed to Nattily so that she could kiss me again when she excepted my offer to be with me until life itself ends.
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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Jack, what a sweet husband you must be!! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from howling harp
very nice. the question still remains what day would that be? i love it when i'm left without the answer although its likely right in front of me. i do love the topic of time. a favorite way of mine to pass some...write about it. great bounce to this piece!! see ya soon howling
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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very nice. the question still remains what day would that be? i love it when i'm left without the answer although its likely right in front of me. i do love the topic of time. a favorite way of mine to pass some...write about it. great bounce to this piece!! see ya soon howling
Comment Written 09-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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Oh, it is a composite of days from long ago - the person who shared those days with me has passed on to the great beyond, so my secrets are safe! :-D Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
The triolet form with its repeats was the perfect form for your theme, especially since you chose to repeat that key, powerful line and title. The magical picture you selected was such a good match too.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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The triolet form with its repeats was the perfect form for your theme, especially since you chose to repeat that key, powerful line and title. The magical picture you selected was such a good match too.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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I've never written one before - the key really is finding those two lines that can be repeated without sounding bizarre! thank you, Brooke
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Thanks for that insight since I've never tried one. Maybe with your advice in mind, I could give the form a try.
Comment from Fleedleflump
You've taken a potentially very awkward format and made it look like your poem just happened to come out that way, which is as it should be; you've chosen the perfect subject, whereby the repetition is natural and in theme, and it's a pretty little piece to boot!
Mike
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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You've taken a potentially very awkward format and made it look like your poem just happened to come out that way, which is as it should be; you've chosen the perfect subject, whereby the repetition is natural and in theme, and it's a pretty little piece to boot!
Mike
Comment Written 09-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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Mike, I've never written a triolet before, and you're right - it is one that does not seem all that natural. I'm SO glad you think I pulled off making it sound natural. Thank you!! Brooke :-)
Comment from sara-beth
This is beautiful, and nostalgic. The form is right on of course, and it has a lovely flow. I suppose every one has a day they'd like to do over. Wouldn't that be great!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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This is beautiful, and nostalgic. The form is right on of course, and it has a lovely flow. I suppose every one has a day they'd like to do over. Wouldn't that be great!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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Sara-beth, thank you so much for your kind comments and positive review, Brooke :-)
Comment from Poetic Friend
Brooke, I love this poetic form, and you crafted it so well. I love the traditiional tone. I am not surprised that the poem was chosen winner in the contest.
Who wouldn't want to recreate/relive such a memorable moment -- when passion touch sublime (such a classic and romantic line)?
Great job, as usual, Brooke.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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Brooke, I love this poetic form, and you crafted it so well. I love the traditiional tone. I am not surprised that the poem was chosen winner in the contest.
Who wouldn't want to recreate/relive such a memorable moment -- when passion touch sublime (such a classic and romantic line)?
Great job, as usual, Brooke.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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It is the first time I tried a triolet, so I'm so glad I managed to create a traditional tone. Thank you for your most encouraging comments, Brooke :-)
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Brooke,
This is sweet- romantic and different
from your usual. I enjoyed it and its
rhythmic pattern.
I like the firecracker pic, too!
ellie
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke,
This is sweet- romantic and different
from your usual. I enjoyed it and its
rhythmic pattern.
I like the firecracker pic, too!
ellie
Comment Written 09-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2009
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Ellie, yes, it is my first triolet, so quite different - thank you! Brooke
Comment from davidray
Hi Brooke,
As always, I really enjoyed the message and the way you used your words so efficiently. Splendid work. Thanx as well for explaining the rules to the format of poem.
Best wishes in the contest.
Always,
David
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009
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Hi Brooke,
As always, I really enjoyed the message and the way you used your words so efficiently. Splendid work. Thanx as well for explaining the rules to the format of poem.
Best wishes in the contest.
Always,
David
Comment Written 08-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009
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David, thank you. It won in a tie :-) Brooke
