cinquains
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Comment from nukrz
That truly is exceptional. I dont know what to say on it. It was knowing and obvious! You wrote it awesome! and the picture kicks ass! Good Job!
Always Joanie xXx
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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That truly is exceptional. I dont know what to say on it. It was knowing and obvious! You wrote it awesome! and the picture kicks ass! Good Job!
Always Joanie xXx
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2009
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Joanie, thank you so much for this most generous response to my poem - I am honored and most appreciative. :-) Brooke
Comment from Penya
I like this poem. It quite clearly defines the term "enlightenment" - solid. I think that the wording of the fourth line is weird - do you think it might be better to change "each question gives who seeks the chance to grow" to "each question is the seeker's chance to grow"? It's the same syllable count and I just think it sounds less awkward. What do you think?
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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I like this poem. It quite clearly defines the term "enlightenment" - solid. I think that the wording of the fourth line is weird - do you think it might be better to change "each question gives who seeks the chance to grow" to "each question is the seeker's chance to grow"? It's the same syllable count and I just think it sounds less awkward. What do you think?
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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I will think about it :-) I need to read it over a few times each way. Thanks for your thoughtful input and your kind review, Brooke
Comment from RADIO
very well put in this short poem
Enlightenment grows brighter only
of course if we pursue it by asking
questions. therein is the path to
wisdom. Everyday is a learning day
if we so desire. Another gem for you.
Radio
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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very well put in this short poem
Enlightenment grows brighter only
of course if we pursue it by asking
questions. therein is the path to
wisdom. Everyday is a learning day
if we so desire. Another gem for you.
Radio
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Radio, thank you for your insightful comments, Brooke
Comment from palsuresh
"While in search for truth, to ask is not to know but to grow."
A great philosophy is being expressed in a sweet short poetic form.
But the truth ne'er gets revealed in a sweet short period of time. To say in an exaggerated way- "One life is not enough."
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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"While in search for truth, to ask is not to know but to grow."
A great philosophy is being expressed in a sweet short poetic form.
But the truth ne'er gets revealed in a sweet short period of time. To say in an exaggerated way- "One life is not enough."
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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I thank you for your most generous rating and kind comments. I truly appreciate this! Back to your question about syllables - this cinquain, for instance, has the 2/4/6/8/2 count. Brooke
Comment from bard owl
I think that most of my life has been spent looking for the truth of what I see and hear and think and feel. This poem is excellently thought-provoking. Another expertly excuted cinquain, Brooke. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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I think that most of my life has been spent looking for the truth of what I see and hear and think and feel. This poem is excellently thought-provoking. Another expertly excuted cinquain, Brooke. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Linda, thank you for such perceptive comments, Brooke
Comment from XR15
Hi Again
I'd like to say "ditto" but that's not allowed.
If you're not an interior designer you ought to be - bet your home is beautiful - you have such a flair for putting words and pictures together so stylishly.
Cheers
once more
Chris
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Hi Again
I'd like to say "ditto" but that's not allowed.
If you're not an interior designer you ought to be - bet your home is beautiful - you have such a flair for putting words and pictures together so stylishly.
Cheers
once more
Chris
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Chris, what a lovely comment! thank you. Brooke
Comment from allborn66
This is a beautiful poem. I like the message. I like the flow. I like the form. It is very thought provoking. I love the picture.
Barbara
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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This is a beautiful poem. I like the message. I like the flow. I like the form. It is very thought provoking. I love the picture.
Barbara
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Barbara, thank you so much, Brooke
Comment from SunlitWhisper
I agree with this 200% too bad there are people who think they are so high up on the food chain that questions are an insult. I really love the art you found to accent your great wealth of words.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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I agree with this 200% too bad there are people who think they are so high up on the food chain that questions are an insult. I really love the art you found to accent your great wealth of words.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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You nailed that one - some people do act as if they are above it all! :-) Thank you, Brooke
Comment from justmade
Another really wonderful write.
I love the depth of its meaning especially how true this is.
AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME!
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Another really wonderful write.
I love the depth of its meaning especially how true this is.
AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME!
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Thank you for this most enthusiastic response! :-) Brooke
Comment from Charles Keith
Hi Brooke,
I didn't see this before. Good piece of philosophical thought.
I used to work as a research chemist and we allways were of the opinion we learned more from experiments that failed than from those that worked.
Best Wishes
Keith
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Hi Brooke,
I didn't see this before. Good piece of philosophical thought.
I used to work as a research chemist and we allways were of the opinion we learned more from experiments that failed than from those that worked.
Best Wishes
Keith
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Keith, researchers certainly understand the importance of questioning, even when the first answer is not the solution! Thank you, Brooke :-)
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By the way Brooke.
Did you check out c.sonnets? I'd be interested to know your opinion. I thought the displayed some impressive stuff.
K
