Comment from WRITER1

Excellent

Very good, so far I liked the explanation's to why she can't hear him, will be waiting for next chapter. No revision needed.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2009

Thank you. I'm glad you like it.

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

God, what an imagination! And thought-provoking ideas. It's obvious you've thought a lot about the nature of thought. It's intriguing to see the twists and turns in your thinking, and where your imagination goes. Very well done. I'm not sure about the verb "to learn" . I'd check out the past tense on that. I'm not sure you can say:"learnt". Don't think so.

"She has learnt of murderer who ..." Should be: "She has learnED of A murderer..."

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2009

I can say learnt, as well as spelt. I'm English. It's the way we spell it 8^) You're right about a murderer though.

Thanks for your review and your kind words.

Comment from prodigal

Excellent

This was a very well written and entertaining chapter. Should the sections of the history lesson have " " on them? I am not sure. The story caught my attention right away, a reader who cannot hear anothers thoughts. This is unique and therefore interesting. Well done- Sam

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2009

Thanks. All though it's a story that is being told, I didn't write it as direct speech, so I left the quotes off.

Glad you liked it