A Leaf on the Wind
Autobiography of abuse12 total reviews
Comment from Frank Ball
Rating of Chapter 9 - Fear
This horrific story is related to us in vivid detail, withholding nothing. We feel the pain and anguish portrayed with writing skills. I see no way that I could suggest making it any more believable.
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This horrific story is related to us in vivid detail, withholding nothing. We feel the pain and anguish portrayed with writing skills. I see no way that I could suggest making it any more believable.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
Comment from Aspiring2Write
Rating of Chapter 11 - God Doesn't Care
God does care for people. The worldview of this person that is shown here is perfection. Even a hundred Hail Marys could not pay the price of her pain. Only Jesus can satisfy her pain and give her comfort. I urge you to consider the grace and love of God. Look in the Bible in john 3:16-17 and you will find your answer. Wish you the best in your writing.
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God does care for people. The worldview of this person that is shown here is perfection. Even a hundred Hail Marys could not pay the price of her pain. Only Jesus can satisfy her pain and give her comfort. I urge you to consider the grace and love of God. Look in the Bible in john 3:16-17 and you will find your answer. Wish you the best in your writing.
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2021
Comment from Teresa Alford
Rating of Chapter 74 - A Leaf on the Wind
Excellent, Very moving story, including the addendum. I appreciate the dialogue, as it brings the relationship to life. This is obviously a story you have given a lot of attention to and I am sure it will uplifting to those who have experienced similar backgrounds. Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Excellent, Very moving story, including the addendum. I appreciate the dialogue, as it brings the relationship to life. This is obviously a story you have given a lot of attention to and I am sure it will uplifting to those who have experienced similar backgrounds. Keep on writing.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Thanks for the positive comments. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from sajeda6
Rating of Chapter 74 - A Leaf on the Wind
This is such a detailed piece of work. I really enjoyed reading it. I wanted to carry on reading to find out what happens. It shows a lovely relationship between mother and daughter , how much a mother always worries about her children rather than herself. Its always hard to live without loved ones, specially one's mother. Its nice to read that Valerie continues with her life and was happy. Lovely work
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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This is such a detailed piece of work. I really enjoyed reading it. I wanted to carry on reading to find out what happens. It shows a lovely relationship between mother and daughter , how much a mother always worries about her children rather than herself. Its always hard to live without loved ones, specially one's mother. Its nice to read that Valerie continues with her life and was happy. Lovely work
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Thank you. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Comment from Robert colley
Rating of Chapter 45 - Saying Goodbye
I can see why you are in the top 3 . And it's worth everything you given in life to pursue what is your life's calling. I just hope you keep that dream alive and don't give up!!!!!
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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I can see why you are in the top 3 . And it's worth everything you given in life to pursue what is your life's calling. I just hope you keep that dream alive and don't give up!!!!!
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much for your gracious review, I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from baustian64
Rating of Chapter 9 - Fear
This poor girl. You have written about her with great feeling. You have caught the fear she felt and let us the readers know how terrified she was. Very good job.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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This poor girl. You have written about her with great feeling. You have caught the fear she felt and let us the readers know how terrified she was. Very good job.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thank you so very much. This was a difficult chapter to write and, obviously, a difficult event to experience.
Comment from AuroraSky
Rating of Chapter 9 - Fear
Written so descriptively, perpetrators can't deny the trauma and cruelty inflicted by their actions.
I found an edit in the first paragraph (background) - 'Having no frinds/friends'.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Written so descriptively, perpetrators can't deny the trauma and cruelty inflicted by their actions.
I found an edit in the first paragraph (background) - 'Having no frinds/friends'.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks for catching the spag. This is a strong chapter and a difficult one for me to write. I am so pleased I was able to convey the reality of the trauma I experienced.
Comment from Shayrenee'
Rating of Chapter 9 - Fear
This was very well written. Even though I had not read any of the previous chapters, I think I had a good sense of the beginning. The slower developing child is not in the lime light, so she is the one constantly abused. I'm curious about a couple things: 1. The animosity that the Sister(Teacher) shows towards her. Is that because she recognizes the signs of abuse in the girl and resents it? The story read like she herself was a victim of some sort of abuse underneath things. 2. Are you also trying to point out the ignorance of the mother? Or maybe her denial; like she herself was a victim due to the father always being drunk. I find it hard to believe that the father did not have any blood on him if he was so drunk he passed out face down in the bed. 3. I'm not understanding where the gash came from at her opening. It had to have come from the father's belt right? He had only unzipped his pants, indicating that he was fully dressed. 4. Back at the school, did someone knock her out with a chemical? Was that the odor she smelled? Why would they do that? Was someone also taking advantage of her at school? I am trying to understand the stomach hurting part. A part of me thought she was pregnant, but then she said that her father (up until this day) had only used his fingers with her; and clearly he was her first. So that part is confusing.
