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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Interview"Telepathy makes business trust easy. Or should.
4 total reviews
Comment from WRITER1
Another good story, will be checking out the next chapter. I think the guild is a bunch of stinkers! That remains to be seen. No revision needed.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Another good story, will be checking out the next chapter. I think the guild is a bunch of stinkers! That remains to be seen. No revision needed.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Yes. I think Ted might have another word for them. Thanks for the review
Comment from Adri7enne
Coming right along, snodlander. Am starting to feel sympathy for Laura and getting pretty suspicious of the Guild. You're building good tension. I find myself wanting to skim through to the end. But I resisted and read it all the way. I do that when I'm really caught in a story. You're doing a find job of keeping me interested. Way to go!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Coming right along, snodlander. Am starting to feel sympathy for Laura and getting pretty suspicious of the Guild. You're building good tension. I find myself wanting to skim through to the end. But I resisted and read it all the way. I do that when I'm really caught in a story. You're doing a find job of keeping me interested. Way to go!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I'm flattered.
Comment from carl8447
I remember this story. It's starting to gel, your narrative is going in a good direction and I'm not confused. I think you have something good here.
Carl
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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I remember this story. It's starting to gel, your narrative is going in a good direction and I'm not confused. I think you have something good here.
Carl
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I'm glad you approve.
Comment from yachtworknz
Snoolander-Love the plot going here. I think you have a good one going.
I think I read a couple other chapters of this. I think your plot progression to description is good along with the amount of dialog. It works and keeps me reading.
Looking forward to the next read.
Cheers
Scott
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Snoolander-Love the plot going here. I think you have a good one going.
I think I read a couple other chapters of this. I think your plot progression to description is good along with the amount of dialog. It works and keeps me reading.
Looking forward to the next read.
Cheers
Scott
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I'll nod sagely and pretend I did all those technical things on purpose.
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Your doing great.
Check out Oncoming American -123 words I just posted in my portfolio.
Cheers
Scott
