CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Consanguinity"A collection of poetry
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Comment from bard owl
Your message truly made a word teacup. It is one of the first I have seen that does. I particularly liked the last line of this - family DOES matter. Excellent contest entry, Sue. Best of luck. Blessings to you, Linda.
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Your message truly made a word teacup. It is one of the first I have seen that does. I particularly liked the last line of this - family DOES matter. Excellent contest entry, Sue. Best of luck. Blessings to you, Linda.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from mmichelle97219
the ties that bind are mor then blood they are a shared history. I thought this was a very good poem, and stuck to the style well. Good luck in the contest.
Michelle
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the ties that bind are mor then blood they are a shared history. I thought this was a very good poem, and stuck to the style well. Good luck in the contest.
Michelle
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from fayesh
This was a great teacup dictionary word, but I am really surprised that you didn't actually go for the actual origin of the word - Latin "of the same blood" and say "blood relative"(4 syllables) for the rim, or maybe you're only allowed to use one word. Anyway, a very nice effort.
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This was a great teacup dictionary word, but I am really surprised that you didn't actually go for the actual origin of the word - Latin "of the same blood" and say "blood relative"(4 syllables) for the rim, or maybe you're only allowed to use one word. Anyway, a very nice effort.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from Lokman
Wow, nicely done choosing your topic and then using the perfect langauge to make it work, all the while with a design. Excellent read.
Lokman
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Wow, nicely done choosing your topic and then using the perfect langauge to make it work, all the while with a design. Excellent read.
Lokman
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
You're so very clever. I wouldn't know where to begin in such a construction. This is very good indeed (as usual from your pen).
No faults, great writing.
All the best.
Kat
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You're so very clever. I wouldn't know where to begin in such a construction. This is very good indeed (as usual from your pen).
No faults, great writing.
All the best.
Kat
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from Firefly54
Hey - this is just so clever! I'm glad you put the author notes in to explain it, although I saw a perfect tea cup immediately and guessed the connection between lines, it was good to have confirmation! Good luck
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Hey - this is just so clever! I'm glad you put the author notes in to explain it, although I saw a perfect tea cup immediately and guessed the connection between lines, it was good to have confirmation! Good luck
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
Comment from glacierbabe
This was great. I read your author notes and it is a good thing I did LOL They are greatly appreciated and helped me to understand this form of poetry. This is well done and should be a contender in the contest. Best of luck :)
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This was great. I read your author notes and it is a good thing I did LOL They are greatly appreciated and helped me to understand this form of poetry. This is well done and should be a contender in the contest. Best of luck :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
Comment from sharon fallis
I love your excellent formatting. I have heard of 'shapes' poems, but had not seen many. None like this one. I really love the Idea and the context of this one. One of these days I will have to give it some serious thought and try it. Sharon
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I love your excellent formatting. I have heard of 'shapes' poems, but had not seen many. None like this one. I really love the Idea and the context of this one. One of these days I will have to give it some serious thought and try it. Sharon
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
When I read the contest's description, I couldn't help but hearing the "I'm a little teapot short and stout..." jingle. However, you handled the task beautifully. What a fabulous and unusual word choice. You brought the word and the teacup to life and summarized perfectly with your final line.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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When I read the contest's description, I couldn't help but hearing the "I'm a little teapot short and stout..." jingle. However, you handled the task beautifully. What a fabulous and unusual word choice. You brought the word and the teacup to life and summarized perfectly with your final line.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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"Here is my handle and here is my spout!" HA!! I love exercising with words. Helps so much with writing and couldn't pass this one up. Thanks much for your very kind (and fun) review! Sue
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We sound so much alike--exercising words. I couldn't pass up the winter haiku contest where I used "icing window's mist" as the title and then the first line, inverting the sentence structure between it and the second line. We are addicted--that's all there is to it. But, it is great fun!
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We sound so much alike--exercising with words. I couldn't pass up the winter haiku contest where I used "icing window's mist" as the title and then the first line, inverting the sentence structure between it and the second line. We are addicted--that's all there is to it. But, it is great fun!
Comment from skye
Form and structure are very nice in this shaped form.
Your words convey terrific images and make family feel great, in all its layers of relationships.
Very well done.
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Form and structure are very nice in this shaped form.
Your words convey terrific images and make family feel great, in all its layers of relationships.
Very well done.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2009
