Jack in the Pulpit
Reflective Quatrains86 total reviews
Comment from Mischief's Momma
You know I think that sometimes folks try and get very formulaic about poetry. While understanding iambic meter is very helpful, it is not all there is by any means.
I like the meshing of your Sunday flower experiences with the traditional "Sunday" (the only day for some folks) moments of pasing to have compassion for others.
Sharon
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
  |
You know I think that sometimes folks try and get very formulaic about poetry. While understanding iambic meter is very helpful, it is not all there is by any means.
I like the meshing of your Sunday flower experiences with the traditional "Sunday" (the only day for some folks) moments of pasing to have compassion for others.
Sharon
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
-
Sharon, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Fabulous cadence! This almost sounds like a song, and what a lovely song it would be. :)
A very creative approach with your play on words, Brooke. I read this several times. I love it.
No suggestions. This is fabulous.
~Nic
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
|
Fabulous cadence! This almost sounds like a song, and what a lovely song it would be. :)
A very creative approach with your play on words, Brooke. I read this several times. I love it.
No suggestions. This is fabulous.
~Nic
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
-
Nic, thank you for your kind words and for reading it more than once - your reviews always make me feel so good! Brooke
Comment from jdrhye
Thank you for the author notes, they gave a new dimention to this piece. i like the way you have made the reverence of a feeling connect with your subjects imagery and the connection of endearment for the children, etc., ect.. Love the picture and the way the bloom looks as though it is hiding under its huge leaf which also has many dual messages for the reader who sees the relevance. Happy tuesday.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
|
Thank you for the author notes, they gave a new dimention to this piece. i like the way you have made the reverence of a feeling connect with your subjects imagery and the connection of endearment for the children, etc., ect.. Love the picture and the way the bloom looks as though it is hiding under its huge leaf which also has many dual messages for the reader who sees the relevance. Happy tuesday.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
-
Thank you for this most thoughtful review - I love your comments, and happy Tuesday to you too! Brooke
-
You are most welcome!
Comment from Jo Taylor
Hi Brooke -
I don't really feel qualified to critique poetry, but I know fabulous when I see it.
Thank you for the hint to read it with the Jack in the Pulpit rhythm.
I read this because I LOVE them. Used to find them in the woods in Harford County east of Baltimore when I was a kid. I live in California now, so I miss them and hadn't thought about them for ages. Thanks for the moment of sweet childhood.
Brilliant use of allegory. Thank you. Such a pleasure to read.
Jo
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
 |
Hi Brooke -
I don't really feel qualified to critique poetry, but I know fabulous when I see it.
Thank you for the hint to read it with the Jack in the Pulpit rhythm.
I read this because I LOVE them. Used to find them in the woods in Harford County east of Baltimore when I was a kid. I live in California now, so I miss them and hadn't thought about them for ages. Thanks for the moment of sweet childhood.
Brilliant use of allegory. Thank you. Such a pleasure to read.
Jo
Comment Written 03-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
-
So many people on site have never seen one or even heard of them, so I'm so glad you have had this wonderful opportunity.
Thank you for your gloriously positive and generous review!!!! Brooke :-D
Comment from QuietMtnSunrise
I live on the west coast, and call me crazy, but I'd never even heard of a "Jack in the pulpit" before. =) I like the cadence of this poem, but especially like the line "Give to the silent, strong and sure voices..." That was very powerful imagery. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
|
I live on the west coast, and call me crazy, but I'd never even heard of a "Jack in the pulpit" before. =) I like the cadence of this poem, but especially like the line "Give to the silent, strong and sure voices..." That was very powerful imagery. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
-
They are definitely just an East coast flower and not even all my East coast readers know them, which is a shame because they are gorgeous!!! Thank you so much for this most generous rating and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from LynnRadford
The rare beauty of these woodland dwellers was honored her within the frame of your reverent and imaginative poem.
I enjoyed hearing the back story in your author's notes.
Thanks for sharing, Brooke!
Lynn
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
|
The rare beauty of these woodland dwellers was honored her within the frame of your reverent and imaginative poem.
I enjoyed hearing the back story in your author's notes.
Thanks for sharing, Brooke!
Lynn
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
-
Lynn, thank you so much for your kind comments, Brooke
Comment from Sardinesandsucker
Helllo Brooke, As I never read for meter or tings like that your poem seems quite dreamy to me. I am reminded of a small plant that grew in the mountains of West Virginia. One spring my dad's mother and her fourth husband and I went in search of these little plants so that Hazel could cook up a batch of them. I have no idea what they were called. I just remember how small they were. Another soothing poem.
Peace and long life
Sandina
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
|
Helllo Brooke, As I never read for meter or tings like that your poem seems quite dreamy to me. I am reminded of a small plant that grew in the mountains of West Virginia. One spring my dad's mother and her fourth husband and I went in search of these little plants so that Hazel could cook up a batch of them. I have no idea what they were called. I just remember how small they were. Another soothing poem.
Peace and long life
Sandina
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
-
Sandina - thank you so much for another lovely review and for sharing your experiences. It would not have been this plant as it is poisonous :-) Brooke
Comment from fayesh
While I enjoyed the image of this wildflower serving a spiritual purpose, the last stanza could have been more concrete in its imagery rather than deal with abstract adjectives - strong, meek, justice.
For example:
Preacher in the woodland
please intercede
for the creatures both tall and small
that nature did breed
Give solace and strength to the timid hare
and compassion to a growling bear.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
 |
While I enjoyed the image of this wildflower serving a spiritual purpose, the last stanza could have been more concrete in its imagery rather than deal with abstract adjectives - strong, meek, justice.
For example:
Preacher in the woodland
please intercede
for the creatures both tall and small
that nature did breed
Give solace and strength to the timid hare
and compassion to a growling bear.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
-
thank you for your review and input, Brooke
Comment from Gramma Kathy
This is truly wonderful. I love the rhythm, rhyme and message in this poem. I realize it's early in the week to be giving out six stars, but this deserves it.
I have seen photos of this tiny plant but have never seen one in real life. Thank you for sharing your memories of your childhood flower forages. Sounds like very special times.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
|
This is truly wonderful. I love the rhythm, rhyme and message in this poem. I realize it's early in the week to be giving out six stars, but this deserves it.
I have seen photos of this tiny plant but have never seen one in real life. Thank you for sharing your memories of your childhood flower forages. Sounds like very special times.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
-
Early in the week? Many people have gotten rid of them by Sunday afternoon! LOL Thanks so much for your generosity and your lovely comments. They are glorious to see in person and not all that tiny. Brooke
Comment from raimie
I had never heard of or seen such a flower! Thanks so much for the education :) beuatifully written and a pleasure to read!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
|
I had never heard of or seen such a flower! Thanks so much for the education :) beuatifully written and a pleasure to read!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
-
I'm so glad I could introduce you to this gorgeous flower. Thanks, Brooke :-)