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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This was very well written. Even though I had not read any of the previous chapters, I think I had a good sense of the beginning. The slower developing child is not in the lime light, so she is the one constantly abused. I'm curious about a couple things: 1. The animosity that the Sister(Teacher) shows towards her. Is that because she recognizes the signs of abuse in the girl and resents it? The story read like she herself was a victim of some sort of abuse underneath things. 2. Are you also trying to point out the ignorance of the mother? Or maybe her denial; like she herself was a victim due to the father always being drunk. I find it hard to believe that the father did not have any blood on him if he was so drunk he passed out face down in the bed. 3. I'm not understanding where the gash came from at her opening. It had to have come from the father's belt right? He had only unzipped his pants, indicating that he was fully dressed. 4. Back at the school, did someone knock her out with a chemical? Was that the odor she smelled? Why would they do that? Was someone also taking advantage of her at school? I am trying to understand the stomach hurting part. A part of me thought she was pregnant, but then she said that her father (up until this day) had only used his fingers with her; and clearly he was her first. So that part is confusing.
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Without having read the entire book some of these questions are difficult to answer. The book was intentionally written from my POV as a child, not relating the story while sitting on a therapist's couch. The smells are a clinical attribute of DID or disassociative disorder. As a child I had no idea how a person got pregnant and assumed just being touched was all it took. I had no one to answer my questions and did the best an uninformed child could do to answer them myself. My mother and sisters were aware of my father's behavior but chose to ignore it. My teachers had not idea of the abuse and treated me badly because I was unlikable and a poor student. Being a child, I had no way of knowing why they disliked me other than I was't as smart as my older sister, something they drilled into me daily. Although this is only chapter 9, the previous chapters address many of these issues as do the following chapters. Being a child, this was as much a learning experience for me as it was for the reader. I wanted them to experience what I experienced. I obviously had questions but no one to ask them. I had to answer them myself...which clearly I was not qualified to do since the abuse began at such an early age.. I have no memories of a time when I was not abuse. It encompassed my entire life from my first memories until my mid teens. The physical symptoms I describe are addressed in future chapters. Most were the beginning signs of severe mental deterioration. I eventually was diagnosed with early onset DID, PTSD and Borderline Personality Disorder all result to the abuse I experienced as a child. To be honest, the only way to get the answers to your questions is to read the entire book from beginning to end. I am not trying to promote it, it is available for free in my portfolio on FS.
Comment from ideal1
Rating of Chapter 9 - Fear
I like that the story gives a very descriptive and accurate vision of what happened to Valerie. Not only what happened to her physically but also what happened to her emotionally following the rape.
Because of this type of incident being such a sensitive issue, I believe some of the details of the rape could be let out and leave to the readers imagination.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I like that the story gives a very descriptive and accurate vision of what happened to Valerie. Not only what happened to her physically but also what happened to her emotionally following the rape.
Because of this type of incident being such a sensitive issue, I believe some of the details of the rape could be let out and leave to the readers imagination.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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In my revised book, Celebrate the Dandelions, I left out most of the graphic details of the rape. I agree, it is a sensitive issue, but one that far too many fail to realize leaves life-long scars on the child
Comment from John A Catania
Rating of Chapter 8 - Daddy's Girl
This story eats my inner soul as i am a relaist and know things like this truely happen.I also see that people sometimes write to get things off their mind so they can cope. I can only pray they seek forgiveness in the lord as this is a heart breaking tale of how child abuse reaches its worst. God bless me and my current thoughts for I know what i do.
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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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This story eats my inner soul as i am a relaist and know things like this truely happen.I also see that people sometimes write to get things off their mind so they can cope. I can only pray they seek forgiveness in the lord as this is a heart breaking tale of how child abuse reaches its worst. God bless me and my current thoughts for I know what i do.
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Comment Written 31-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Thanks. I am pleased this moved you.
