Comment from WRITER1

Excellent

A very good chapter, I like this story, it keeps me coming back. Waiting for the next installment. No need to do any revision. Good job.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009

Thanks. It wouldn't really work as a book if it didn't keep you coming back

Comment from tkmartin

Excellent

The same lovely, easy flow I have to enjoy from you. Excellent, tight and believable dialogue. I especially liked the hanger at the end.

One little spag for you:

There he is either lying or delusional - that

Am bookcasing so I can red some more. I am curious now.

cheers
TK

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009

Thank you. Maybe it's a UK construction, but I meant 'there'. I'll revisit it when I have some distance. I'm flattered by the bookmark.

reply by tkmartin on 17-Feb-2009

Definitely could be my interpretation, I did consider that when I pasted it!

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

hi there, this was quite an interesting read, humoruous too. well-written to the end, and i found nothing to bring to your attention. excellent dialogues.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from Tellis

Excellent

A good chapter and I laughed a little too when he surprised her. This chapter is written very well and I didn't notice any errors.

Tellis

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009

Thanks. I guess it was funny, but that was actually a plot point, which I'll expand in the next chapter or two (oh, I'm such a tease).