Blood Relations - A Vampire Tale
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Jason Returns"Some bloodlines run very deep.
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Comment from K-Patrick
Ok you have peaked my interest. Now I have to read the preceeding chapters.
As fo a review: the disriptions and dialogue is very well and offers realism.
I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Ok you have peaked my interest. Now I have to read the preceeding chapters.
As fo a review: the disriptions and dialogue is very well and offers realism.
I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Than you for your encouraging and wonderful review, K-Patrick!
Comment from Stuart7
I was never a fan of vampire tales until i began
reading on this site, not i am hooked. This is
well written and edited, flows nicely and important
thing is, it left me wanting to read more.
Regards Stuart.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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I was never a fan of vampire tales until i began
reading on this site, not i am hooked. This is
well written and edited, flows nicely and important
thing is, it left me wanting to read more.
Regards Stuart.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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And that what it's all about, hooking the reader so they want to read more! Thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging review Stuart7!
Comment from carl8447
A thriller in a theme park? Sounds cool to me, I will be reading more of this, this is cool. Good work and great read
Good job
Carl
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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A thriller in a theme park? Sounds cool to me, I will be reading more of this, this is cool. Good work and great read
Good job
Carl
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Thank you so much carl8447!
Comment from angel of the quill
I sit and wait for the next chapter as planned
you know exactly what to say to make me wait don't you.
that is a lot of talent and I must say I am hoping to see this actually expanded and put on the market
you have a very good story going
and I am enjoying every word.
excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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I sit and wait for the next chapter as planned
you know exactly what to say to make me wait don't you.
that is a lot of talent and I must say I am hoping to see this actually expanded and put on the market
you have a very good story going
and I am enjoying every word.
excellent chapter.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Thank you for this very encouraging and exceptional review!!! I think the next chapter Stan will try and save a life. Jason's just getting started, LOL. Thank you again! :)
Comment from yachtworknz
NightWriter-Nice work. Lets look at the opening bit-
Lori pushed the button on top turning it off. She
This could be stronger by- Lori slammed the snooze button and fell back asleep.
Lets look some more-
The basement was dark and cool and smelled damp. Ghosts appeared everywhere dancing and floating through the fog and darkness.
I think this would be stronger by ending with "dark fog." stronger and less words.
Nice work.
Cheers
Scott
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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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NightWriter-Nice work. Lets look at the opening bit-
Lori pushed the button on top turning it off. She
This could be stronger by- Lori slammed the snooze button and fell back asleep.
Lets look some more-
The basement was dark and cool and smelled damp. Ghosts appeared everywhere dancing and floating through the fog and darkness.
I think this would be stronger by ending with "dark fog." stronger and less words.
Nice work.
Cheers
Scott
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Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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I like your suggestions. Thank you! Thanks also for your wonderful review.
Comment from jmkenpo
NightWriter,
Interesting. I am looking forward to seeing where this one goes. This is not the typical type of material that I find intriguing but I must say that I was drawn in and thoroughly enjoyed the detail in this chapter. Its always a great read when you can picture something in your mind while engrossed in the reading. Very well done. Thank you - jmkenpo
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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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NightWriter,
Interesting. I am looking forward to seeing where this one goes. This is not the typical type of material that I find intriguing but I must say that I was drawn in and thoroughly enjoyed the detail in this chapter. Its always a great read when you can picture something in your mind while engrossed in the reading. Very well done. Thank you - jmkenpo
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Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2009
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Thank you jmkenpo! You picked up what I tried to do, that being to make it visual. Thank you so much for your encouraging remarks. It means even more that even though you don't find this material intriguing, you were drawn in and enjoyed the story. Thank you.
